Cookie-Cutter

Passing from class to class hopelessly trying to be normal, to fit in. Attempting and willing themselves to not be the weird ones, the nerds, the Goths, the angry ones, or anything else that would cause a strange look or a mean phrase. They try so helplessly to wade through a pool of mediocrity and to melt into it. They get the grades, they have the right friends, they laugh and appear happy, they live a normal life. They are cookie-cutter. With their cookie-cutter clothes, and their cookie-cutter hair, and their cookie-cutter kissing, and cookie-cutter touching, and mostly their cookie-cutter sex. Oh how bland and boring their cookie-cutter sex must be. Oh how annoyingly standard and eternally forced that interaction must be.

One set of cool blue eyes observed the crowd noticing the pair. A small girl, pretty enough though nothing to be noticed. At least not until she smiled. Her eyes steely blue eyes shone when she smiled. Her highlighted brown hair waved in the wind and her clothes accentuated her curves, but only when she smiled. And a boy, tall, slender, but toned, with chocolate brown eyes and hair, and skin a pure alabaster. Noticeable only when the pure passion that he tried to hide turned his eyes a coal black. There they were a normal pair, a friendly pair, a pair with no reason to notice them, except maybe their happiness. They seemed to ooze happiness, and comfort and warmth. So why couldn’t the cold blue orbs look away? Why did they a cookie-cutter pair draw his attention?

He sat on the bench watching, waiting for something to click for some recognition of why this pair was so intriguing. The only thing he came up with was a frustrated growl from deep within his throat. There they were, happy and content and oh so bland, and he couldn’t look away. The sun warmed his back as he stood slowly circling the quad. The pair kept up with their laughing with another couple, even less recognizable. Something was amiss. The girl in the other couple was prettier, with sharper features, more exotic features. High cheekbones, and bright brown eyes, and a body to die for as many a guy would say. The guy next to her also more attractive, with his eyes of bright blue, and blonde locks. So why were they so much less interesting? The answers alluded him, driving absolutely insane.

His toned body swayed as he walked, making him appear as a cat stalking it’s prey as he stalked in the shadows, watching, observing, getting consumed.

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The heavy beats fell on their ears making their blood pound as the base matched their heartbeats. He walked the blue of his eyes shining in the dark room. All the people around made him cringe, all so cookie-cutter. But the pair stood there, as cookie-cutter as the rest but not. Something was different. Something emanated from them in waves, made his mind swirl and his body crave. Crave what? Crave that touch? The touch he hadn’t felt or needed in so long? Whose touch? Hers? With her bright shining eyes and smiling face? His? With his dark sensual looks and deep voice? Whose?

She shivered lightly in her lover’s arms, looking about her with a scrunched brow and searching the crowd in earnest. He looked down at her with concern and kissed her forehead as she turned back.

“What’s wrong, luv?” He spoke in a soft, slightly raspy voice.

“Nothing Will, just a strange feeling,” She looked up and forced a plastic smile. “just being silly again.” But she felt more than silly. She felt it, someone was there watching, stalking.

She had seen him, he was sure, though she hadn’t caught his eyes, the girl had seen him. And Will as she called him had not. He had been much too concerned with her to notice. He had to get closer, to speak to them. He had to get this annoying, distracting sensation settled.

Will looked up from Rina’s face and noticed the tall stranger making his way towards them. His black leather jacket hung loosely over a blue button-up shirt that matched his bright, almost ethereal eyes. A black tee and jeans finished the outfit. His heavy black boots hit the ground on beat with the music and his catlike movements drew a gasp from Will. Rina looked back to look at the astounding thing that had made her boyfriend gasp and was surprised to find the cause of her chill, slinking towards them.

“Hi, my name is Melainis.” He spoke raggedly in an accent unfamiliar to both. The bright blue depths of his eyes caught cold steely blue and charcoal black. All three swirled and the ways of the unexplainable suffocated them all. They all wanted, needed to feel. Feel what was unimportant at the moment, just to feel.

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The dim light of the moon fell across the floor and the bed as she entered the room after her lover and the mysterious man that was about to gain that title, even if temporarily. She had done this before and was not surprised when Will’s eyes lit up after catching hers. The idea was something they had discussed previously, and one they had managed to try out on a few individuals in the past. All had been exceptionally exciting. Now was just another one to add to the list.

