Men are buried in the cold dirt with only tombstones to show their lives. Dwarves are enclosed in giant stones with elaborate carvings etched into them. Elves become the trees, living forever. But what becomes of the sorceror?1
I thought this everyday while my father was sick in the healing care of the elves. One day as I was visiting him, I asked him.2
"Father, when the time comes that a sorceror. . ." I faltered for a moment, "passes, how is he remembered?"3
"Oh sweet Lydie, the sorcerors choose. We can do as we wish." He smiled.4
"Okay" I said gazing at him, "so. . ." I hesitated again as tears filled my eyes, "so when your time comes Father, what do you want?"5
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My father was placed in a crypt the next day. On the top was carved nothing but his name, Jeron Blathsee, and the symbol of a sorceror. I also had a ring made of the finest silver. It was intended to look like him and show his happiness. Long curls of hair, a mustache flowing into a straight beard, years of wrinkles on his forehead, and a small crooked nose. What made him whole though, was the striking ruby eyes and a little half smile.7
All of his memories showed in his face, and he was right, no leaf could show you that.
Author notes
I wrote this long ago. My friend had a ring that looked like this and I wrote a story for it. I worked mainly on description, I hope I did it justice.
A contest entry
- Under 200 words by QueenWolf.
140 points, ended May 22, 2007, 49 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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ok this is a little over the word count but by by much so i will allow it.
I like your description i could picture the ring. You also have a smooth flow. Well done and lots of luck.
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oh dang it! you're right! I am over the word count, sorry about that. But thanks for still letting me into the contest! And thanks for the great comments!
Smiles,
M.E.
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very good!
i like a the descriptive feature in this little story. well done, Hol, well done! i always knew u were very good at describing diferent things and such. i liked how u also put ur own feelings into the story to give it a little more life. great work keep it up!
~Netta~beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 4, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 4.
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