The Overfiend: Eve


No one knows where he came from, all that was know was he was a collector. Every village soon learned to fear one thing, his calling card, the sight of a crimson moon. For that meant only one thing, he had chosen his next prey. It could be in any village or city, he only went by one name. A name that drew terror in the hearts of every human, the Overfiend. 1

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The moon held an uneasy chill, it had been hours since the crimson moon appeared in the sky. As if fearing the wraith of the goddess, all the villagers took their women and hide them. They knew it was hopeless but still they went through the motions. Eve watched her father and brother commend their strongest men to their post. It was decided that if the Overfiend was to visit their village he was to be in for a fight. He father was old and well over fifty but it was hard to tell when it came to his family, he was back in his day with the king’s army. This was before eve was born, but it was said her father was one of the best rangers that king had. He had train Julius, Eve’s brother, for the same propose. With one final look into his sister’s eyes Julius join their father to guard the village.3

Eve was said to have the highest chance of being taken. She was after all the head’s daughter and raised for beauty. It was a fact that everyone rubbed in her face, even the jealous girls. She was breed only to be a contract. For years the neighboring village has controlled the river as her village controlled the forest and had the biggest fields. It was long decided that the two head family breed a child each. These two children would be married and that would join the two villages. 4

All her life Eve was told to be a lady, the words seeped into her body like a parasite. She never wanted to be like the other women in her village subservient to unworthy men . Boastful and wicked men, that would rather raise a fist, then earn their wives services. She wanted a man like her father and brother, at least before her mother died. Eve was no more then a lowly woman to them. 5

Bathed in the finest soaps, and covered in the most delicate silk. She was blessed with everything a man would want; a fine slender frame but with enough meat on her so she would not look like a skeleton. Her breast themselves defined gravity and were small but firm. Her body curved in all the right places, and finally and innocence face, that could drive any man to sin. 6

However, even before her birth, Eve was already taken. By the son of the most greed and vile chief. The only reason he wanted to makes this pact was to gain more land then Eve’s father would allow him. His son was even worst, a flabby bag of wind that thought more of his own worth then anyone. He would do anything to exceed his own worth. Just thinking about him made Eve’s skin crawl. It almost made her wish the Overfiend would take her away.7

She stared into the crimson moon, it’s like blanketing the village, she hoped that he would come for her. As she looked over at the me men in the village, she knew her wish wouldn’t come true, they rushed to other house. The overfiend had been sighted. With a regretful sigh she had turned to go to bed. Only to be surprised by a strong hand covering her mouth. 8

The stories of him were true, upon the mere sight of him from the shadows brought her body to a chill. It was as if she was looking at a demon. This was her first sight of him, the one they called the Overfiend. He wore a white faced masked, his white hair draped to his broad shoulders, he was a massive man with a powerful frame. He dress in black and like many of the gentlemen that came to visitor the village for trade. All of his face that could be seen were his eyes. His fiery eyes, eyes that could turn even her father to stone. Eyes that looked upon her with a curious stare. 9

The Overfiend took Eve deeper into her room where prying could see. He said nothing , not even when he removed his hand from her lips and traced it to her shoulders. She wanted to scream but she couldn’t. just being in his presence took her voice. This is what she wanted , this is what she asked for. There was a saying that came to her mind as he pushed her into the wall and pressed his body against hers. When you ask for the devil enough times, he will come.10

“how?”, His voice was strong and deep, it sent quakes through out her body. “how what?” she asked her voice finally coming back to her, almost as if he willed it. He looked into her eyes, she could swear her body was growing weaker and her will was breaking. “You don’t know do you?” he asked with a hint of interest in his voice, “you don’t know how you called me?” Her mind raced when she heard that, but her heart was beating out of her chest upon his next move. 11

Slowly, he started to remove her clothing. Her grown dropped to the floor as he examined her body. She watched him carefully, there was something in his eyes, something about the way he looked at her, it wasn’t the lustful stare she had gotten from a lot of men in the village. It was something else, something she couldn’t place. But, her thought were interrupted as his gloved hands traced her nipples, pinching and tracing them, he was teasing them to raise for him. Moving his hand down her body to her pussy, letting it feel his presence before cupping it in his hand. 12

It quivered from his unique touch, she wanted to run but her legs wouldn’t listen. The Overfiend look into her eyes again, watching her face and he slide his hands within her. Her juices started to flow as he moved his fingers in and out of her. Normally, a man would lose his fingers for this, but something told her this man had no fear of that. Eve fought the urge to moan, not out of fear of him. But fear that she would be heard, there was something in this Overfiend that made her want him to stay. It was either that or there was something in her. 13