“Watch this.” Her voice was soft and slightly raspy as her hand found the light switch and flicked it on, closing the door behind her after the light was on. Stepping further into the room she stopped and slowly peeled her top off. Two adoring glances burned through her. She dropped the shirt to the hardwood floor beside her, hearing the soft click of the buttons hitting the hard surface. She moved her hands to the buttons of her jeans and slowly undid them, swiveling her hips to the beat that still emanated from the music downstairs.

The jeans slipped down her legs with excruciating slowness as she revealed tanned skin to four hungry eyes. Finally they landed on the floor at her feet and were kicked across the room. She stopped and twirled in a matching, lacy, red, underwear and bra. Her skin and hair glowed in the electric light, and when she turned back, that naughty smile and accompanying shimmer in her eyes lit up her face.

He could feel it burning him from the inside. Never had such a cookie-cutter girl made him want to claw at his skin and bleed just to get some relief. The realization that relief stood before him, stopped him from doing just that. He simply watched her, knowing full well the man sitting on the bed behind him, her lover was doing the same. No matter, he thought, I just want a taste.

Will’s skin was burning in anticipation. He knew this mood of hers, like this she was insatiable, and gorgeous, and he wanted nothing more than to touch her. He sat back though, waiting for her to come to him. He knew her too well, and getting teased for being to eager was not in his plans tonight.

She walked towards them with all the cat-like grace she had in her. Her eyes never leaving the strangers. When she was only a foot away, she gestured toward Will. The indication was all too obvious, and shrugging out of his coat, Melainis made his way onto the bed and toward her boyfriend. He leaned in keeping his lips mere centimeters away from Will’s. She looked hungrily at the scene as the two men kissed, at first slowly, and then more deeply. The eroticism of the moment made her feel the pang deep in her gut. That hint of fire, that brought with it the sticky wetness that now pooled in her panties.

The kiss broke off and Will panted for a moment. Never had a man kissed him so well, or so passionately. He was stunned at this man’s abilities. He sat back and waited for whatever would happen next.

Bright blue met cold steely blue and a spark emanated from both. They drew to each other ending up in each others arms, lips firmly planted on lips. Tongues soon battled softly to explore unknown territory. Both seemed entirely lost in the kiss, as his hands roamed her body and found the clasp of her bra and undid it. Slowly and sensually strong hands slid it down her bare arms and dropped it to the floor.

Will got up knowing full well that this was the moment. He stood behind Rina who’s back had come to face the bed at some point during the kiss. His hands roamed from her waist to her bare breasts. Her tanned flesh fit perfectly in his hands as he softly massaged. He leaned in kissing, nibbling and licking her neck and shoulders. His hands kneaded her tender wanting flesh as he tweaked first one nipple gently between his fingers and then the other.

She moaned into Melainis’ mouth, as two sets of hands explored her flesh. They were everywhere making her want to pull away and scream out. Instead her tongue took it’s frustration out on Melainis’. Her hands worked down from his chest to his zipper, slowly raking it down. The sound alone made her wetter. Her hands moved behind her to do the same to Will’s zipper. Now both men stood open to her hands. Each hand found it’s way into the jeans of a different male, and each began expertly stroking a dick. Both let out a small sigh from the contact.

Her warm hand felt amazing on his cock. She felt better than most, this was a new sensation, this girl found all the right spots to hit. All the ways to make his cock jump at her touch. She knew it too, she did it to make him squirm.

Will’s head lolled back for a moment before falling forward and grabbing her neck in a powerful bite, and sucking at the tender flesh, something he knew she loved. The roughness of the action jolted her for a moment before she moaned loudly. Melainis feeling the jolt and the passion in her moan was surprised to feel the same waves of insatiable emotion as before.

Her hands felt so warm and so soft, yet strong at the same time. Stronger than a girl her size should manage. She kept her touches so perfectly balanced that it drove him insane. He wanted to scream into her mouth but couldn’t and finally let go of her lips and let his head fall back with a growl. Her lips found new territory as she leaned forward aiming for his collarbone. She sucked gently, nibbling at the soft skin.

Both men were at her willing mercy. It felt great to have this power, this ability to please. She knew she was good at what she did, and she took full advantage of her abilities. Why shouldn’t she use them to the fullest? After all it was a God-given gift, she may as well use it. The last statement made her smile as she pulled away from his neck and looked up at Melainis.

Her smile, her bright burning smile. Something about it burned him deep inside. Drove him insane. Her eyes lit up and something changed when she smiled. It was always there, hidden, lurking beneath the surface, but when she smiled, it lit up, it came out to play.

