The hardest thing for me,
Is to say goodbye
To the woman
That I love.1
I know
That tomorrow,
I will have you
Once again.2
Yet until that time,
I know not what to do
Other than miss,
And think of you,3
I am lucky,
To be the one
To call you mine
And have your heart.4
I know that I don’t deserve,
One such as you.
Yet my heart already
Belongs to you.5
So I will sit here,
Longing to
Hold you
Once again.
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Awww! This was cute. I hate the feeling of having to leave every night, and wait until the next day to see them...I guess that is why I moved in with mine, lol!! This was a very well done write, whoever you wrote this for, is a lucky girl
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aww i like this one its soo sweet
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Really nice. I especially like the next to last lines.
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A very sweet poem, its one of the better love ones i've read lately (no one dies or thinks about sucide/revenge/anger). Excelent peice.
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Naww that is so cute and sweet. Is this for a person in particular? They shold be very touched if so.
Thanks for entering and goodluck.
Lady Madeline.
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that is soooo cute
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beautifully written yet simple, sweet. i really liked this! great job!
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I'm a romatnic schmuck!
that's why I adore love poems ^_^ I bet you were inspired when you wrote this 
The nice thing with love is that.. it makes us feel more alive and it makes waiting seem more exciting 
That's what your poem reminded me of - it also made me think of the times when I parted with the guy I loved, amd through the night, I keep waiting for the morning, to be with him again BTW.. if you look sideways, your poem looks like a lifeline (the thing for the heart was that intentional?) Thank you for sharing this with us
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This is so sweet! Would have made an excellent inside for a Valentine's Day Card.
Simple and to the point and I just love it.
Really good poem.
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this was very nice and the emotion is clear I would love to see you write more of these poems well happy writing to you
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yea, well written. I feel again many emotions, it touches the reader.
Hey, I want meet you on Allpoetry . You should write more poems.
Well done, thanks for sharing.
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wow this was really good i liked the way you wrote this
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This is a beautiful poem but you should have it on allpoetry not on Storywrite it is a little long for my usual preference but its lenght works for it keep writing T
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Nice. Very poetic.
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WONDERFUL
This is wonderful I really loved it.
-Dawn-
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I think that this poem is very sad but nice. It made me cry literally have tears in my eyes because I can't imagine having my love lost. I don't want t think about that. It is very touching and if this poem is true, I am sorry and I will give you a hug. But other than that, it should be in a book because that just made me cry!
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Aw...
Quite sweet. I'm glad this wasn't one of those terribly sad "final goodbye" poems, though I certainly understand missing someone. Lovely work. -
that is so cute! i loved it. i think its really sweet, did u make it for your girlfriend?
Taylor Renee
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Your really good...
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This is nice. I think the word "tomorrow" in stanza 2 could be symbolic of any amount of time. As if the person saying this is praying that they will reunite tomorrow rather than think about the real amount of time. It's all very thought provoking. I like it a lot, it's a good piece that anyone can easily compare to their own lives. Great job!
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This was very sweet, but I dont think that (5) fit in very well. I dont know why really, I just htink that you can reword that I little so it flows nicer.
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Ah! this is cute, its hard to say god bye to a lover, it hurts even though its only for a day. we get that consummed in love we can't be without it. this person must be very specail. Slán Good luck Dolores.
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