She couldn’t tell, she could sense him smiling behind his mask. He let her go and took a few steps back. Eve’s virgin liquids flowed out of her body as she stared at the man whom brought her to this. It wasn’t just his touch, it was his presence the made her feel this strong ecstasy. She wanted more, she wanted him to be her first.14

Almost as if sensing this, Overfiend undid his pants and let them drop to the floor. Without thinking but not against her will. Eve, fell upon her knees, know what to do. As part of her breeding, she was taught by a mistress in the village on how to please and man, more then one way. All to be the perfect wife for that windbag. She took in the sight of Overfiend member, she wouldn’t have expected less then a strong cock for a strong man. 15

Without further hesitation, she pressed her lips against it. Almost kissing it but not yet. Letting it’s skin grace his lips. Moving her tongue against it’s veins , tasting it before engulfing it into her mouth. A silent moan escaped from Overfiend’s mouth as he placed his hands on both sides of her head, pushing his cock deeper down her throat. She moaned as she forced his cock down her throat. His hips moving his member in and out. Without realizing it, Eve’s fear of this man left, it was replaced by a desire. A desire to not only be with im but to please him. He pulled out of her mouth just in time to let his cum erupt on top her face. 16

Almost with an animalistic strength, Overfiend moved her to the bed, and pressed his body over hers. She waited to see what would happen next, her mind pulsed with anticipation and want. It hurt at first but as he pushed himself inside her, she found it easy to ignore the pain. In fact, she even started to push herself against him. Their bodies merged for what seemed like an eternity. Eve moaned and wrapped her arms around him welcoming him. Looking into his eyes always through the mask. The pain was nothing, knowing it was him, made it nothing. The feel of him inside her, thrusting himself in and out of her. It wasn’t long before she felt her first rush. 17

Her body started to feel this weird flow of ecstasy and nirvana. It was something she had never felt, something overpowering and building. It was the pleasure that only this man could give her. The man known only as the Overfiend. He was her first and she welcomed the idea. The more she thought about it the more that flow built. The more he pushed the strong the sense , until finally she could hold it back any longer. Her body weakened and shook. A wave of pure pleasure took over her mind and her flesh, she erupted in her first ever tantrum of passion. She wanted to kiss him, to please him again. 18

But once he was finished he took up his pants and looked out the window. The villager were still at the other house, no doubt looking for him. Not knowing they were only chasing an illusion. He turned to eve, he didn’t know how she did it, but she called out to him. There was something about her, something that made her different. But she was still not yet ready. 19

“Three day,” he said as he moved to the window. Eve looked at him with shock and surprise, he wasn’t going to take her with him. He was going to leave her, leave her unclaimed. However, as she rushed to him he turned, his eyes again. His eyes staring her down. “I am not leaving you,” he said as if knowing what she was thinking. “In three days, the time will be right. I have already left my mark on you, in three days, I will come to take what is mine.” with that said, he leapt from her window, but when she looked to see if he was fine, he was gone. All he left for her was his promise, “three days” and from what she had heard about him, The Overfiend never broke a promise. 20

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  • livingItup
    December 2, 2008

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    erotic

    You most definitely need to write a second part. Yes the grammar and spelling were off but eh nothings perfect. it was very interesting to read. but just a suggestion...you should change the word "pussy" to something better like "womanhood" or "maidenhead" or something of the like. "pussy" just doesnt seem to go with the feel of the story...it seems like in the middle ages or something. just a suggestion though. but i would love if you wrote a second part.
    good erotic write.


  • SilverMaru
    January 28, 2007

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    Very Nice

    The idea and movement of the storyline is very good. Easy to follow and drags the reader in. Only spiff is the misspellings and grammatical errors. I could still tell what you were trying to say but it got a bit irratating in the middle.
    Will there be a part two perhaps? When he comes back and takes her away? I wouldn't mind learning more about the Overfiend.

    beginning: 4, language: 2, plot: 5, ending: 2, dialog: 3, characters: 5.


  • Miss South Carolina
    January 20, 2007
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    great job

    i liked it i thought it was interesting makes me want to keep reading your stories


  • naughyvamp
    December 2, 2006
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    love it

    i love it it's real good what kind of mark did he leave on her i wonder it was great....

    beginning: 3, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 4, characters: 4.