Journey to Paradise-NOT FINISHED

Encounter1

Leaving her cage was easy, but she had a hard time getting past the gaurds. Hina doged left and right avoiding the rotating cameras. She stayed away from the gaurds that headed to the holding pen. She saw a clearing to a door that led outside, she made a break for it. The guns went off behind her. All but one bullet missed, grazing her forearm. She ran into the white light through the door crunching in the snow.2

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