Smile

As the smoke cleared, you were standing there, eyeing me. I looked at what used to be a broken frown and noticed how it had transformed into something magnificient. A smile.

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  • Dreams of Insanity
    September 27, 2007
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    I love smiles! They make me happy! *hugs self* This was a really good piece of work!


  • callthexylophone
    July 29, 2007

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    "My Hell (But I Know She Meant Well)"

    Since I don't have an allpoetry account, I'm commenting here. That was a KICK ASS poem! Everything about it! It showed infatuation without a hint of sappiness, and I love how her lips were like waves. Great poem, it'd make an awesome song.


  • Drac
    February 19, 2007

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    A very nice line here, which would be a good idea to use somewhere inside a story
    Well written also

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 3, ending: 5, dialog: 1, characters: 1.