Rebel Earth: In the Beginning

This story is still in progress. Please don't critize me for a bad ending.

Rebel Earth: In the Beginning

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This work has been created by Liam Dawson.

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If I have infringed any copyrights etc. please contact me immediately to point out this error.

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TABLE OF CONTENTS:

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Chapter 1: The Alignment

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Chapter 2: Mass Hysteria

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Chapter 3: Motives

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Chapter 4: The Wait

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Chapter 5: The Raid

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Chapter 6: Discoveries

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Chapter 7: The Arrival

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Chapter 8: A Series of Wierd Events

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CHAPTER 1: THE ALIGNMENT

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CAPE CANAVERAL, FLORIDA, USA

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It all began that fateful Sunday. The day scientists predicted that in a year, Earth and another planet would come into a parallel orbit for a month. Shuttles were prepared, astronauts trained, and some of the population of Earth were eager to begin life on a new planet. Where one time long ago a site stood that launched the first person into space, there now stood a space ‘station’, which did a much better job that its predecessor, an American organization called NASA. But the thing was, nobody ever gave a thought as to whether the planet was inhabited or not.

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It came to that Monday. The Monday that changed our lives. The planet came into alignment, and we launched the shuttles. Then the world gasped in horror. As the shuttles sped into space, ships came in the other direction. They turned and faced our shuttles, and destroyed them. The ships resumed their course, speeding toward Earth.

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CHAPTER 2: MASS HYSTERIA

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As the other spaceships headed for our planet, many held their breath as they waited... Friend or foe? Many people had answered that question in various ways. Some prepared offerings, saying that they were showing us what would happen if we were their enemies (which turned out to be in a way true), some said that they offered peace, but thought we were attacking them, etc. and over a million people must have flocked around the Empire State Building, (the 20th tallest building on the planet, now called an Ancient Wonder of the World) which was near the spaceships’ estimated landing point. As it sped into the atmosphere, some people began to go berserk, and without the help of the police, would have caused trouble. The army arrived at this point, and the world watched.

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So far, from this DigitalVision report, I was glad I wasn’t there. I wasn’t half as glad then as I am now. I watched as the spaceship landed. I saw the door open. I saw the energy bolts fly. I saw the obliteration of one million people. The aliens wanted our planet.

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CHAPTER 3: MOTIVES

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Immediately, the astronomers looked to the aliens’ planet for clues. We saw enough. Their planet was due to implode in about a year, and it wasn’t suitable for life. Ours still had at least two million left, unless Sol died first... Well, it was obvious we needed to leave Earth, and head for Mercury. Long ago, we had started a terraforming project. It wasn’t supposed to be complete yet, but it was supposed to be capable of housing five billion people, but what about the excess? It was obvious. We needed to have a strike force, still established on Earth for a number of reasons: To cause diversion, to wait until the terraforming project was completed, and in hope we could steal some of their technology. It was a likely suicide mission, but it was better than nothing.

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Anyway, as it turned out, I was left behind.

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Well, I might as well make use of myself... There isn’t much to do until we can see them.

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CHAPTER 4: THE WAIT

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A MONTH LATER: 25





LOS ANGELES, USA 26



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The aliens have been sighted to the east. Soon we will have to give this planet to the invaders. But there is no helping that, so we will do as much damage as we can. We are currently inside our ‘secret HQ’. But I doubt much could be kept secret from these invaders. We plan to raid in about a weeks time, unless we are forced to earlier.

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TWO DAYS LATER

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We have captured an alien! We discovered a lot of things we needed to know.

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1. They have a caste system. There are the slaves, (one of which we captured) whose job it is to do all the manual work. They are mistreated, and would quite happily rebel. They have green coloured skin. There are the warriors, a deadly form of alien, but we couldn’t deduce much from his description, apart from the fact they are about five feet tall, and are black. The middle class are just like the slaves, only they genetically aren’t built for work. They are yellow. The ruling caste simply cannot work; they control the affairs of the nation. (We called these aliens the Advena)

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2. That the aliens can hear the languages of Earth through their translators.

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3. How to pilot an alien ship!

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We kept him with us for good measure.

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CHAPTER 5: THE RAID

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THE LOCAL ALIENS COMPLEX

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In for a penny, in for a pound. That was what I was thinking when we arrived the Advena Complex. These complexes were built with a cylindrical bottom, going straight into the ground. There were no possible entries from the ground. The bottom of the top part veered out at a 90° angle. It then gradually sloped in to a point, and about twenty metres below that, there was a ‘slit’ to allow the aliens ships in. We had received a message from Crystal (the Venus settlement) telling us that they had everything ready for us there. I radioed the second half of the task force. They were preparing a helicopter for us. We had to sit tight and wait till they came. I thought of the other forces around the globe. They would be attacking at different times of the day, in different weather conditions, but we would be the first ones. Therefore, we probably had the most chance to make it out alive.

