"What would you say if I told you that you made it to the Olympics this summer?" asked Jane with a large smile on her face. My eyes went large as I heard this.
"No way!?" I squealed. Jane nodded and gave me a great be hug that took the breath away from me.
"Congrats!" I turned back to my horse Sir Lexus and kissed him on the nose. Two years ago I had applied with him and my trainer Jane Gady for the U.S.A. Equestrian Olympics. Turned out so did about two hundred others but all in all, I had made it! Me, Lisa Burns, the girl who was known for her love of horses since the age of two was going to the 2007 Olympics!!
I quickly finished grooming Lexus and then jumped into my car and drove to my apartment which I shared with my boyfriend Shane Robertsom of four years. I opened the dppr and found him sitting on the couch watching a horse race. I came up behind him and gave me a kiss on the cheek and said in his ear in a romantic voice,
"Darling, guess what happened to me today?" Shane look up ay me with sparkles in his eyes.
"Yes, babe?" he asked.
"Well," I paused for dramatic effect.
"I made it, I'm going to the Olympics!" Shame jumped up and gave me a kiss on the lips which took me by surprise. I kissed him back gently, and gave him a hug.
"Honey, that is so great! I can't believe it. Oh man, this is just great." I smiled and kissed him once more.
"I know it's great!"
Later that night Shane took me to a romantic restaurant in town to celebrate. While we waited for our food to arrive Shane took my hand. "Lisa, I have known you for these past few years and have come to love you. I love everything about you. And," He took out a small velvet box.
"I want you to be my wife. Lisa Burns will you marry me?" I looked into his eyes socked of what just happened. I smiled and yelled out
"Yes! I will marry you Shane Robertson!" He kissed my hand and then my lips. I blushed as couples looked at us as we got our food. When we got home that night I called my mother and tol her what happened, both about the Olympics and the proposal.
That spring Shane and I got married. The next year was hard. Shane and I went through the process of me going away for the Olympics. Also we found out that soon after I was with child! Yes, I was going to have a baby in the late winter of 2008. Shane and I were so happy we could not wait to tell everyone! Also I won the 2007 Olympics that year for the United States.
Author notes
I used my own charactor's names from my own Book Series so do not claim them as your own because they are mine. Also paret of this is from the series but is changed around a little. I may even go back and add more in. Enjoy!
A contest entry
- Beginning Sentance by VioletStrike.
110 points, ended January 2, 2007, 20 entries
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Thank you! Glad you liked it
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it is very good
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Yea I was.
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This is amazing, girl! I'm proud of you and I take it that you were suppose to start a story with a sentence. I love it!! -
This is pretty good. It's a little short, but it's good! I enjoyed reading it and you're a very talented writer... You really should seperate your paragraphs though, and every time someone talks it's a new line:
"What would you say if I told you that you made it to the Olympics this summer?" asked Jane with a large smile on her face. My eyes went large as I heard this.
"No way!?" I squealed.
like that instead of:
What would you say if I told you that you made it to the Olympics this summer?" asked Jane with a large smile on her face. My eyes went large as I heard this. "No way!?" I squealed.
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Thanks
Thank you so much for your suggestion! I will go back and fix my story. And Just to let you know, I do plan to be a writer. I am in my second year of Journalism.
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That was cute! You could have added more detail but other than that it was nice.
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