Santa’s Stupendous Saturday
Santa skipped from staples and showed up at sears.
Star shaped stockings stuffed with sewing samples were seen upon shelves in Saturday’s sale at sears
Santa’s smooth appearance surprised the small crowd.
Children shouted and screamed as Santa set off.
Santa said sayonara to the superb bunch and stepped in his sleigh.
Across the street, seven silly snowmen were slouched on a slopped hill.
Saint Nick’s sleigh slid steadily right for the innocent snowmen, smashing and squishing the perfectly round shapes.
Several spunky sisters watched as Santa demolished the snow people.
Santa cynically grinned and stuffed his smirk with star fruit.
Seconds later Santa was spotted by the snowman protection agency.
He was a suspect in the smashup of some snowmen.
Supposedly Santa was charged with sliding with a suspended license, sledding to endanger, and snacking on star fruit in a sleigh on a snowy Saturday.
Santa seemed shocked after being arrested.
Children sobbed as Santa was shoved away.
Soon Santa was given some scruffy clothes to wear.
Santa’s suit was sold to a store with a big selection of swanky second hand stuff.
Somewhere along the lines Santa snuck out.
Santa ran back to sears and stole a brand new sleigh.
He summoned his special reindeer to come right away.
Somehow they took a wrong turn, sending them to the South Pole.
Santa said he wanted to stay.
Someone should have never let Santa slip away.
The South Pole seemed suitable to Santa, but Santa missed the signature soft snow.
Swiftly back to the North Pole he would soon go.
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Comments
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The structure was unique and the plot was amusing. A skipping Santa Clause is my kind of legendary creature! I love how almost every line is an alliteration. You certainly put a lot of effort into this. In the way of errors, just watch your grammar. Proper nouns should be capitalized, some phrases are missing hyphens, and so on.
Good work, good luck, and thank you for your entry.