Her hands were working wonders on him yet again. Every night she did this to him, and every night it never failed to shock him how good she was. Will grabbed her waist pulling her back against his chest. Using his free hand he tilted her chin up and toward him, planting a soft kiss on her lips. Her tongue immediately demanded entry into his mouth. He parted his lips for her and met her tongue with his, allowing their kiss to grow more and more passionate by the second. He took a step backwards leading her with him, and sat on the bed with her in his lap. The stranger followed; “good instincts” he marked in his head.

Sitting in his lap she felt safe, and then he scooted slowly backwards, keeping her between his legs but not letting her move with him. He leaned her back until she was on her back with her legs hanging off the edge of the bed. Still kissing her, his hands kneaded her breasts. She felt a second pair of hands press onto her knees as kisses trailed up her inner thighs. She moaned lightly at the gentle contact and resumed her tongues exploration.

When the scent hit him, his cock jumped slightly at his arousal. Her smell was so sweet, so deliciously wonderful, he couldn’t help but respond. When his kisses finally reached her underwear he placed one on the red lacy silk before pulling the panties off of her legs slowly. He then began kissing up her legs once more, until he reached the treasure he’d been searching for.

Will felt her tense up in his arms for a moment, and then her back arched and she moaned into his mouth. The knowledge of what was happening made his own dick grow harder. He kissed her even more passionately and she responded in a similar fashion. It finally grew to be too much for her and she let go of the kiss, moaning out loud and panting for more.

His tongue, his hands, their hands, Will’s mouth on her neck, those lips and tongues and fingers everywhere. The sensation was searing, warm and cold, soft and hard all at the same time. Her body responded stronger than ever before. Her back arched her hands gripped the sheets scratching at them as she gasped and whimpered. The pleasure was building, starting at her core and radiating outward to every part of her.

The taste of her was driving him wild, her delicious wetness filled his mouth as she squirmed beneath his mouth and hands. Her skin was soft under his fingertips and her body responded in the most delightful ways to his touch. He was driving her a crazy as she was making him. His cock jumped at this thought. Why was this girl, her pleasure, having such an effect on him?

Will kissed her neck feeling her tense and relax as waves of pleasure built up in her. Her soft skin tasted sweet and salty and delightfully like her. He couldn’t help but be turned on watching another man cause her such pleasure. The pang of jealousy that had first run through him when he realized what he had set up, had subsided to reveal arousal.

The waves of pleasure cascaded over her, making her body respond more than she had intended to let on. Her back arched even more as the final and strongest waves hit her and her inner muscles clenched for the first time.

He felt her muscles tighten and the taste of her release flooded his mouth. It was almost too much for him to hold out against, but he managed, through sheer will to not cum. She tasted so sweet, sweeter than anyone he’d ever tasted before. He pulled away with a final, light kiss and wiped his mouth, looking up at her through half closed lids, the bright blue of his eyes, shining into the now dark navy of her eyes. Her hands were around his neck in seconds and her lips on his with bruising intensity as she thanked him for the pleasure he had just given her. Her tongue explored roughly and massaged his with an intensity he had never felt before. This girl was an animal!

The pang of jealousy hit again when she reached out to kiss him. Will couldn’t help but wonder why she preferred to kiss the stranger. This fear subsided when his fingers found her soft folds and began exploring. She promptly let go of Melainis’ mouth and gasped in pleasure, drawing a wicked grin and a shimmer to black eyes. Will pulled her back and turned her body laying her on the bed beside him as he knelt up on his knees. He hovered over her for a moment before leaning in and lightly planting a kiss on her lips. His hands never left her warm, slick, folds. He rubbed her clit in slow agonizing circles making her squirm and moan lightly. His other fingers worked downward and one slipped into her for the first time. She gasped and arched her back at this.

Watching his hands work on her was incredibly sensual. It made Melainis want to join. The only thing he could do though was watch or pleasure the other male in the room. Both options seemed viable at the moment. Getting slowly bored, he stalked quietly over to Will and pushed him back slightly, still allowing him to torture the girl beside him, but also opening him up to greedy hands and lips.

A warm hand closed around his dick and Will looked away from Rina to see hungry bright blue orbs staring back at him. He watched the other man lean slowly forward and lick the tip getting the drop of pre-cum that had come to rest there. A warm tongue swirled around his head ever so slowly, disrupting his concentration.

Rina’s eyes opened ever so slowly and she watched the two men. She pulled away from Will’s hands and positioned herself so that she could return the pleasure Melainis had granted her. Her soft lips formed into an O dropped onto his hard cock. His body tensed but he continued to tease Will with his mouth and tongue. Her eyes lit up when his cock jumped in her mouth though. She teased the vein lightly with her tongue, hoping to tease him to insanity.

