“Mama! Mama! Viscount Horis Ingleton is riding down our street!” Louise called to her mother who was reclined on a lounge. Unpon hearing this, Lydia got up quickly and straigtened herself up. The Viscount’s coming had come as a surprise to Louise, Mariah and their mother, Lydia.1
“Come girls, we will meat him in the drawing room. Pick up your sewing.” Said Lydia in a hurry. Within moments, Horis was ushered into the room.2
Upon Horis’ arrival, all three ladies rose from their seats and curtsied in greeting. After introductions, Horis stated his reason for coming.3
“It is my sincerest wish that you, Miss Beenleigh, will join my mother for tea tomorrow morning.” 4
“ I would be honoured Sir, thank you.” Was all Mariah had to say before Horis kissed her hand.5
“Thank you. I will be around at approximately 10 in the morning to escort you there.”6
The date was set.7
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The next day, Horis Ingleton was around at Mariah Beenleigh’s house to escort her to Duchess Charmaine Ingleton’s house. Both Mariah and Charmaine had a pleasant time having tea together, but Charmaine still could not help but feel a little uneasy about the prospect of her only son, Horis, marrying a nobody. This apprehension was fuelled by the Beenleigh history of producing mainly daughters. It was one of Charmaine’s greatest fears that the Ingleton name would become degraded or lost through marriage. This was not something that anyone wanted for the Ingleton’s as they were one of the aristocratic families of London.9
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Mariah had felt uncomfortable in the Ingleton household. It was very large – one of the largest houses in London, and Mariah felt as though she was being constantly scrutinised by the staff, because they knew as well as she did that she was not from the higher circles. Mariah felt the opposite way, however, as she had tea with the Duchess. 11
When Mariah arrived back home, she was faced with numerous questions from her sister and mother. Questions such as “How big is their house?” and “what is Duchess Charmaine like, is she agreeable?” plagued her.12
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In the coming weeks, Mariah and Horis were seen more often in each other’s company. They were seen at plays, assemblies, the Opera, private parties, and wandering the streets on a regular basis. Months passed and their relationship grew stronger. 14
Author notes
OK chapter 2 is here! what do you think? as i said with chapter 1, this is my first attempt at writing a story 
hope you enjoy it
Please tell me what you think
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this is a very excellent 2nd chapter. sorry it took so long for me to read it. its a very good add on. i love the way u show the thoughts of different people not just one, thats great, it brings out the story more.
but this one is lacking a little details. think about discribing when they had tea, like what they said or bring it up as a sort of flashback for Mariah or Horis.
also think about discribing where they went and what it was like. like when they went to the Opera, were people staring at them cause Mariah was a "nobody. little stuff like that helps.
but these are just suggestions of course, its ur story.
anyways this is a really good add on. cant wait to read more about it, keep me posted please.
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hey I have posted chapter 3 hope you enjoy reading it when you get a chance Ampd
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hey thanks fo checking out chapter 2 I will re read this and probably modify it, but i didnt want to drag it out thanks for the suggestions I really appreciate them, and when i have chapter 3 i will let you know Ampd
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It's good. Another piece that makes you wonder what their relationship has planned. Though i have one suggestion, the chapter went a little quit, i would maybe add a little conversation at the tea part so the reader can get more of a feel of the characters and what they are like. Also so that it won't just feel like you're reading just the facts, though it's not completely like that. Other then that this is really great. Keep informing me when you get more!!!!!!
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hey I have posted chapter 3 hope you enjoy reading it when you get a chance Ampd
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hey thanks for lookin at this one too
i shall read through it again... I dodnt want this to drag out or anything... thanks again Ampd
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Interesting story^^
Sorry if I can't help you out on how to improve your story since I'm new myself.
The only thing wrong I can find was the typo "meat" in paragraph 2.
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lmao thanks for that
Ampd
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