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HALF AN HOUR LATER

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The helicopter is on its way. We stand about ready. The helicopter arrives, and we land inside the alien building. It is a large hangar, with a tube like elevator at the end. We cautiously creep around. Suddenly, all hell breaks loose. “Rosurtni oenomma, Rosurtni oenomma” – the alien equivalent of ‘Intruder Alert’. The elevator opens, and out come the soldier aliens. We are nowhere near prepared for what we see. Seven feet tall shells, with razor sharp blades about 30cm long sticking off at various points. These gunmetal blue suits of knight’s armour advance towards us. But we have an advantage: to them, we are fauna. They have no idea we are intelligent. The slowly advance towards us, speaking in their own language…

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As they started to advance, we primed our weapons. Then we let loose. We started firing at them, and boarded a ship. We quickly closed the doors, and took off.

“Phew, that was a close call Phil.” I gasped breathlessly.

“What about the other groups on the planet? The aliens will know we are intelligent...”

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Chapter 6: Discoveries

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We made it out safely. I explored the ship, and I found something that made my heart stop. In one room, there were a few pods, and a control panel. I walked over, and attempted to decipher the writing. Then I realised. It was because I was an expert at Latin: their language was Latin backwards! Then I realised. The buttons were simply a release that would open the pods, and a cut support button to kill them. I left these alone, seeing these aliens would make great studies.

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Another great room was the alien armoury. I stepped in, and at first saw nothing. Then I read the inscription above a button. “Press to lower racks”. I pressed it, and down came a few racks of weaponry and armour. I stood and stared in wonder. These aliens were beyond belief when it came to technology.

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“We’re halfway there. The charts we were sent a few months ago suggest that we are out of their firing range.” Phil said.

Suddenly, projectiles started to follow our course.

“EVASIVE MANUVERS!”

“It turns out that our scientists were incorrect.”

“In that case, they may be able to follow our course!”

“That was a given. We actually stop on Venus.”

“WHAT???” I gasped. “It’s impossible to land there! Anyway, where would that leave us?”

“Our scientists are coming to dismantle and study the ship, and take us and the ships contents and parts to Mercury.”

“But will they not still be able to follow us?”

“No. They can only track their ships. Our scientists stole some of their equipment before they left. But still... The Advena may have improved their equipment...”

“It’s a chance we have to take, I suppose...” I mused.

“They have stopped firing. I think we are out of range now.”

“Then their radar field must not go much further.”

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Chapter 7: The Arrival

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“Touchdown.”

“Yeah!” I yelled.

“Now we sit and wait.” Said Alex.

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TWO HOURS LATER

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The scientists have arrived.

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FOUR HOURS LATER

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Our squad have been commended and promoted by the Emergency Leader Leonis. Work has progressed here to support the population of Earth. We are resting, then we are tasked to exploration. There are a number of strange rock structures, and we are to investigate them. We will be armed in case it is dangerous.

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THE NEXT DAY

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Alright! We have begun the expedition.

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“Okay, what do you think those formations are?” inquired Phil.

“Probably structures designed by cavemen eons ago.”

“Yeah. I didn’t think those possibly could be natural.”

“Well, lets wait and see.”

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HALF AN HOUR LATER

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We have arrived without a hitch.

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Some cavemen! We are studying a way to open these doors. Wait... A control panel of rock???

“Phil! Alex! Ben! Check this out!”

“What the...”

“No time to contemplate. Pull that lever!”

The doors slid open so fast we did not see them.

“Oh my God... These simply can not be cavemen. It was just a disguise!”

As we stepped in, we were taken aback by the contents.

“Is that a spaceship?”

“A blaster?”

“Anti-Grav equipment?”

My colleagues carried on like this, but I felt a beckoning, and walked around all this.

“Wait, where are you going?”

“I don’t know.” I replied.

“I’ll come with.” Declared Alex.

I walked over into a corner.

“Oh my... Look! An anti-matter bomb!!! We have been research these for years!”

I felt drawn towards this strange stone.

I touched the stone.

And my world went black...

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Chapter 8: A Series of Weird Events

Suddenly, I was in the middle of another Advena Complex. The Advena soldiers were advancing towards my squad. I looked out the slit, and there was Mercury, converted to the Advena settlement.

