Rain fell softly on her dead, frozen face and crimped her soft black hair. Her pale face shone in the moonlight and her clothes; ragged and torn; seemed to heal and she looked content within her death.
His face was battered and bruised. The tears still showed in the rain and his long straight hair shadowed his eyes. He stoked her face and kissed her forehead.
"Goodbye," he whispered.
The cold puddle of blood surrounding them seeped away down a drain. The streets were empty and not a sound came from the city. They were alone, together, at lasy, the only thing separating them - death. He knelt up and looked at the sky loningly, trying to spot her soul. But she would've surely gone to hell. He lowered his head again.
He cleched his fist tightly around the dagger and strained every muscle in his face. He pulled the dagger out of her back.
"You are glad aren't you?" he asked her body.
When no answer came he got angry.
"DAMN YOU!" he screamed.
He stabbed her in the left shoulder.
"You said you'd understand!"
He stabbed her again, more violently and frequently. Suddenly he lay down on top of her and passionately kissed her dead frozen lips. His hands carressed her body but the knife was still in his hands.
Blood spewed all over the road turning black. He cut her rapidly and let his hands swim in the blood. He sat up and looked at the girl. He rubbed his hands all over the bloody body and sunk his face into the wounds. He sat up again and rubbed his face with his hands and ran them through his hair.
He smiled
and licked his lips.
Author notes
Gory for the sake of being gory.
Specifially written so that little bits of the story is revealed along the way. No names given...MUHAHAH!
Please tell me what you think
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this is odd.... just a tad.... but it was written well and it was an ok read.... not much my kind of reading though... as i said, it was pretty good though..
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In the first paragraph, you've used semicolons where you don't need them, before "ragged and torn".
Para 2, "stoked/stroked"
Wow...this is certainly different than anything I've ever seen. O.O Good read!
-HT
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a great creative and well written dark write nice job wonderfully done, you held me to the very end !
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Very dark but very well written.
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OH GOD I love a good GORE FESTY PEICE OF PASSIONATE WRITING..... mmmm now I am hungry for horror
good job
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Dark,... but it's so well written.. I WAS THOROUGHLY entertained... wonderful peice... you demented freak!... j/k.. = P
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It's sort of strange and very short but the writing style to it is good. Just strange. Good job.
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hmmm i guess i like it. i mean i know it was written this way on purpose, but it would've been nice to know just a little bit more.
it was written well though. -
its um.....interesting....
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