Nothing...
The feeling you get when depression hits.
The empty bottle on the shelf
you wish had just one drop left.
When you've swallowed the last pill in the botle
and the darkness that surrounds you afterward.
Author notes
Yes, i know its depressing. But its what i could think of in 10 minutes. And how im feeling now.
A contest entry
- Describe ''Nothing'' by sarpsarp83.
150 points, ended January 7, 2007, 14 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Short. Vague.
I think that it feel sort of emtionless. We all have probably felt like that one time in our lives, but why at that moment were you feeling like that? I think that detailing could make this great. -
You should make it longer. It's really good and really sad... but still good. *smiles* Good job baby.
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Something
Good methapor but from what I gather off this paragraph is that the feeling you've had was something far from nothing, it actually means a great deal for you, so it cant be classified as nothing, can it? But maybe you try to convince yourself it's nothing? I like the idea of comparing feelings with nothingless. First lucky, I'd have to see if there will be any other entries.
I'm actually looking for a short story. Maybe you can post another story about the reason of these feelings? So the readers can decide wheater its nothing or something?
Good luckbeginning: 3, language: 3, plot: 3, ending: 3, dialog: 3, characters: 3.
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Very vivid for just a few words. Would love to hear the story behind this 'nothing'.
~*Brooke*~ -
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That is a good description...why do u feel that way? Gess we got our reasons right. This made me want to cry again. I feel like that too.
It was really good keep on going!
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