“NO!!!” I screamed. “THIS CAN’T BE HAPPENING!”

The soldiers advanced, beheading my mates as they advanced.

“YOU STUPID ALIENS!!! CAN’T YOU LET US BE?” I screamed.

They kept coming.

“THAT DOES IT!!!”

I threw myself headlong into one of them.

“He has the courage...” Echoed a voice through space. Once again, I was in the dark. Suddenly, a black cloak started walking towards me. Suddenly, I had an urge to scream. I desperately fought it, and it seemed like ages before the conflict ceased.

“He has the willpower...”

Suddenly, a voice echoed through my head.

“You have passed the test, young one.”

“Who are you?” I asked.

“I am an ancient. I was the psionic elder of this planet, long long ago when the accident occurred...”

“What accident?” I requested.

“We were researching on the energy of the universe. If we had mastered it, we would have been able to do anything... We used it in a bomb, but it was unstable... It wiped out all of us, and made the planet barren. Now we are spectators of your battle. We are watching you fight the Vænturians. Please defeat them. I can only do one thing for you: give you the power of psionics...”

“What is that?” I asked.

Everyone in my section of the med base looked at me, and sighed.

“Amnesia.”

“Memory loss.”

“No!” I said. “I was in the middle of nowhere, with some strange alien speaking through my mind!”

“Delusions.”

‘Grr... If only that pan would fall on his head...’ I thought.

Suddenly, the pan magically lifted, and fell on his head.

Everyone gasped. They all looked at me.

“Oh... That’s psionics? That’s all? Telekinesis? How is that supposed to help me defeat the Vænturians?”

“You what... Tell me what you remember...”

“So. You now have the power of telekinesis? Can you read my mind?” Queried Leonis.

I concentrated hard on him. Suddenly, a second voice echoed through my head.

“I truly doubt he can. It’s impossible.” Said that voice.

“You were doubting the fact I could, saying it was impossible.”

Leonis gaped in amazement.

“Just try it again, to make sure that was not a guess.”

I concentrated again.

“I wonder if any of the girls on board would make me a good wife?”

“You were just wondering whether any of the girls on board would make a good wife.”

“I... I... I don’t believe this!”

I concentrated on him again, thinking, ‘You might as well.’

“Who said that?” He exclaimed.

“I did.” I calmly stated.

“This will help us to defeat the Vænturians... This is incredible!”

Author notes

Hasn't been touched in a LONG time. Might as well wait for my next story... I'll get back to this, but I'll probably end up re-writing it.

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  • JBDryden
    December 26, 2007
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    There is a lot of story here that is being paraphrased into this medium. Each of these chapters feels like a brief narrative outline of what is quite obviously a much grander idea of what this story is meant to be. I think you should definitely consider expanding this story, adding some dialogue, developing your characters more - especially the narrator


  • gerifitzsimmons Greeters member
    September 12, 2007

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    A good beginning

    which did a much better job (that) than its predecessor, an American

    As (it ) more than one are coming. sped into the atmosphere, some people began to go berserk, and without the help of the police, would have caused trouble. The army arrived at this point, and the world watched. This would be better if showed it happening.

    I watched as the spaceship (s) landed. I saw the door open. Have to be consistant smile--you started out with more than one.

    Okay, I'm starting to believe this is an outline for a novel. If so you have done a lot of preparing for the finshed work. Some of it reads like part of the book and other parts as just comments or suggestions for a chapter.

    Hasn't been touched in a LONG time. Might as well wait for my next story... WHAT?

    Sorry but I already read it. (grin)

    Geri


    beginning: 3, plot: 5, characters: 1.

  • virusoutbreak
    July 18, 2007

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    Wow

    This was really good i loved the description and it was gripping from start to finish. Well done this was really worth reading.

  • Meggh LotusMay
    March 25, 2007

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    This story reminds me of a sci-fi radio cereal called Journey Into Space. There were three series, the first was broadcast in 1953. It's about four characters: Jet Morgan the calm captain, Doc Mathews, also very calm and really nice (he's the ship's doctor), Steven Michel (Mich), who designed the ship, and Lemmy Barnet, my favourite. You really really need to hear it! It's fantastic, and I think you'd love it. In the first series, they go to the moon and have adventures. Anyway, I'll shut up about it now. Keep writing! Meggh

  • Meggh LotusMay
    March 25, 2007

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    Ok, I really liked this, it was a gripping adventure. You might want to replan your events, because I thought it got a little bit ridiculous towards the end. I was thinking though, of course it's up to you, but there's so much you could do with this. You could expand it in to a diary, or you could bring Ben, Phill and Alex in at the beginning, and turn it in to a sci-fi drama cereal and write it like a play. Don't forget about this, because it's a genius idea and I loved it. Keep writing, Meggh xxxxxxxxxxxx


  • Krazy Scott
    January 12, 2007
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    okay, that was cool.

