The Hitch Hiker

It was in 1968, I was in the Navy hitch hiking from Chicago to my parent’s home in Rhode Island, when a big powerful looking man picked me up somewhere in New York State. The ride started pleasantly enough; Him talking about the weather, my status in the service, the war in Vietnam etc. 1

Untill I asked him about himself. 2

His big hands began to shake on the steering wheel as he started to reply,  
“I’m an officer in a prison nearby.” He says with a strange lack of pride in his voice.
“I help troubled young boys find their path.” He continues a bit angrily. I don’t understand why his hands are shaking and he looks ready to cry. Until, trembling visably, he chokes out his next words,
“My son was just arrested for drug possession!
My wife left me and he was the only thing I had left!
He is in my prison!
My life is in ruins!
Why is this happening to me?” he asks with out expecting an answer as he begins to cry openly. The speed of the car has increased from 60 to 80 miles per hour. I listen with growing fear and aprehension as he states with certainty,
“I have nothing left to live for!” 3

I think furiously not knowing what to do, listening to his words very carefully, trying to stay cool, while the big car speeds on barely under control... We are now doing close to 100 miles per hour, the car is beginning to sway precariously, tears rain freely down his sad, heartbroken face. 4

Then I, only 17 years old, ask him,
“Do you believe in God?”
“Yes?” he says, with a question and a small spark of interest in his voice. 5

I pause long enough for him to turn and look at me. I can tell he sees me for the first time since I have been in his car, as he says,  
“I’m sorry, what is your name?“
I look into his tear-streaked eyes and answer calmly,
“Dennis.” 6

The car begins to slow as he continues,
“I have prayed and prayed but he doesn’t seem to hear. I don’t think he even cares.” I don't dare continue that dialog. So I ignore it and just ask,
“What is it you do to help the kids at the prison?” 7

He replies, starting with short hesitant sentences,
“I act as a coach in their ball games, I teach some to read, I listen to their concerns and offer suggestions I can only hope will someday improve their lives. I spent so much of myself at the prison that I didn’t spend enough with my wife and son, I guess. I felt these kids needed me more and my wife.. well, she just wouldn’t understand, know this. I just can’t take anymore." 8

Finally, I get an idea..
“Who will replace you at the prison and care for your son should you die?” 9

He starts to mention a few names then quickly comes to realize that no one can. That he is unique to the prison system here. His eyes are already begining to dry as he begins to smile, then laughs kind-heartedly and says,
“I guess just me.”
I can tell his mind is filling with ideas and new hope. 10

As he lets me off at the end of my ride, I turn and mention. “Don’t give up praying my friend. He does listen. Thanks for the ride.” 11

I grab my duffle bag from the back seat, as he looks at me with a warm and understanding smile and says “Thank you, Dennis. I won’t forget what you've done for me.” 12

I get out of the car and watch him as he waves and drives away. 13

After a moment of relaxing from a rather harrowing experiance, I smile, stick my thumb out, and await my next ride. 14

Author notes

There are not enough angels in heaven for all of us here on this earth. So we must make up the ranks when the oppertunity arrives. As the 17 year old young man in this story has done. He became the guardian angel for that man that day. Each time we help someone escape from or save from danger or darkness we have become their guardian angel

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  • IvoryRose
    July 1, 2006

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    You switch tenses again going from present to past and back. It makes this more confusing to read.
    It's a really sweet story though. Very inspiring I must say. Personally I would have freaked out and screamed rather than do anything of use....ok so I hope not, but that was very brave nevertheless. Good job.

    beginning: 5, language: 3, plot: 4, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 4.


  • UncleSpace
    April 8, 2004

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    BRAVO!!!

    This was just amazing, you were his angel, and angels were speaking through you. This is a fantastic story with a great message, thank you for sharing it.

    USpace

  • Hobbit Warrior
    April 6, 2004

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    Hmm, not bad at all. It seems a bit choppy though, somehow. but definitely a possibility.
    That said, this does have a wonderful point to it. Not the most origional, but still a very sweet story.
    Good job,
    Amanda

  • DancingKat
    April 6, 2004

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    The 6th line needs work. "there path" should be "their path" . This is a very moving write. Is it based on a true story? You know, there's a saying "If we help someone else up the hill, we are that much up further the hill ourselves." This story applies to it perfectly.


  • April 6, 2004
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    very good words. if we can help then we should help.


  • Lori1952
    April 6, 2004

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    Interesting Story.. you are so right, there are not enough angels in heaven for all of us, but if we take the time to help one another in life, we give that person inspiration to go on and see the brighter side of things. and gives them hope, self esteem and courage to go on, because they know some cares, and it also gives the giver a sense of accomplishment.
    This is great story which show the maturity of a brave 17 year old man. Thanks for sharing this.. Hugs Lori
    Edited on Apr 06, 7:01 p.m. because ''.


  • Kethry
    April 6, 2004

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    Oh thuis is good, the ending was a little expected but the descriptions and the emotion were solidly written.

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