"What have we here, my lady dear? What brings you to my cave?"1
"I came to talk. I think it's time that you learn to behave."2
The dragon smiled and looked at her with hunger in his eyes, "Do you think those books you brought with you have really made you wise?"3
"I have read and studied all about the way you've been enchanted. I have come to help you now. Your freedom will be granted."4
"Silly girl, what makes you think I want to end this curse. Returning to a mortal man, you see to me is worse."5
She opened up her books and searched, she then began to chant. The dragon watched her as she spoke and then began to laugh.6
"My lovely girl, you soon will feed my appetite and tummy. I'm sure that you will taste quite good. You will be so yummy."7
Worried now the young maiden tried every spell inside her books. The dragon smiled patiently as she read. He liked the way she looked. Her efforts were exhausted now. There were no more spells to try. Looking at the hungry dragon's face, she asked, "Is it my time now to die?"8
"Silly girl, did you really think you could change me from my ways? I was born a dragon and till the end of time, a dragon I will stay. I am sure you will be delicious meat as I taste you on my tongue. Roasted well, yes medium rare; I will cook you till you're done."9
"Kill me fast! What a fool I've been! End quick the pain I feel! I had hoped that I could change you, but I'm just another meal."10
The dragon said, "I'm sorry dear." And as if with regret the dragon paused. Then it grabbed her quickly and ripped her deeply with its deadly claws.11
She didn't scream or cry out as its talons took her life. With its fiery breath it roasted her till she was cooked just right. The dragon feasted on her flesh, her body was so good. You can't change a dragon who is happy. Too late she understood.12
Author notes
"I love Dr. Seuss"
In a list
A contest entry
- Faerytales by February Moon.
350 points, ended December 5, 2006, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next story in this contest, remove from contest - Spells and Magic, Spirits and Demons by Delfishie.
175 points, ended March 24, 2007, 7 entries
Honorable mention
• next story in this contest, remove from contest - Fandi Contest I - Options by Asfand.
225 points, ended July 10, 2007, 42 entries
Honorable mention
• next story in this contest, remove from contest - Traditional Fairy Tale Style (Re-opened and extended) by Myryca.
175 points, ended May 26, 12 entries
Honorable mention
• next story in this contest, remove from contest - childrens stories by Elvenfairy.
600 points, ended June 15, 11 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next story in this contest, remove from contest - A CONTEST FOR MY FRIENDS ONLY by Violette.
850 points, ended June 20, 12 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next story in this contest, remove from contest - Children's Stories by Adele Ellen Bakker.
300 points, ended July 30, 33 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Hey andersss lol...that was coolzers...thanks for entering
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Hi!
Thanks for hosting. I hope you like this little story/poem. I had fun writing it. I always like it when the dragons have a full belly.
Andy
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Oh dear
I like the way you maintained the rhyme but a bit too scary for my 7 year old and some of the language is a little sophisticated eg Returning to a mortal man, you see to me is worse." Thanks for entering. -
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Hi! Adele!
Well, you may have me on 'mortal man'
, but when we were seven, we played cowboys and Indians and most of the time the Indians got massacred. The Lone Ranger was a children's show. I understand it's supposed to be worse, now; though I'm completely out of touch with children's programming.
Thanks for hosting.
Andy
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Great story. I loved the title, it really made me want to read this! Good Luck *star
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Hi Tori!
I'm glad you like the title, but did you like the story
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I hope you have many entries and a whole lot of fun.
Andy
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wow. that's good...
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Hi Linchy!
Thanks for hosting, reading, and commenting. I appreciate it. I'm glad you like this story.
I hope you have a really good contest.
Andy
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Ooo dragon story, thanx so much for entering. You must write a lot of them considering you always have more for me to read. A rather nasty end for the woman lol made me a little queasy. I think the story could have been pushed further so we can learn some stuff about his past but that's okay. Nice work.
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Hi Violette!
Dragons need to eat, too. Most of the time my dragons eat maidens. It seems to be their favorite diet, their choice of cuisine. The tradition was started long ago and is hardly my fault, though I may exploit it.
I'm glad you like my little story. It's a very short one, but you did say you like dragon stories.
Andy
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hmm, maybe I should have said no death. Oh well, too late now. This was fun to read. I was smiling the whole time I was reasing this. Such poetry written stories were exactly what I was hoping for with this contest. Thanks for entering my contest and good luck.
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Hi Lady Fairy!
I sort of knew you wouldn't want death, but I also sort of hoped you'd like this story/poem anyway.
I'm sorry that the dragon ate her, but for the story to work, he had to, besides, he was hungry
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I'm very pleased that you like this story. Thanks for hosting and applauding. May you have many good entries and much fun.
