There once was a frog.1
His name was Horse.2
Which was a rather strange name for a frog. But it wasn't just his name that was different.3
He was too.4
You see, Horse just wasn't like the other frogs. He didn't like to swim in the swamp. He didn't like to hop around on lily pads.5
What he loved the most was running free in the pasture, and eating grass.6
The other frogs would point and laugh. 'Look at Horse' they would taunt 'He thinks he really IS a Horse...boy, he sure is weird.'7
This made Horse feel sad. 'Why couldn't I just be a horse?” he complained 'then I could run in the pasture and no one would laugh at me.'8
One night he looked up in the sky and saw a bright star. He thought to himself, 'Hey, I'll give it a whirl.' He looked up at the star and said:9
'Star here, star there, first star I see up there10
Wish I will, I'm not a liar11
Grant my wish you ball of fire'12
And he made a wish.13
And do you know what he wished?14
That's right............he wished that he was a horse.15
And KABLAMO!16
Just like that he turned into a horse17
But...............18
He wasn't like the other horses. He didn't much enjoy running around in the pasture. What he really loved the most was swimming in the swamp with the frogs.19
CANNONBALL!
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i thought it it was really good keep up the good work
beginning: 2, language: 4, plot: 4, ending: 4, dialog: 4, characters: 5.
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I think this story is pretty good bt it was not what i thought it wood be
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Very cute. I love your blunt style. Part of it is because this is a children's story, I suppose, but it's funny, too. Horse's wish made me smile. Good work.
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Good.
I liked this story a lot. It was kind of different, but it was very good. You are a very creative writer, and I may consider you for first place. It depends if I get others. This is probably my favorite story so far. -
LOVED IT!!
As soon as he got what he wanted, it turned out Horse liked what he was supposed to be doing before! That is the funnest ending! He was probably even wierder amond the hores because of his name. A horse named Horse?
beginning: 4, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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FUNNY!
That is awesome!
I think you can make it a little longer, add more details and specs. But, it is great as is.
Thanks for entering the contest.
Amy
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OMGoddess. This was so funny. Thank you for sharing and entering my contest. I'll let you know soon.
~Brooke~
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