Romiette and Julieo

It all started one warm winter night.  I saw Romiette shielding his eyes from the bright sunlight. Tears were running down his face.

"My dear Julieo, will I never see you again?"

I walked up to him.

"What's wrong?" I asked.
"My dear Julieo cannot see me anymore. Her father told her that if he saw both of us together, we would look silly."
"What on earth?"
"ACK! No, I got that wrong, he would kill me and put my head in the dragon's mouth on the wall."
"Well, sorry. Anything I can do?"
"Yes please! Take this letter to Julieo!"
"Fine. Where does she live?"

I walked up to her house, and knocked on the door.
"Come in." Said the father.

I walked down the stairs and came to the top story.
"Julieo?"
"Juli ETE is in the next room." Said a pretty girl in the corner.
"Thank you..."
"Hentha."
"What sort of a name is tha.."
"My father's Henry, and my mother's Martha."
"Oh. Okay."
I walked out onto the balcony, and saw Julieo.
"Here is a letter from Romiette."
"Oh thank you!" She read the letter. "Please, give this letter to Romiette."
"What am I, a mailman?" I grumbled and walked away.

"Romiette, this is from Julieo."
He read the letter, then asked,
"How pretty is Hentha?"
"Very." I replied, puzzled. I explained to him what she looked like. "I think she is there to monitor whether she sees you."
"Please, give this to Hentha, and this to Julieo."
"I'm not a pack horse!" I said.

"Hentha, this is for you."
"Thank you." She said.
I went out to Julieo, and handed her the parcel.
"For you."

I left town that night.

A year later, I came back into town, and saw Rometha and Heniette happily married, and read the epithaph for Juileo at the local cemetery. It said she died the night I left.

Author notes

Romeo and Juliette swapped names they loved each other so much. Then Romiette and Hentha swapped names they loved each other so much. This is meant to be a twist on Romeo and Juliette. All non-grammatical errors are meant to be in there.

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  • Tiger-Lily gold member
    June 26

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    O.O What was in that parcel?

    This is the best rendition of R&J I've ever read! It's brilliant!! xD

    I love ow you end this! I was laughing. Sorry f that wasn't the intention.

    -HT


  • Missi
    April 7

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    this was very funny i liked the part 'what am i a mailman' or something like that, it was quite different and i did not get the end but this was very good
    i wish you would hve continued overall very good!!!!!


  • Intrepid
    February 24

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    It was intruiguing to say in the least, a little befuffled in places but the overall story and the effect was brilliantly written

    good work- praise


  • Paragonz Shadow
    January 23

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    Haha, that was pretty good. The names thing was a bit hard to follow at first, but I think you did it quite well!
    Kudos on winning bronze,
    Jazzy


  • Midnightmare
    September 5, 2007

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    yeah the ending was rather confusing but still, i liked the way you took a story/play that was really well known with famous characters and distorted it (in a sense.) well done!


  • Lukkieight
    May 17, 2007

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    I was kind of lost at the end. I really had no idea what you were talking about. I think I'll stick to reading Shakspeare

  • Brent
    April 29, 2007

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    I don't know why, but I think I've read this before... And it's probably a title that's been used before. Seems like a different take though


  • plurangel silver member
    December 14, 2006

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    completely confused. I'm sorry this had me completely confused on who was talking, who was who, and i'm sorry i did not like it. but i do wish you better luck on your next story.

  • DustyOldHalo
    December 12, 2006

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    Well if you added this to a book of tales, I'd buy it.

    It's down right cute. And clever. And I've never seen anything like it before.

    Gotta go read your other ones!

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