After a few moments of this Will grew restless. He touched Rina on the back and she looked at him questioningly as she sat perkily up. His eyes spoke volumes and she moved sensually to the edge of the bed and out of the way. Both lean male bodies conformed to a perfect 69. Will’s lips surrounded the other man’s erection and sucked and licked fervently. The stranger seemed to do the same, but with amply more experience.

His teeth grazed lightly under the head and Will bucked forward, only slightly. The other man didn’t move back, or gag, he took his cock in slightly deeper without protest. Will continued to suck and took a cue from his more experienced counterpart, and grazed his teeth lightly against the soft skin pulled tight around the hard dick. The move was obviously appreciated as Melainis paused for a moment as his body tensed up. A deep chuckle escaped his throat and send obviously pleasant vibrations through the other man’s cock.

A soft moan escaped his lips and he pressed his lips tighter to the dick in his mouth. He could tell that Will was both new and talented at this particular sexual act. He was also sure that while Will could still last for a while, he was about to cum. The feel of this man’s lips on his cock, mixed with the blended tastes of both Will and the girl was sending him over the edge. His body tensed for one last time and with a few shots he sent his seed into the young man’s willing mouth. He swallowed every bit and licked up whatever he could have possibly missed.

He pulled back slightly, giving the other man the hint that this wasn’t how he wanted to end this. Their eyes met, dark black melting cold bright blue and he was left alone. He crawled to his Rina and grabbed her around the waist pulling her under him. When he was over her, the stranger on the other side of the bed she pushed him onto his back, the rolling motion caused her to land above him. She lowered herself, more slowly than Will ever thought was possible. He finally felt her warmth around him, and began to rock her back and forth.

He sat back watching, the bright blue reflecting what was happening before him. He never imagined that two people so cookie-cutter could ever be so beautiful having sex. His face was so soft, and so passionate at the same time. That smile, the one that changed her, lit up her face and her whole being shone through her lust-darkened eyes. They rolled and flipped so he was on top and her legs were elegantly draped along his. He rocked in and out of her as she looked up at him. Soft hands trailed his hard muscles in a picture of perfect harmony. His eyes were glued to them and he understood for the first time what set them apart. They were comfortable. They weren’t cookie-cutter to fit it, they were them. In everything they did, they were comfortable, and happy, and passionate. The eyes are what had set them apart. Their souls shone through them in a way that most people couldn’t understand.

His gaze never left the couple as they released their pleasure into each other, as they came and fell together, as their eyes were caught on each others, barely noticing the stranger in the room. All he could was watch in wonder. This was far from cookie-cutter, this was beautiful, raw, passionate and deep. These people were the farthest thing from cookie-cutter, from “normal” he could imagine.

They were free.

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  • Nicely written. It's hard to find people with good grammer and spelling and did really well.


  • MaMa-2-be-Cindy
    September 22, 2007

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    An erotic read.

    A very well written piece, i was drawn into the story. The title got my attention, good choice I to felt like it could have used some dialouge, but over all I throughly enjoyed the read and erotically I was turned on and enticed, great work.

  • Red Dragon
    April 10, 2007

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    this was actually erotic

    sometimes erotica is crap, where it's just not erotic, or too confusing, or interesting on a non-erotic level, like descriptions of rape/incest/beastiality/necrophilia, but this was actually erotic, i totally got a full hard-on reading this, i always write my erotica in 1st person, where it's almost a diary entry because in 3rd person erotica stops being erotic when there's too many gramatical errors or something totally implauseable happens, but you've managed to do a spectacular 3rd person

    . Rewarded 8


  • Andy Stephenson Greeters member
    March 14, 2007

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    Very Good!

    I chose to read one of your erotica writes to have a better idea of what you might expect in your contest. I must admit that I am very impressed with this. Makes my erotica seem cookie-cutter. You are much more descriptive than I in the sex acts. You also put more emotion into it. I would have liked to have seen the use of dialogue. There were a couple of times I was confused who was doing what. On the whole, it does seem better than my erotica. I may enter anyway.

    . Rewarded 4


  • Meakalu
    March 7, 2007

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    nice. Well written. a little confusing at the start as to who was who, but that cleared up. I loved it. I might just go onto your page and read some of your other work if I haven't already. brilliant

    . Rewarded 4


  • February 11, 2007

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    amazingly passionate

    This was increadibly well written with such raw emotions. I loved it and I adored the cookie cutter theme.