Andy
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Excellent
This is os good I love rhumning stories. Wrote some then changed them to standard writting.
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I'm running behind on replying to comments.
Thanks very much for reading, commenting, and all the applause.
I'm sorry to hear that you didn't keep the original versions of your rhyming stories.
I've messed up a couple of times when I meant to save the original version of a story and didn't. Not the same thing, I know; but you miss writing you've lost, anyway.
Andy
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That was a good one though not quite the fairy tale style I was after.
But the idea was great! Loved the dragon's amusement. Some of the rhythm was a bit off but the rhyming was really well done. It's tough to do this kind of thing in my opinion so:
beginning: 5, language: 4, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 4, characters: 5.
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Hi Myryca!
Nope, it doesn't have perfect rhythm. This story/poem just sort of came out the way it came out. It's probably possible to fix up the rhythm, but I've never tried.
I knew that this was not quite the fairy tale you had in mind, primarily because it doesn't have a happy ending, unless you see it from the dragon's POV
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I thought you'd enjoy it and you allowed two entries, so I entered it.
Thanks for hosting, reading, and commenting. I appreciate it.
Andy
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i *love*ed the rymes
it was so smart to put in the rymes!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I likd it!!! nicely done! Thanks for entering my contest!!!!
Powerpuffs(Pp)
PS ur DQed
JK JK JK
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Hi!
Thanks for hosting this contest and for reading and commenting. I appreciate it.
I'm glad that you liked the rhyme. This is sort of a story/poem.
I hope you enjoyed your contest.
Andy
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Almost forgot...
Sorry, I meant to give you three applauses for this one.
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This is really good!
Its kind of a funny coincidence that earlier today I commented on another story on how absurd the old cliche' of turning the enchanted dragon into a prince by kissing it would be from the dragon's point of view, and now here is a poem about it. Why would a dragon who as a dragon could live for centuries and fear nothing, want to be changed into a short lived medieval man? This sums it up quite well. I think a verse added about how long dragons live compared to humans would be a good addition, but other than that, this is quite perfect. -
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I'm really encouraged!
However, I think I'll read your story before I try any of my other dragon stories on you. I promise in those that the dragons are not killed, though.
I'm very pleased that this story passed muster. Thanks for reading and commenting. It's greatly appreciated.
Andy
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You are free to kill as many dragons as you like in your stories, it is your right. But my critisisms are because killing the dragons in the previous two stories was unrealistic and contradicted facts you already established in those stories, and to me, this made them poor. Even fantasies should make sense if they are good fantasies.
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This is good Andy, never a doubt! I loved the rhyme and to me it was almost as if the dragon were singing. Even if it's a bit dark it has a moral. I liked it!
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Hi!
This story reminds of the story of the woman and the snake. I'm very glad that you like this Story/poem. I had fun writing it.
Thanks for reading, commenting, and all the applause. I appreciate it.
Andy
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There were some grammar issues, but not serious ones - all I can really suggest is reading the lines out to yourself and see if you can find space for some commas. It's just that in some of the lines, I got a little lost because I couldn't separate the clauses.
However, as for the actual story - I really like this. I think it's an innovative idea to have a young girl want to help a dragon rather than be kidnapped by one.
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Thanks,
I went over the story and changed some things and some punctuation. I think it reads better now, but I'd appreciate any specific suggestions.
I've written where the girls get kidnapped and saved, kidnapped and eaten, sacrificed and eaten, and saved by a dragon. I guess you could say I've tried several ideas. This one seemed right for your contest.
Andy
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I think this is supposed to be a poem...
i really like it...funny, actually....
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It's both, sort of.
It's kind of a story/poem. The rhyme was intentional. I'm very pleased that you like it.
Thanks for hosting this contest and for reading, commenting, and all the applause. I hope you have many good entries and much fun.
Andy
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that was great! i like the way it ryhmed and told the story. Youve written alot of dragon stories
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Thanks
I'm very pleased you like this little story/poem. It was fun writing it. Thanks for reading, commenting, and all the applause.
Andy
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oh my goodness that was just awesome! i haven't read anything like it on this site yet and that was amazing! original and unique... well done!
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Thanks
Thanks for reading and commenting. I really appreciate it. I'm very glad that you like this story/poem. It was fun to write. Thanks again.
Andy
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wowwwww!!! that was soo sad that she died....it was very very interesting...its written with a speciality!! i liked it alot........
criticism.....um actually i have ntn.its shrot and dear and i loved it!!! gud job!!
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Thanks, Asfand
Thanks for hosting this contest and for reading and commenting. I really appreciate it. I hope you have a lot of good entries and a great time. Dragons need to eat, too, you know. Sorry she was eaten. lol
Andy
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You said alot in a very short story and I loved it. But it lacked description. I really wanted to know what color the dragon was. But I still liked it. I love dragon stories, all kinds
~*Brooke*~
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Thanks, Brooke
It was mostly dialogue. I usually write about red or brown dragons, but you can pick the color you want here. I'm glad that you like this story. It is kind of a story poem. Thanks a lot for reading, commenting and applauding.
