The Death Letter ch. 1

It was just before my 18th birthday when i met him. I immediately fell in love with him. He smiled at me and i collapsed. I couldn't even breathe. My heart pounded uncontrollably. His piercing blue eyes stared into mine as if he were reading my soul. We began going out two weeks after that. The day of out graduation he surprised me and proposed. HE told me he never wanted to be with anyone else besides me.1

Our wedding was very big. Many of out friends came. We had our first child the following year. We named her Hope. She had her father's eyes. She was a beautiful baby. Unfortunately, on her second birthday she contracted a disease called leukemia. She died the following month. Chris was overwhelmed with grief but always had hope that life would one day be better. 2

A war broke out between the United States and Cuba. Chris was recruited to fight in the war. We moved to Hawaii where there was a training camp in Pearl Harbor. Every night he would come home hoping the war would end soon so that he wouldn't have to serve. But every day the war got thicker and more gruesome. It seemed as if it would never end. Chris' training finally ended and he went to fight in Cuba. He wanted me to be safe so I moved back to San Fransisco, California. He came home to visit every two months. In the month of June he came to visit me and we decided we were ready to have another child. The following month I found out I was pregnant. I would run to the bathroom time after time vomiting all that I could including acid. The acid burned my throat as it rose up in my throat. Chris didn't know yet about my pregnancy. He wasn't going to visit until next month so I decided to wait to tell him face to face. 3

The smell of food made me queasy. I could barely stand and go to work but I managed. The worst part was that it was August and it was sweltering hot outside. But I knew I had to tough it out for the sake of us all. For Hope I Had to have hope.4

TO be continued..........5

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  • Dainichi
    October 5, 2004
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    well done

    good...for some reason i picture this being in like the late 60's with that sorta movie feel to it...i dunno what im talking about, dont mind me....will read the rest when im not being a crazy person...

  • fallenangel3
    March 31, 2004
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    this is a good story. I think it would be really really amazingly interesting if you made it more descriptive and went into a little more detail. And I agree with the person above (Drift-er) that you should make your sentences longer. Describe! but besides the whole describing thing it was really cool. I like what its about. now off to chapter two I need to see what happens!
    ~Chels

  • Drift-er
    March 30, 2004
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    this is a good story..it was sorta confusing..i think ure sentences should be a bit longer and descriptive..lol i know you hate a lot of adjectives..but hey..sometimes its good..but i am in suspense...yay me im an inspiration! ~ T(your other half)

  • TragicFlaw
    March 30, 2004
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    this was...good..i was a bit confused, kinda had to think about who chris was but i got it.lol umm, this story reminded me of something but i couldn't pin point what...oh well i'll think of it eventually. i think you should talk more about Hope she seems like a wonderful little bitty girl. good story can't wait for more
    much love
    Amber