The world is cold to me
I have been shunned by everyone
There is no one left to talk to
Nothing left to talk about
No one will remember me
There is no place for me
I do not fit among the cliques
The jocks, preps, punks, or goths
I am an outcast
I am not even good enough to be a misfit
I feel cold
Alone
Desolate
I'm screaming out to everyone
But all I hear is silence
Please someone,
FIND ME!
No, no one will find me
No one will come looking for me
There is absolutely
No place for me
A contest entry
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170 points, ended June 12, 2007, 16 entries
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Very soulful and sad
I suppose everybody feel like that sometimes.
language: 4.
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This is great and has alot of emotion. We all need to find our places in the world but it is good to be different. Who cares if your not in a click. You are who you are and never change for anyone. Be who u are and live life to the fullest.
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This was good and sad, alot of depth and emotion in this peice. The part were you capatilised FIND ME gave it more impact and outlined the word more.
Thank you for entering and goodluck
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This is a beuaitufl and deep poem.. one full of emotions and imageries that I could really just see while reading this
Once upon a time, I could relate so much with this... Thankfully, someone did find me
I am sure someone will find you and pull you out too 
I hope things go well..
Thanks so much for sharing this
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I am a normal student and this kind of fits for me i'm a golfer but that's it. I think that everyone feels like that at one time or another in their life. good use of simple words. Loved it. Tres Bien!
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Sad
We all, at some point, feel that there could never be anything that we would be good at, and that there will never be anybody to find us. A great person I know and love once said, "It's horrible to be alone in a room full of people." As that person is realizing, this thought is spawned by a feeling of miscontempt, it is nothing more than a self-preserved illusion. You should start to look more into the happy aspects of life, look into the few people who (although they don't come looking for you) have already found you...You must first learn to look for yourself before you can expect other people to look for you as well.
Well written, poem, by the way. It is sad, though, because I know a lot of people who have tried to finish themselves off. You should read my story, "school sucks" I think you could relate relatively easily.
Peace out,
Me...beginning: 2, language: 3, plot: 2, ending: 3, dialog: 3, characters: 2.
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Sadly, I think many can relate to your words. You've a done a beautiful job with your poem.
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i like your story and i am sorry how u feel(if this is real)...i think you did a good job on expressing how you think that you do not belong anywhere.
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actually very good....
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Really thought evoking and full of emotion. I like the desperation and hope that is then contradicted. I'm not sure how this fits as a story, more like a poem. Really good write though. I really enjoyed it.
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Nice, but Sad
Wow... do you really feel like this? If you do, I'll be your friend! I'm no jock, prep, punk, or goth. I'm a normal school kid.
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Reminds me of me. Thats why were such good friends! but good poem
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Very nicely written, could perhaps do with being just that little bit longer. Apart from that, the material behind what you are writing makes sense and connects with people on a gut level. It makes you think a lot, and so well done for writing it. I look forward to seeing more of your work
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Wow, very detailed and full of emotain! Itis very powerful piece of poetry,
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I think that you hit a subject that almost everyone can relate to. Everyone sometime in their life feels like they are outcasted, and I definately can relate to your poem personally. Although, I think that you could work on the flow a little bit, but otherwise it was very well written. Good Job.
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this is quite similair to your other poem i critiqued once agaiin i get it good job the same sort of flow and the length works
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This was a very good poem. I can really relate to this. I feel the exact same way but I just keep telling myself don't give up hope. Theres got to be someone out there that understands. Well anyways, good job! Keep it up.
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Start you own place.
And let others come and see if they fit in with you. Make your own standards and see how hard or easy it is for others to fit in with you. Do not seek to fit but seek to be someone that others would want to be with. Make your own club and your own space in the world and do not settle for the little cliques all the others have created.
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Very good. Do you write much poetry? It seems very natural, flowing straight from the heart. I hope it helped to write this.
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That is so sad do you really feel like that?
It was written wel nd i loved it!
keep writing.
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Awww... poor TabbyKat. Are you okay? If you need to talk you know my number.
Anyway, I really liked how this was writen. I think you could fix some punctuation but over all very good!
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