One day, Little Red Riding Hood set out to the woods to bring a basket of food to her grandmother who was feeling ill. Now, Little Red Riding Hood could have took the redbrick road through the woods, or she could have took the shortcut through all the trees. The red brick road was the safest way to go, but Little Red was in a rush to get there so she decided to take the shortcut.
She got deep into the woods but she knew where she was going. As she was walking through the trees, she could hear the cries of a wolf. She got a little worried but kept on going anyways.
There was a wolf hidden in the trees who saw Little Red. He decided to follow her and was planning to eat her. The wolf had not eaten in days and was glad to have found some fresh meat.
Eventually, Little Red did get to her dear grandmothers house. She knocked on the door and went in. She delivered her the basket of food and was ready to leave but when she opened the door, she saw a wolf standing there blocking her way out. The wolf pushed Little Red into a corner and tied her up. The wolf told her that this would be her last day. The wolf left Red in the corner and went over to the bed. The pulled Grandma out of the bed and bit her head right off her body. Red was crying and screaming because she was scared. The wolf finished eating the Grannie and then went over to Red to start feasting on her. The untied her from the rope and took his claws and squeezed her. Blood oozed out from parts of her body where the wolf had pierced his claws. Red screamed and the wolf dug his claws even deeper. Red was now dead.
The wolf finished up by chopping her up with his claws and then he ate all her pieces up. That was the end of Little Red Riding Hood.
Author notes
this story was not my best but i felt like writing so i just wrote wat came to mind at the momnet.
A contest entry
- Bedtime Story Gone Bad by Mai4ever.
290 points, ended January 9, 2007, 9 entries
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Different
Like you said, this wasn't your best and I strongly agree. You seemed to speed up in places and used less detail. Other than that, its actually quite amusing and completely different from the original.
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Strange
You should look into slowing down when you're typing, I can tell that you were getting a little bit ahead of yourself. I like the twist, though; I've always thought that Red deserved to get caught by the wolf. One more thing: past tense...use taken instead of took. Sorry, it's just a pet-peave.beginning: 1, language: 2, plot: 2, ending: 2, dialog: 2, characters: 3.
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That was way different from the original. As I'm one for themes of death, I like this better really. Good job!
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This is a very interesting story. I enjoyed reading it. Good luck in the contest. Keep up the writing. God Bless!
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wow. i like it. i laughed, cuz it was so different from the original.
like mai4ever said, its a good bed time story...for those who like blood....
love it! good luck in the contest!
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Very short but it has a nice little twist. Good for a short bedtime story. I like the description and flow to it. Very story-tellish like. Good work and good luck in the contest.
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