It was Novermber 22, 1963. The feeling of excitement that had filled the hearts of many people in this neighborhood had now died out. To think just yesterday, people of all kinds were strutting the streets with smiles on their faces and laughing while conversating with friends. Now people just walked quickly with either no expression or a frown on their face. All the stores that played music out loud for the passerbys to hear, turned of their radios. All the people who would go to those clubs for a drink and party, now just went for a quick drink and sat quietly until they needed to leave. The streets were empty of the kids who usually played on it. The kids who would play double-dutch, football and other games were now in their houses, quietly in their rooms just sitting there or finishing up their homework.
Why has everything changed in the coarse of one day? Because the beloeved President John Fitzgerald Kennedy was assasinated today. He was in a vechicle when someone shot a bullet to his head and to his throat.
I was there. I didn't quite see how it happened but I heard when the gunshots were fired. I was walking over to my friends house. His house was located near the road where Kennedy got shot. I heard the gunshot fire and all of the sudden a riot broke out. People were running everywhere. Even though I heard the bullet, I hadn't known what it was. When everyone started running in almost every direction, I got scaed and I ran home. I hadn't known what was going on till I got home. The TV was open and the reporter was talking about how the president had just died. I was shocked to hear this news report.
Though Kennedy was a democrat, he was so well respected that even those fellow republicans were shedding tear fors the loss of the dear president who had stayed strong through the toughest times the United States faced.
People were stunned by his death. Normal life had practically stopped. The world was not the same anymore. The TV broadcasters only replayed and talked about how his death happened for a couple of days. Many people took a day of two off to try and cope with the grief that they were feeling. The United States would not be the same anymore. All we did now, was mourn and get ready to prepare for what would now become of the states.
Author notes
Based on when John F. Kennedy passed away.
A contest entry
- Back to the 60s by Mel-the-Believer.
135 points, ended January 7, 2007, 6 entries
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This is a good story, and it does a nice job of portraying the history behind the event. That isn't always easy, when taking into consideration the fact that we didn't witness these things firsthand. We read about them in history weeks and tried our best to put ourselves in the place of those who did live through it.
This is a believable story and that's really key when writing historical fiction.
There are a few errors, incase you wanted to polish this before you entered the contest.
There shouldn't be a comma after "party" in the first paragraph. In the second paragraph, it should be "course", not "coarse". One is a noun and the other is an adjective, but they're easily confused. In the fourth paragraph, "tear fors" should be "tears for".
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moving story, although i didnt know alot about this. i hardly know anything at all about american history, although i do know about JFK and how he was assasinated. make it a tad bit longer showing how a particular person close to JFK, say his wife or relative, and how they would have comped with his untimely death.
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short, would like more description would be welcome, as I know nothing of your history.
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good but needs work good luck
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Check you spelling! In the very few short paragraphs I seen a lot of spelling mistakes.
This wasn't much of a story. I think that you could have put a little more description into what you were talking about. Im a product of the 90's so I wasn't there to experiance that loss and you are supposed to make me feel something for the loss of that president. I've heard he was a pretty good president, but I don't know that from experiance. Tell me what made him great, why was he so beloved. Thanks for entering my contest and good luck! / -
Very short but interesting. I liked JFK myself.
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It didn't go into much detail, but it was still a good and moving story.
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I thought it was alright but this Brent guy is right you need more... depth, or something. Like to me it was more like a monolouge then a story, maybe you could change so it was someone telling the tale of where they were when he died.
beginning: 2, language: 3, plot: 1, ending: 2, dialog: 1, characters: 1.
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Some spelling errors. This isn't really much of a story, there's no personal connection. If you were there, you could write about what you were doing or how it changed you, or even do that from a character's perspective, but like this it's just a brief lament.
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That was sad
Well written, I never thought about how it affected the citizens of the US when he was killed, never gave it much thought. Good job! 
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What a sad event in history. Thanks for writing this and thanks for entering. I was glad to have read this. God Bless!
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