Characters:
Jacques DeMont (Brown Hair w/ beard; Slightly broad in size; tallish (about 5’11”- 6’1”); Medium of pale and tan (average); mood- loves family ideal dad caring (almost spoiling); in his early 30s late 20s; casual 19ths century French baker (most brown; Broad build.)
Captain Gavrielle (The Man)- (young, blonde, dress in French soldiers uniform; Medium skin (tan); Tall at 6’0”; Broad built;
early 30s; Gotee.)
Maria DeMont
Damien DeMont
Adele DeMont
Cardinal, Claude DeFauch
Soldiers
(DN=Director Notes) from yours truly shadow
The night is cold and stormy and it is past midnight. Trees are rustling in the wind. There is an air of creepiness in the air and the sounds suggest that something is about to happen. The year is 1862, France
At Curtain: A man wrapped in soaked rags in struggling against the heavy winds to a dark house in the distance. He approaches the house and knocks at the door…
Scene I
(DN- Large flash to small flashes; rain and thunder noises; dark scene; opens w/ the man at the door and knocking sound)
DEMONT
Who’s there?
MAN
I bring an important message to you and to your family.
DEMONT
My family and I are asleep, would you begin by telling us who you are sir?
MAN
You must forgive me, but for my own sake you must never know my name, if I am caught here…well, your head will not be the only one on the line.
DEMONT
(With shock)
What are you talking about?
MAN
Please, let me in and I’ll explain everything to you.
DEMONT
Of course, please come in.
(DN- Stage: Dilemma on set changing. (Turning house or Slide away?)
(They both settle down into the comfortable house of the DeMont family and Monsieur DeMont brings the man at this door a warm drink)
(DN- Stage: Very warm scenery to give of wanted affect.)
This is difficult for me to explain so you will have to trust me and everything I say tonight without question.
(Pause)
Your family is not safe here anymore Monsieur, all of your lives are in grave danger and your survival and that of your families, depends solely on how well you follow my instructions.
DEMONT
That sounds a lot like a threat, who sent you?
MAN
I SAID NO QUESTIONS!
(Clears his throat)
I am not a threat to you. I am friend.
Governor Claude DeFauch has sent an order for your arrest…and execution
DEMONT
What? Why? My family has done nothing wrong, we are honest people, I run the town bakery, honestly and justly, my wife spends her time cooking and cleaning and taking care of my two children, we are righteous and loyal people…we
MAN
I don’t know why DeFauch wants you dead but he seems obsessed, it seems he has gone mad. You’re arrest is all he thinks about lately.
DEMONT
I don’t care why this De-what’s his name wants my family and I dead but we are leaving now! We will go north, my sister has a house only a few days from here we can be…
MAN
We can’t risk it, by now DeFauch as the entire armed forces looking for you, there only way is to get out of France…. my way.
DEMONT
What exactly is your way?
MAN
Not “what” but “how” I have a plan
Scene II
DeMont and the man and DeMont’s wife and two children, Maria, Damien and Adele are running through the woods shrouded by cloaks and darkness.
SOLDIER
Captain Gavrielle! Have you found the DeMonts yet?
GAVRIELLE (formally known as MAN)
Yes I have, they’re in the house, sleeping. I need support.
SOLDIER
Yes Capitan.
(They walk into the darkened house without lighting any candles and they both take their guns out and walk to the bed. They pull back the covers suddenly and they see that no one is there)
Capitan?
(Instead of answering, he shoots the soldier, drops his gun and leaves.)
(Gavrielle runs behind the barrel of hay that the DeMont family is hiding behind, they are all hiding now as more soldiers come to the house and set fire to it, only Jacques knows what is happening, Maria, Damien and Adele, the youngest are ignorant and scared)
MARIA
(Desperately, through tears) Jacques What are they doing?
JACQUES
Hush, I’ll explain later, but we can’t let them here us now.