    I liked it overall, but felt it just a bit vague in places. I look forward to it's completion!


  • Rebel Rebel silver member
    December 3, 2006

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    Flashbacks.

    I am sure that all of us harbor memories of our past. In a way the subconcious seeks to express itself in our writings. I am trying to get some of my thoughts out in the sci-fi fantasy I write here. I think no one invades copyright who is honestly writing segments of what we all know and feel.

    Reminds me of L. Ron Hubbard and Battlefield Earth. I like ya use of Rebel. Wink.

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.


  • darklade
    November 26, 2006

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    Dawamil 3

    It is a great story with good plot and exeptional use of dialoge. If I saw itin the library I would probably check it out but i'm notshure that I would buy it

    beginning: 3, language: 4, plot: 5, ending: 4, dialog: 4, characters: 3.


  • TheLittleOne-Paul
    November 20, 2006

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    Great use of dialogue

    Hi Dawnmail333;

    Hello and welcome to SW! If you ever need anything just come talk to me. If you need help immediately please feel free to instant message me.

    Now for your story! I think you have a good story started here. There seems to be a good theme to your story. It looks like you have a good story idea that has a lot of potential to be developed further. There does seem to be a need to use more descriptive information and detailing to help to better tell your story and give the reader more information to make the reader more excited about your story.

    I think you demonstrate a natural knack for writing and your story seems to flow nicely and can be read by the reader at a nice reading pace. You should make as much use as you can of spelling and grammar software on your personal computer system to always make your stories look polished and professional and to ensure there are no spelling or grammar problems in your stories.

    Good work and again welcome to SW!

    Paul


  • beyondsonic
    November 18, 2006

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    Got my attention!

    Definatly a good story so far! Sci-fi (science fiction) would deffinatly be the best.
    I cant wait to see the rest!
    it does, however, have some flaws, and i hope you dont mind me pointing them out.
    it seems to "move" way to fast, though im not sure if thats how you want it, and there are places were you use present tense and past tense- like "he goes" vs. "he went" you should probably stick to one or another.
    but what can i say, my story wasnt much better when it was in this stage. i would deffinatly say this story has a huge amount of potential, and youve already got the basic framework down. im excited to see it finished! keep working on it!


    • The Shadow Knight
      November 20, 2006
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      Got my attention!

      With those flaws, I noticed both, but decided to let them be. Do you really think I should try to rectify that past\present tense conflict? I thought it read well... Just please let me know.

      • beyondsonic
        November 20, 2006
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        yeah, it would probably be a good idea, but if theres something else you want to correct first that you think is more importent, feel free to do that first. its not the most important thing, but a good idea for when ur editing for your finished copy


    • The Shadow Knight
      November 20, 2006
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      Error

    • The Shadow Knight
      November 20, 2006
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      The flaws

      Yeah, you are right about the moving too fast, but if I slowed it down, it would probably be boring. I hope you don't mind about the fact that I'm leaving it that way. The past\present tense conflict made it stand out, I thought. If you really feel that it doesn't sound right, just let me know, and I will fix it.

      P.S. So the 8th chapter still is fine? I was wondering if people would find it wierd. If it isn't wierd, I will be happy. Otherwise I will remove the psionics setup.

      P.S.S. This story is partially writing itself: I make it up as I go along.


  • Kari gold member
    November 18, 2006
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    good

    I liked it a lot. You've left plenty of good opening to continue the story. The best of luck to you with it. I'm sure you'll do good on it.
    Kari

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.


  • The Arbiter silver member
    November 15, 2006
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    A good beginning.

    This is an interesting beginning to what looks like a great story. I think that you could make it a little bit more realistic, if you know what I mean, but you've started off well. Keep up the good work!


  • QueenWolf
    November 15, 2006
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    Wow, this is a really good begining! I am looking forward to seeing the rest, but it reminds me of something...

    Thank you for posting this!

    Hello and welcome to SW! I hope you enjoy the site as much as I do, If you need some help IM me only happy to, even if it is just to read your storys

    Penny x x x

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.


    • The Shadow Knight
      November 20, 2006
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      Can you think of what it reminds you of?

      Or is it just a vague memory? Please tell me if you can remember.

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