Andy
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this was pretty cool. you could really visualize it, and i liked that a lot. i think that it should be longer. youd do a good job with that. it was very nice, but she DIED!!! haha lol. thanks so much for entering, great work! loved it~!
Tay
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Thanks, Taylor Renee
Are you familiar with the great female writer, Taylor Caldwell?
Thanks for hosting this contest and reading, commenting and all the applause. It would be difficult to make it longer and keep it rhyming and flowing well. Because of the word restriction I chose a short piece. Thanks again. Glad you loved it.
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rhyme-tastic
Very interesting story. I would have liked more information about the woman - why did she decide to risk her life to turn the dragon back into a mortal? Just pure altruism? And what about the dragon's character? A backstory on him and his progress from human to murderous dragon would have been interesting.
...Of course, I see you've also entered this story in a short-story contest, so of course a backstory is impossible. But should you ever decide to extend it, I would be interested to read more.
The rhyme scheme was both a very unique stylistic choice and also a bit distracting from the story. I'm not sure whether or not I liked it.
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Thanks, Delfishie
This was the only story that I had which had a spell gone bad which was already written. It is kind of a story poem. I could give it more background and rewrite it as a story and sacrifice the rhyme.
I am glad that you like the story. I may do a rewrite for your contest.
How do you feel about erotica?
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erotica?
Erotica is perfectly okay in my book, so as long as it relates to the topic and there's actually a plot involved. Sex should be used to 'sweeten' a story, I think, and not be the sole reason for the story to be written.
Um yeah that barely made any sense. I'm up WAY too late tonight. *yawwwwwwnnnnnn*
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i loved this!!!!
interesting kinda reminds me of my own silly peom....but i loved the rhyming...
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Thanks, Wolf
Thanks for reading, commenting, and all the applause. You didn't mind that the maiden got ate? I've been told that dragons don't cook their food, but this seemed more entertaining. I'm glad you like this and that it rhymes.
Andy
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I really liked the rhyme in it. Aww I sad she died! I really liked this.
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Thanks, Kelsey
Thanks for reading and commenting. I'm glad you like this. Sorry she got ate, but poor dragons must eat sometimes. lol I'm also pleased that you enjoyed the rhyme.
Andy
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Jeez. If he's gonna eat her at least make it quick. mediem rare.
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Thanks
Thanks for hosting the contest. I hope you have a lot of good entries. I hope you don't mind too much that the maiden was eaten. I hoped you would enjoy this little story.
Andy
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This was good. not exactally the story I was looking for. I like the way you had some rhymes in there. I liked the use of diction. This was a good length.
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Thanks,
I used to work for Taco Smell. lol. I knew this story might not fit, but it was short and I thought you would like it. It is actually kind of a story poem. I am glad you like it.
Andy
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That was a great little rhyme-fest! Just those two chars, no other extraneous riff-raff. It was like a nice dance between two bantering partners. The wording is great, with just enough of a tinge of Ye Olde English with the good olde dragon.
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Thanks, Thwack
This is for a picture contest and the story/poem is what resulted. I've been told that the dragon shouldn't have cooked the damsel, but should have eaten her raw. Probably tasty either way, but having constructed the story with her cooked; I've decided to leave it that way. I am very pleased that you enjoyed this. Thanks for reading, commenting, and applauding.
Andy
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different
I like the Dragon, but from all i have read, dragons dont cook their food. But other then that i like it. Keep it up.
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Thanks, Penny
What's the point of breathing fire if they can't cook their food. Anyway, my dragons usually cook their food. Again, you are the first to point out that little detail. This is a little shorty that I chose to make rhyme. Its meter is somewhat off, but it was fun to write. I hope you'll forgive me, but my dragons are probably going to keep on cooking.
Andy
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I loved the idea of the girl casting spells and the dragon waiting impatiently for her to finish. Her spells are glossed over far to quickly. It would be nice to see her trying something, the dragon being bored, and her losing hope. Most of all though, its just awkward. If he was born a dragon as he claims, what enchantment is he under? The pain she aludes too also is never really explored.
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This is so good. I love the way that you made it rhyme, amazing. It flowed beautifully. I love the last two sentences, they ended it perfectly. Best of luck in my contest.
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 4, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 4.
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Thanks, Princess
I am glad you enjoyed this. I believe it fits the picture. I used rhyme for the fun of it, but the meter is a little rough. I hope you enjoy your contest. I feel certain you will have fun.
Andy
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