MARIA
What? Why
JACQUES
I can’t explain it right now; you just have to trust me
MARIA
Trust you? Why should I trust you when you won’t even tell me what’s going on
JACQUES MARIA (overlapping
What about everything I You are going to tell me what
do for this family. Isn’t is going on right now, and why
that reason enough to trust House it being burnt down and
me? I’m the head of this family Our family is hiding behind a barrel
Right now all I know is that my of hay You tell me what’s going on
family is in danger and I can’t right now
tell you what’s going on right
now
ADELE
What is going to happen to our house?
MARIA
Everything is okay honey. (Strokes her hair) We are going to find somewhere new to live and it’s going to be pretty and we’re going to love it there okay darling?
ADELE:
But I don’t want to live somewhere new, I want to live here, with you and Papa I want...I want
MARIA
Hush.... hush, it’s okay
ADELE
I want I want I WANT
(This loud cry is heard by all the soldiers who are immediately alerted to the DeMont’s presence and start running towards the hay bale to catch them. They run away as quickly as they can by Captain Gavrielle is shot in the leg by a bullet and then shot once again in the chest. The family looks back for a moment to see Gavrielle fall but Jacques urges them all to keep running, Maria is paralyzed and is also shot)
ALL
No
ADELE
Momma
(Damien and Adele just cry and Jacques tries to get them to move again. Jacques snaps out of it but Jacques grabs Adele and picks her up and runs with her in his arms.)
Scene III
(They are still running)
DAMIEN
Papa, where are we going?
DEMONT
(They pause momentarily now that they are away from the soldiers, and still under the cover of darkness, DeMont sighs)
I don’t know princess, everything is uncertain now but we have to keep running.
ADELE
But why Papa?
DEMONT
Because there are some bad people who want to hurt us.
ADELE
The people that hurt Mama?
DEMONT
Yes Adele
DAMIEN
(Crying now again)
You won’t let them get us, will you Papa?
DEMONT
No, of course not.
ADELE
Will we ever see Mommy again?
DEMONT
(Is silent for a moment)
Yes, we will see her again, God willing.
(Damien and Adele are still too young to fully grasp their mother’s death and Jacques is holding back his sadness. He begins to hum to his children and they are soon fast asleep. Jacques cries himself self to sleep.)
Scene IV
(Jacques has a nightmare, in it, their escape and the death of his wife replays, however it is horribly distorted and demonic. The soldiers look monstrous and hideous and all the around him he hears screams of terror and suffering. One soldier in the dream fires the bullet that kills his wife, but when he turns to look at his wife’s murderer, he sees himself holding the gun. Soon, all the soldiers look like him and they capture his children and himself and drag them away. He wakes up screaming)
ADELE
Papa!
DEMONT
(Still breathing heavily and fast)
I’m all right. I’m all right.
ADELE
You’re scared too, aren’t you?
DEMONT
Yes, I am
ADELE
(Looks away and says sadly and quietly)
Momma isn’t coming back is she/
DEMONT
(Ashamed)
No (long pause) She isn’t.
ADELE
Don’t be scared Papa, you’re brave and very strong, you’re not afraid of anything.
DEMONT
I’m afraid that’s not true.
ADELE
What?
DEMONT
I’m scared for you and Damien. I have to be.
ADELE
You don’t have to be afraid anymore, I’ll protect you.
DEMONT
(Laughs sadly)
Thank you princess.
(Jacques and Adele both go back to sleep, both feeling much more at ease, despite their sadness.)
Scene V
(The sun rises a few days later Jacques is sitting by the fire in the woods while his children still sleep peacefully close by. Adele wakes up first and goes to go hug her father.)
ADELE
Papa!
DEMONT
Princess!
(She jumps into his arms.)
ADELE
Do we have anything for breakfast this morning papa?
DAMIEN
(Still half asleep)
Yeah! I’m hungry! We haven’t eaten in two days!
DEMONT
I know children; there hasn’t been any food. I’m sorry
DAMIEN
Well when are we gonna eat?
DEMONT
Soon, very soon.
(He thinks)
We should go find a place to eat now. It will be a long walk.
