Part One:Coldness

I sat waiting for her my bestfriend."Ashe am here"Marie my best friend call from the door that keep out the snow and coldness."what happened"I looked at Marie her face was wet.But it wasn't from the coldness or snow.I could tell by the look on her face."he broke my heart he broke up with me"Marie spoken just barely loud enought to hear her."Marie"I said."I loved him I let him kiss me"Marie yelled.But the cat surpised by the yelling ran and I tripped.I had a cup of very hot tea for Marie and me."owww"I said."are you ok"said Marie who was now by my side."yeah just a little hurt but ok"I said.

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