God doubted his own exsistence and wanted to see himself, so he decided to create water to reflect his image. He created water and looked upon it, but he did not see anything. He said to water, ‘’Water, I’ve created you for the purpose of reflecting my image, don’t you know your purpose?’’ Water said it needs dust to reflect his image. Then he created dust and threw it into water. He looked at the water and did not see anything, so he said, ‘’Dust, I’ve created you for the purpose of combining with water and reflect my image, don’t you know your purpose? The dust said it’s not to be seen without light. So god created light and looked at the water, he still didn’t see anything, then he said, ‘’Light, I have created you for the purpose of shining upon water and dust to reflect my image, don’t you know your purpose? The light said, it does not exist without darkness. God then created darkness in order to see himself. He looked at the water and saw the light seems more glorious and brighter. He got furious and punished the water, the dust, the light and darkness. He took light’s tongue, water’s taste, dust’s ears and darkness’s eyes. Then he abandoned them in eternity. That is how universe has created.
Sarp
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First line: exsistence (existence)
Very creative idea for how the universe was created. Haha it actually seems like something that could've been pulled out of holy text. How funny would it be if someone read this and decided to start a religion based off of it. That'd be crazy
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Anyway, great job! Looking forward to more from you!
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Creative, as Cam and HT said xD
Loved it actually =D
Short, but sweet, just...super good xD
Three clappy hands for this for sure xD
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as i was going to say before gamer stole my words, it was very creative.... so now i must think of something else to say.... ahh, I love how thats how water lost its taste though lmao..... pretty good pretty good... enjoyed reading...
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Wow...this is actually really creative. xD
I've never thought of it that way, and never wouldn't have been able.
Good read. xD
-HT
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a very creative thought you have came up with, very original and that is what a good writer can do is create out of the norm wonderful
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this is quite good, it was short and simple i liked the begging as it was intresting, you could have added more but overall it was okay and i can see it had some what of a spirtual adventure in this part and i also liked the ending 'This is how universe has created'short again but very good
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Okay was provoking in some senses and intersting in others... I found it to be a light read with a message to out across
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Very original, but you could make the writing better by paragraphing and this story is a prime candidate of one that could use some great imagry. It could also benefit from some phrasing fix up. Edit it and you'll turn a great idea into an even better story!
Jazzy
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interesting... that was a origional story thats 4 sure! I really enjoied it. it's good to have something origional evry once in while! ^.^
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Mirror mirro? I thought of that myself.. the structire is a bit hard to comprehend but elswise it's a very interesting peice
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Er...does dust really have anything to do with reflection? This was an interesting take on it, although it's a bit brief and could use some more detail. And I can't really imagine dust with ears or light with a tongue. Good work!
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Welcome To SW
This was short but very deep. Sometimes the short stories are good because they don't loose the readers thoughts. Violet has made some wonderful ideas.
Anyway, it was a good read.
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A nicely creative take on creation. The only suggestions that I would make would be to break each element into its own paragraph just to make it easier for the reader to follow. Also, consider have the elements actually speak so that it is more like a dialogue between the creator and the created.
I think you have put together an interesting concept that has unlimited possibilities.
Keep writing and welcome to StoryWrite.
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