DAMIEN
But I’m too tired for a long walk! Can’t it be a short walk?
DEMONT
I’m afraid not, if we wait any longer the journey will be more difficult and we will be too weak to find anything, it has to be now.
ADELE
But we’re lost, how are we going to get out of here? We don’t even know where food is?
DEMONT
There is an inn north of here, I know the innkeeper. He is a good friend of mine from my youth.
DAMIEN
But how do we know which way is north anyway? We’re just going to get more lost!
DEMONT
No Damien, look. (He bends down and touches some fuzzy green moss on a tree) The moss always grows on the north side of the tree?
DAMIEN
Why?
ADELE
So we can find our way of course silly!
SCENE VI
(DeMont and company come to the inn. Adele is asleep, presumably from lack of energy from food. Damien drags himself along with his head down to the ground. DeMont is also exhausted but determined to survive. Their clothes are dirty and torn. DeMont knocks on the door weakly. The innkeeper, Bernard, opens the shutter near the door to see his visitors. He can't see who is at the door because DeMont is hanging his head down from exhaustion)
BERNARD
Whose there? A guest?
DEMONT
My children and I...we need food...a place to stay
BERNARD
Well, do you have money? This isn't a charity I'm running here! Have to make a living, I do. Got a wife and kids to feed and...(DeMont lifts his head and Bernard recognizes him.) Jacques! Jacques! My old friend! It's been a long time! What can I do for you Monsieur?
DEMONT
....Food. (He passes out and Bernard catches him.
BERNARD
Oh dear.... Esmeralda! Fetch, your mother, tell her we need our finest room ready!
(Esmeralda, Bernard’s oldest daughter drops the broom she's holding and goes up the stairs to find her mother.
(A few hours later, DeMont regains consciousness, surrounded by his concerned children, Bernard and Bernard’s wife)
BERNARD
Oy! Thank god you're awake, I thought I was going to have to open up a bottle of our best brandy, 'ey?
(DeMont groans)
Here, eat this; it will make you feel better. (He gives DeMont a tray with a hot bowl of soup on it.
DEMONT
Thank you.
BERNARD
So where is the beautiful Madame? You know I always fancied her. (His wife smacks his arm and he rubs it)
(There is a tense silence in the air for a moment)
MADAME (Rouchele’)
Come children, it's late and you'd best be getting off to bed. (She ushers them out of the room, to their own rooms)
BERNARD
You're not going to tell me something happened to Maria are you?
DEMONT
Dead, Bernard
BERNARD
But how? I...(clears his throat) I'm sorry
DEMONT
(DeMont decides it's probably best not to let Bernard know that they are fugitives)
She was.... sick.
BERNARD
So what brings you into my small piece of the world anyhow? And in such a state! (Quietly) You're not in any kind of trouble are you?
(There is a long silence and before DeMont can answer Madame Rouchele’ opens the door)
MADAME
Bernard, dear, there is someone at the front door, says they need to talk to you.
BERNARD
(To DeMont)
If you’ll excuse me...
DEMONT
Of course
(Bernard walks out of the room to answer the door, he opens it and sees three policemen, one of them an inspector)
BERNARD
Is there a problem inspector?
INSPECTOR
I'm afraid that there is. Are you Monsieur Rouchele’?
BERNARD
Yes, I’m him, what is it?
INSPECTOR
I'm looking for this man, have you seen him? (He pulls out a portrait of DeMont and shows it to Bernard)
BERNARD
(Quietly) Jacques....
INSPECTOR
Ah, so you know this man?
BERNARD
Of course I know him! He comes here often, a regular guest here!
INSPECTOR
(Excited) Really? Have you seen him lately?
BERNARD
Hmmmm, haven't seen him for six months!
INSPECTOR
Really? I talked to some of the town’s people and they seem to believe they saw him walk this way. Do you have any idea why that might be?
BERNARD
Well Inspector (chuckles) There a quite a lot of people who look like that, it could have been anyone!
