I see you but you never see me.
Ive known you for the past three years.
Your complicated, and its beautiful, defining who you really are.
You could give two shits less, and its amazing, everyone should carry such an attitude.
We have helped one another through hell and back, a brother and a sister.
We have went months on end, without ever so much as a glance at each other.
My dirty little secret, can you see me now?
Please tell me what you think
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Double-Kudos
Very interesting concept, I love your way of making your point through a form of metaphor...it's all so...hidden. One of my problems when I started writing, or so I was told, is that I always made everything to ambiguous. Personally, I think that ambiguity makes the story/poem more intriguing...it's like a way of saying what you want only to who you think is worthy.
beginning: 4, language: 3, plot: 4, ending: 4, dialog: 3, characters: 4.
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