"It's time."
Those words sent icy chills down my spine and caused my heart to skip a beat. Not that it matters in the least.
I looked up, through a thick veil of darkness which was rapidly descending and shook my head.
"Come on!"
Why me? I'd done nothing. Why was I here? Why was this happening? I wanted to scream, to plead, to beg. Not that it would do any good.
"Let's go!"
Terrifying. Those words, so simple and easily said. Just two little words yet they brought with them horrors beyond telling. I slid backwards until the hard wall stopped me and cringed, then looked up fearfuly and watched as my executioner approached.
"Let's go," the words repeated. Rough hands grasped me firmly and dragged me against my will over the hard, cold floor. I fought. I struggled. I tried...and failed.
"Stupid dog," the man growled, watching me as the cage door slammed shut. "The groomers ain't gonna kill you!"
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HAHAHAHAAHAHA LMFO!!!!! this was so funny!!
Great twist in the end! and i loved the fact you did it from an animals point if view! and yeah a super write!!! ^_^ -
HAHAHA! This story made me laugh, and made me read it over again. Nice!
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Hahaha, this was great! At first I thought it was going to result in something horrible, like a rape or a murder...but no, it was just a dog getting groomed. That's hilarious! Great job, thanks for the grin!
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Oh god xD
I was like "Ho shet this person died didn't they!?"
And then it gets to the end and...oh god xD
Instant hilarity! xD
I busted up!
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OMFG!!
I seriously lol'd on that one... i was thinking wow this is random as i read it... then it got even more random but in a good way lol.... geez i love the point of view and the point of view switch and how you changed the way it looked at the end... really good i loved this...
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Oh. My. God...
This is freaking hilarious!!! I love this! The start builds beautiful suspense, gets darker, then suddenly, poof, it's a dog's world!
Excellent write!!!
-HT
PS: I didn't get the descending darkness bit, though.
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you know the begining of this was wonderful and you held me there till the end but it was like watching a great movie with bad ending, LOL
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 3, ending: 1, dialog: 1, characters: 5.
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Hm..this is interesting...it has an odd sense of a dark humor...I'm not sure if that was what you were aiming for but that is how it comes off.
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This was really bloody brilliant and funny even if it was not meant to be..it gave of some kind of eery dark feeling of badness or something I dunno but it was smokin and thats the main point
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It's Time...
This is a really great story! I loved how you created such an impact with the mood, and then lightened it up at the very end. Your description of the main (dog) character's emotions were dead-on, and very convincing. A few minor things: in the seventh paragraph, you have the phrase "I slid backwards until the hard wall stopped me and cringed". Read this over a couple of times. Doesn't it sound like the wall cringed? You may want to tweak that so it isn't awkward. Also, later on in that sentence, the word "fearfuly" should have two L's, to become "fearfully". Thanks for entertaining me with this short story! -
That was really good! It was great how you made everyone think that it was an exectutioner. Ha, I amlmost laughed out loud! All of your grammar and spelling was great!
Really loved it,
Kudos,
Jazzy
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Hee heee, that was great, and really unexpected. You almost made melaugh out loud, which is mean b/c Im technocly supposed to be in bed right now. (shhh...) lol. That was great, though. Awesome job!
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haha the ending was great. the whole thing was but the ending was an interesting twist. very well written!
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Nice Twist
lol, this was well done, the beginning and middle, we are not even suspected a twist in the tale, so when it comes te surpise makes this a story worth remembering, ill check out to see if you have anymore stories online
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Lol.. amazing ending. That is just absolutely fantastic.. you wrote such a dramatic peice than easily wrote it off again.. nice work,
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hilarious
you evoked several emotions with this story. Very well done, and to finish with a laugh is very wes craven. Loved it... hope to read more of your stuff soon. take care
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Hahaha well played. At first I thought this was going to be too short, but after reading the whole thing, it's good you didn't try to drag it out. Bravo
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Haha! Very tricky. I was thinking that that guy was going to die...and then, the guy turned into a dog...
Groomers...*shudders* lol
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Lol! Very good, it builds up the suspense till the very end and then the end makes you laugh and feel a little stupid for being all tense about what's going to happen. When I got to the end I laughed out loud. Very good!
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There are a few tense problems with this which is easily fixed by clicking edit on the right side of the browser window. Otherwise it's an interesting idea although i found it hard to get into because of the lacking details there's not much description.Unless this was your intention to build suspense to the end.
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