INSPECTOR
The people I talked to seemed very sure that it was him. He was carrying his two children with him, wasn’t he?
BERNARD
Ah, that’s right, I almost forgot about the little ones. Got a beautiful wife too you know. Good man, good family.
INSPECTOR
They are dangerous fugitives from the law. They are wanted for treason and murder and I believe that they are hiding in your inn.
BERNARD
I’ve already told you I haven’t seen them in sixth months.
INSPECTOR
I want to see for myself, let me in
BERNARD
I’m afraid I can’t let you do that. Guests are sleeping; You’d be causing a disturbance.
INSPECTOR (angrily)
You will let me in or you will be arrested for obstruction of justice!
BERNARD
I don’t have to let you in until you show me some papers. These are dangerous times, with a family of murders running about, can’t be too careful now can we?
INSPECTOR
(Raises fist as it to hit Bernard)
Why you little!
(Lowers fist and takes a deep breath and calms down)
Very well, I shall return with the proper papers and then you will let me into your inn.
(He turns to walk away and the two soldiers follow him.)
No, you two guard the doors, make sure no one enters or leaves. Do you understand?
SOLDIERS
Yes Inspector
BERNARD
(Walks up to DeMont’s room and flings the door open and marches in, clearly angry)
DEMONT
What is it? Bernard?
BERNARD
I need you out of here! Now!
DEMONT
Why? What’s going on?
BERNARD
If you don’t mind, I’d like to be the one asking the questions here! How ‘bout we start with “Why did you kill your wife”? (Silence) Jacques, Why did you kill Maria?
DEMONT
Bernard, you know I didn’t
BERNARD
The inspector at the door seems to think differently! So tell me Jacques, who should I believe, the Inspector of the Police, or you?
DEMONT
Please, just let me explain.
BERNARD
Just make it quick.
DEMONT
My family and I, we’re being chased by the police.
BERNARD
For what crime?
DEMONT
I don’t know
BERNARD
You don’t know? You mean to tell me that you have no idea why the Inspector just showed up at my door demanding I let him in to search for you, claiming you were being hunted for murder?
DEMONT
I didn’t kill anybody!
BERNARD
Then give me some explanation
DEMONT
I.... I don’t have one.
BERNARD
(Turns around to think)
I can’t hide you here Jacques; I have a family, a wife to take care of. If I try to protect you, well, they’ll take all of that away from me. I have to cooperate. I just hope that I’m not making a mistake. I want to believe you didn’t kill anyone Jacques, I really do, but I don’t know if I can.
DEMONT
Bernard, please.
BERNARD
NO!
DEMONT
We’ll leave; we can find somewhere else to go, we won’t mention your name at all.
BERNARD
But they’ll still know I hid you here. You were seen coming here. They won’t let me go. No, I can’t let you leave here. The Inspector will be back here any moment; I’ll turn you over to him.
DEMONT
No, please!
BERNARD
Maybe if you cooperate, they’ll let you off easy.
(They hear a rattling noise and Madame Rouchele’ bursts into the room)
MADAME
Bernard!
(Bernard looks away and DeMont grabs a chair and hits Bernard in the back of the head with it, Bernard collapses, Madame Rouchele’ screams and Jacques ushers Adele and Damien to the window, he helps them climb out the window first, into a nearby tree, but he is about to jump to the branch but slips on the window ledge and ends up trying to hold on to the ledge with his finger tips.)
INSPECTOR
(Bursts into the room)
Where is he? Where did he go? (Grabs Madame Rouchele’) Where is DeMont? (Looks down at the unconscious Bernard) What happened to him?
MADAME
He escaped, he hit my husband and left.
INSEPCTOR
When did he leave?
MADAME
Just now.
INSPECTOR
(To soldiers)
He couldn’t have gotten very far, find him!
(The soldiers and the inspector leave and run to go find them, they exit on horseback, the inspector however, goes to the side of the inn and goes up against the wall, clearly watiting for something. Jacques is still hanging from the window sill)
DAMIEN
Papa, jump!
