It's over, it's done. We're gone.

I remember the first day I met your soft brown eyes and beautiful self.1

I was only 12 and you 15.2

You helped my mom bag her tokens,3

And I didn’t know what to say.4

You struck me as beautiful,5

A boy with a heart, with something to say.6

I remember watching you from afar,7

Day dreaming of the future.8

We talked, and walked around, 9

And when your hand scraped against mine I got butterflies in my stomach.10

Then, the week was over,11

And my Carney-self had to leave you, and your town, once again.12

There wasn’t a day or night that I didn’t think of you,13

There wasn’t a boy in my life where you didn’t haunt me.14

School was over, and summer began,15

I counted and contemplated the days until we got to Croswell, where’d you dance back into my life.16

You walked behind me and picked me off my feet,17

“Remember me?” 18

How could I not? 19

You were the boy I loved, young love it may have been, but it’s still the same.20

I love the way you looked at me,21

The way you made me feel.22

A bad kisser you were, but that didn’t change anything.23

The week went on,24

And one night we both lost it all.25

Me 13 and you 16,26

Serious for one another we became.27

A mistake, 28

I made.29

Heartbroken that I’d leave the next day,30

Crying all the way to my next spot.31

You called,32

I talked, and the miles between us just increased.33

Today my heart bleeds with a pain that I wish wasn’t there.34

I wish we still had each other.35

Me 15 and you 17.36

It’s over, it’s done. We’re gone.37

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  • werner1221
    November 9, 2006
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    i liked your other peice better but still AGAIN WITH THE SADNESS! i think some1 had a rough life..im here to talk if you want someone anways i still liked this one..good work here


  • TheRandomToaster
    October 17, 2006
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    good

    very good. it's very emotinal and good. is it something that happened to you?


  • crazygurl501
    October 16, 2006
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    AWE

    awe i really liked that it was mad good. Thanks for entering my contest. Good Luck. Keep up the good work.

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