    . Rewarded 4


  • slipperssun
    February 8, 2007

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    Now this was sensual in the whole... wow you done well... i loved the way you put them into a threesome scene and still was able to keep them as such a loving couple. aware of signals to one another in what they wanted.

    the only thing i had trouble with was just before about half way through i found it a little hard to follow who was who. only in the use of he and he...

    other than that well done i loved it

    . Rewarded 4


  • January 16, 2007
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    HO


  • the wonder girl silver member
    January 13, 2007

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    Wah, the introduction... was well put. When I saw the title, I wondered what the story was about. Given my one track mind (FOOD), of course I was thinking of baking ! That short paragraph at the near top explained exactly why that title was used.

    Melainis, this observer, was a very mysterious man, something like a stalker. I, too, kept wondering what set this Will and Rina apart from the other "cookie cutters." I've experienced that, looking at someone and wondering how that person stands out from the others, when in fact, s/he is quite similar to all the rest. Sometimes, observation IS the key... but this Melainis, wah, he GOT to see and "experience" firsthand exactly how different this couple is.

    The point of view itself allowed me to see things through Melainis' eyes, and I love how it made me feel as though I'm IN the story.

    Some really small typos though:
    After the ontroductory paragraph, that one beginning with the "One set of cool blue eyes observed the crowd.." I think the last sentence "Why did they a cookie-cutter pair draw his attention?" needs a comma before and after the words "a cookie-cutter pair" to denote the words' use as an Apositive.

    Also, in the paragraph that begins with "The heavy beats fell on their ears..." I think the sentence:
    "He walked the blue of his eyes shining in the dark room." should have a comma between "walked" and "the."

    this was a joy to read, particularly because it veers away from the "typical" erotica, or rather, I THINK it does. Thank you for this!

    . Rewarded 4


  • Tigerlilly91
    January 7, 2007
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    Really really good. Interesting and gripping. I loved it!


  • missy18
    January 4, 2007

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    vrey good

    I thought you did a great job painting a pictuer for me the reader and I found it very intersting. I just could not stop reading. it had some unexspected turns and I liked that keep up the good work.

    . Rewarded 4


  • Manderson
    January 3, 2007

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    This was very well-written, and even more than that, this holds an element of wonder and of beauty that matches the theme of the story. I feel intrigued by the characters and the way in which you speak of them. It is beautiful and unique...not to mention hot. Too bad it didn't last longer. That's ALWAYS a good complaint to receive, duncha think?

    . Rewarded 4


  • December 22, 2006
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    sex..............................i love i


  • Kylia Skydancer Greeters member
    December 21, 2006

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    *tilts her head*

    I liked the imagery in this piece, it's very...sweet. It paints a vivid picture while staying away from the "trashy" feeling a lot of erotic stories seem to have, especially ones that are portraying "non-standard" relationships. (like the threesome in here)

    A couple of grammar points. I was mostly reading the story so i didn't go through it with a fine-toothed comb or anything but these two bits stuck out at me. (not sure what paragraph they're in since i can't get the line numbers to show up.


    First, "He was driving her a crazy as she was making him" should say "as"


    Second, "and send obviously pleasant vibrations through the other man’s cock." should say "sent" I also had a bit of a problem with the word "obvious" Why was it obvious? It certainly wasn't obvious to me. The sensations could have been unpleasant or strange or...well, just about anything.

    Anyway, moving on.

    I really loved the beginning. Right from the start I could tell this wasn't going to be like other erotic stories. The ending wraps the story up nicely as well. Right before it ends though. The third or fourth para from the end, the one that begins with
    "He pulled back slightly" is *really* confusing. I have no idea which guy is doing what actions and that sent me into a state of disorientation.

    the thing I would work on a bit is the characters. You did a great job in showing how the two guys think differently and in the scene where they're with each other, it shows. I really would like to know more about how the girl reacts differently to the different men. One is familiar and safe and the other one is new and different and, from what I'm reading, probably more experienced.

    All through the story, i was wondering, "so what really does make them different?" I like how Melainis figures it out at the end, perhaps one or two stray thougghts about during the story though might make it easier for me to not be distracted by the question.

    Hope my few observations were able to offer some small help.

    . Rewarded 4


  • MrFish
    December 21, 2006

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    I liked it. It was interesting how it was all for an epiphany for the outside guy, Melainis. That must have been some heavy inspiration, because the imagery in some places was vivid. The only qualm I might have is the tradeoff between the two thoughts of the male characters, but you handled it well enough

    . Rewarded 4

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