(Jacques jumps from the window to the tree, now holding onto the lower branch and climbs down.)
JACQUES
Are they gone?
INPECTOR
I'm afraid not. You are under arrest.
(Jacques gets into a fighting stance, ready to confront the Inspector.)
INSPECTOR
Careful, one false move...
(He pulls out a gun and points it at Damien.)
JACQUES
Damien!
DAMIEN
Dad!
INSPECTOR
Will you come quitely or will should I make another overly large hole in your son's head?
(Jacques lowers his stance, lowers his head and puts his hand out. The Inspector puts handcuffs on Jacques and his children. Guard enters)
INSPECTOR
I will take these three to the prison, arrest Monsieur and Madame Rouchele' for obstruction of justice.
(All exit)
END ACT I
(GAVRIELLE, previously assumed dead is shackled to a wall in a prison cell; instruments of torture are all around him. The lighting is a red color here)
DEFAUCH
Well, what have we here? The ex-Captain Gavrielle. It seems you’re position has gone from bad, to worse.
GAVRIELLE
Make your point DeFauch! I don’t plan on hanging around all day listening to you rave!
DEFAUCH
(Laughs)
It doesn’t seem like you have much choice now does it? But since you are so eager to accelerate this little meeting I shall be concise.
(Casually picks up a whip and starts pacing in front of GAVRIELLE)
Where were you the other night at around midnight?
GAVRIELLE
I was at an inn, drinking myself half-blind of course.
DEFAUCH
(Laughs again and then cracks his whip against GAVRIELLE’s chest.)
Liar! Where were you?
GAVRIELLE
(With venom)
You know where I was.)
DEFAUCH
Of course, but I want to hear it from your lips.
(Whips him again on the word “lips” He goes to whip him again)
GAVRIELLE
Alright!
(DEFAUCH pauses)
I was at the town bakery in Avignon!
DEFAUCH
Yes, of course you were. You assisted in their escape, did you not?
(Silence)
You got there shortly before I did, you warned them and helped them escape? Didn’t you? Isn’t that how you received that wound on your leg? It’s a pity it wasn’t a fatal shot, don’t you think? It might have made things a bit easier for you. If I may put things into prospective for you now: You have assisted in the escape of a dangerous man and his family. The punishment of which, as you already know, is death.
GAVRIELLE
I can bring them to you. I can find and arrest them if you give me the chance.
DEFAUCH
That’s exactly the kind of cowardly worm you are Gavrielle. Willing to sell out an entire family to save your own neck. So willing to repeat the same mistake that lost you your status as Captain, You always were weak Gavrielle. Besides, it doesn’t matter now. I took care of their arrest last night. They are now sitting in a prison as we speak.
Author notes
This out-of-date version of Act I (and a little bit of Act II) now serves only as a place for me to make sure I can't lose this old version. I don't recommend this version. Please see my new version, "L'Evasion Act I"
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Comments
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I think it moves way too fast with too little explanation, so although it had the potential to be a very engaging and interesting story it wasn't quite because it didn't seem like you stopped much to explain everything. Also, I don't believe that the descriptions of the characters at the top are that necessary, I think all that stuff should be explained throughout the story rather than in one descriptive sentence before the story actually begins. And of course it is a little long. But anyway, this was really good though and I liked it a lot, but I do think it could have been better. The description was really good and makes you able to feel like you're there.
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Thank you, I've been hearing a lot of "I need to explain things better" This is a first draft and I'm now in the process of rewriting this to hopefully make it better.
Version 2 is now posted and is being added to constantly, as this one was. Hopefully you will like that version better.
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You are a master! Is this story also is francais parce que je suis de Mont-Joli dans PQ. tres Bien!
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Thank you. I won't be updating this for a little while because I'm going back and basically re-writing this and fixing all the things I don't like. I'll try to explain things better.
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You'll have to forgive me, since the French I know is limited to maybe ten or so words, but I do appreciate it. Thank you.
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ok i love this story and i like the way you wrote it...you didnt explain that much in it but i still think it was good.
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I don't usually like stories written in this way, but it was an interesting one. At times, the plot was too typical, and too little was explained, but if it keeps going, it'll be a good story.
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I agree and I want to fix that up. Thanks
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Excellent work. i was drawn into it from the very start. even though im not into this sort of genre, i loved it and i hope you win. congrats


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This isn't technically a screenplay, just a play. A screenplay is for the screen (TV, movies). I don't think the director's notes are necessary here, and should always be kept to a minimum. Especially if you're not the director. Nice job though.
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*Ahem*
I am the director...but not the author.
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Wow you should really make this a play or something! I loved it.
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Interesting story but I found the director's notes as to he was saying what destracting. However I enjoyed the read and am looking forward to any additional chapters.
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the character analyses in the beginning is unusual but the piece is wonderful this has a great flow and the detail is so intricate i did something in this format of script mine didn't turn out so well
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Sorry about the analysis and director's notes, it's mostly for me so I can get a better idea of what's going on, since I plan to actually stage and perform this when it's finished. Thank you for commenting.
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Yeah sorry about that. It's more like note takeing just to get a higher feel for the character.
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I can see this becoming a movie!
A job well done.
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LOVE IT :)
Dear Readers of L'Evasion,
Please ignore my Directors Notes if they interupt your reading. We are also big fans of consructive critisism. If you see something and have an idea about it, please feel free to post your ideas.
From, Shadow(aka Director)

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Wow.
It's very good, I really like the amount of detail and the flow you have put into this piece. A great effort, though there are some errors, it was relatively easy to understand. I hope you continue with this magnificant piece of work. Well done.
Rae.
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Thanks, I'm going through now, looking for spelling and grammer mistakes as we speak.
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Evasion
Very powerful! Suspense well-maintained! The way the head of the family faces the situation is remarkable; One question-is it a story or drama? Historical background adds colur to suspense,esp the period of Louis the fourteenth, when discontent was brewing,depotism was ruling.
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I will definitly add the historical details later on, I haven't done much research yet, and I'm not even sure what time period I want this to take place in yet. I'm thinking pre-revolution though. I'll do that later though.
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This is good writing. there are a few errors which im sure you will correct as you edit, but as for the reason they are running, might they have relatives that are against the crown, or could there have been rumors spread as to the loyalty of the family? this needs to be made clear when jacques tells bernard the truth. as to where the family will go, there must be some kind of a secret society where they can take refuge. King Louis XIV was king, so look up history on him and the revolution or whatever is taking place. They also could escape to America, as was the style in those days.☻ I'll keep checking back and am looking forward to the rest. Good Luck.
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Thank you for commenting, very helpful to me and I'm glad that someone had the patients to read it, despite it's ever-growing length.
As for your ideas about why they are running, they have no idea why they are running, why they need to escape, that's the mystery of the play, that's why they can't tell Bernard. I want to keep this story in France, partly for the reason that I don't want them to run away from the problem forever. I believe that I'm coming to the end of act I and that it's time for the family to stop running for now and settle down in someway, I don't know what's going to happen to them yet though. I'll have to figure it all out, thank you.
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A litte update here. I haven't gotten any comments yet with the exception of my friend Shadowsong and I think that as I make it longer and longer the chances of it getting read in it's entirty are becoming less and less likely. Though this is also up for the practicle reason that I can access and work on this play from any computer in the world. Being only a freshman in highschool, I am usually within a small area on the map but that's beside the point.
I am currently as much in the dark as anybody about what exactly will happen to Jacques DeMont and his family and why they are being chased at all. If you happen to read this, you may feel free to bounce ideas off of me. I would appreciate it very much.
If any of you are wondering why the title now says "English" in parenthesis, the reason is because I realize that L'Evasion is french, meaning, "The Escape" This title may lead some english speaking members to believe that this is in French before reading it and therefore passing it over. Just thought I'd clear that up. -
OMG THAT SUX
lol jk... I really like it but i want to see it done so keep working








