Mouse Meets Rat

Chapter One1

I never knew what difference ment, I never really thought of it. I just picked friends by personality not by there looks. But everyone else did, everyone thought that the Rat, was the enemy. They all thought they were dirty sewer rats. But I leared that not all of them were like that, some live in houses in cages and have owners that bath them. Now is that dirty? I don't think so, I wanted to proove to everyone, that even a sewer rat, could make a great friend. I was a brown field mouse, small for my age. I was almost an adult, but I was very small. Field mice aren't very much different than rats. They're just a tad bit dirtier. But I had to stick too it, I was going to become great friends with a rat, so everyone would not think of anyone...as differnt. 2

The sun bearly rose over the hills, I was awake I just awoke from a deep and long sleep. At least a two day sleep. Now I was hungry so I went for search for something to eat. I found a apple not far, it was half eaten, but I was hungry. So I began eating it. Another mouse ran up and asked if I would share with him. There was plenty for both of us. So I shared. He was a large mouse, he was black. 3

"So," He started, "nice day huh?"4

"Oh, yes. I think it's a very fine day. A light breeze and everything. It's very wonderful."5

"Yeah it is," He took another bite, with a full mouth he said, "so what's your name?"6

"Bailey."7

"Oh, I'm Rocklin." 8

"Nice to meet you Rocklin."9

"You too Bailey." We both smiled. "So, are you doing anything later."10

"Yes, I'm working on a project, to proove nobody is differnet. Only on the outside."11

"What's the topic?"12

"Rats."13

"Rats?"14

"Yes rats, I'm prooving to rodents that rats are just like mice except..Bigger with longer tails. Larger ears, eyes and nails. There really just mice but larger."15

"No, your all wrong Bailey."16

"Rocklin, i'm not wrong. See it's rodents like you that give other rodents a bad name."17

"How so?"18

"Because, your judgemental."19

"What's wrong with that?"20

"Because you'll never make friends that way. Take me for example, now were not friends." He scrunched up his nose, he knew I was right. Judgemental was not a good thing. See, if he wouldn't have been that way, I would have liked him more. He was a nice mouse, but at the same time he wasn't.21

"Well, you know what, I don't have to like rats."22

"Well...guess what else? I dont' have to like you! And you know what Rocklin, I really don't." I stormed off. I was mad at him. I thought we would become great friends. But I was wrong. He called after me, and tried to stop and talk to me, but I didn't listen I just kept walking till I got home. Then he couldnt' mess with me anymore. I went inside my den, and layed down. I was mad.23

I fell alseep after awhile. And when I awoke, I felt better. So I went out for a walk just to look around. And start thinking about my project. I heard a really loud noise above in a tree. I ignored it at first till I heard it again. It was louder this time.24

"Hello?" I called out, 25

"Your next mouse." I heard from above. 26

"I beg your pardon?" Suddenly It came flying down from the tree above. IT WAS AN OWL! I ran as fast as I could into the brush. I tried to hide, but he followed. I ran and ran. But he was right behind me. Then I heard a voice,27

"Hurry in here." It was rocklin! He led me into a log. And I layed down and almost past out. I was hot, and scared. He sat next to me. "You could have been killed what were you thinking?" 28

"I was thinking about my project, before that big bird came after me. I'll get you for this!" I yelled out,29

"We will see about that mouse...we will see." Then he flew off. I turned to Rocklin he smiled.30

"Just because i'm in here with you doesn't mean i'm not mad at you anymore. Because I am."31

"Well, while you were gone I did a lot of thinking. Your right. Rats are just like mice but bigger. And dirtier. So i'm going to help you with your project."32

"Really?"33

"Yep."34

"Thank you Rocklin!" I gave him a hug and we looked out of the log to see if there was any sight of the owl. We didn't see him so we snuck around to the other side and made a run for the creek. Once we got there, we both took drinks. And then hopped on the rocks to the other side. We were laughing and talking then I saw a snake about ten feet in front of us. Rocklin didn't see it, I whispered..35

"Rocklin, look hurry quick hurry look!" I pointed he looked he gasped the snake looked up and started slilring after us. 36

"Run!" He yelled, we started running. But the snake was ganning speed.37

We got back to the creek and started crossing when my foot got caught under a rock. Rocklin did'nt see, till I screamed. He turned around and saw, He jumped back over to me and started pulling me out of the rock. The snake saw our hold up and started slilering faster, 38

"Please hurry Rocklin!" I yelled, he finally got the rock off my foot and pulled me accross the bank. The snake got into the water and followed us into the woods. Rocklin tripped over a something and went head over heels into a tree. Which knocked him out. I screamed, the snake cornered me, I was dead.That's all I thought. Then I heard a really loud screech and a hawk came crashing down grabbing the snake and lifting in high into the air. Once the hawk and the snake were both out of sight. I ran over to Rocklin. I pulled him into my arms. And started to cry. 39

"Rocklin, if it wasn't for me, you would be fin-"40

"Bailey?"41

"Oh Rocklin you are ok!" I hugged him and then he pulled away and got to his feet. 42

"Yeah i'm ok..now." He laughed. Once he was ok, we left and went back to the creek. Crossed and started walking again. We had enough danger for today. And it was also getting dark, so we desided to find somewhere to stop and rest for the next day. Which we were heading for the sewers to find our project. 43

We found a quiet spot not far from the creek and went to sleep, well I didn't. I stayed up and watched the stars they were big bright and so far away. I wished I could see one up close. What would it actually look like? Would it still look the same or would it be bigger. I didn't know, all this thinking made me fall alseep. And I was dreaming about stars, and being one. It was pretty wierd, but at the same time, it was peaceful. 44

When I awoke, Rocklin was still asleep, he snored alittle bit. And was on his side. He looked like he was dreaming. So I didn't wake him up. I just went and looked for food. When I got back with some food he was waking up. He looked up at me and smiled.45

"Hey Bailey whatcha got there?"46

"Breakfast."47

"Oh thanks." We started to eat, when I noticed he was bleeding on his side. 48

"Rocklin? What happened to your side?"49

"What?! My side?" He looked, his eyes got big. "What the heck happened? What happened to me bailey?"50

"I don't know, maybe it's because you fell yesterday." 51

"Oh that's right, probably." I took a piece of grass and started damping it on his side. The blood slowly stopped and we kept eating. I found some grapes and a couple black berries. They were really good, some were sour. But still pretty good. 52

Once we finished, we stretched our legs and took a quick dip in the creek to wake up better. We had a long day ahead of us. Rocklin looked really funny wet. His fur puffed out far and he looked like a porcypine. My fur stuck to me so i looked like a seal. We laughed at each other for the way we looked. Rocklin kept dunking me. And I bit him, and he pulled my tail. It was really fun, then a little fish swam underneath us. We were so hipper that we chased after it, and tried to swim faster then it. Before we knew it, we were about a mile away from were we stayed the night.53

"Um, Rocklin. Were pretty far from were we were before."54

"Oh crap. I didn't even notice I was having so much fun."55

"Well we can delay the project till later."56

"Sure." We started to play agian. When I felt a really sharp pain shoot up my spine. I started to gasp for air. Rocklin looked over at me and I couldn't breath. 57

"Bailey? Bailey are you ok." I started to go underwater. But he grabbed me and pulled me up onto land. "What's wrong?" I couldn't speak.58

"Did you hit something? Here let me find somewhere to stay." He found a little hole under a log. And he helped me under and we stayed there for a couple hours. I fell asleep for an hour or so. When I awoke to the sound of Rocklin snoring. I woke him up,59

"We need to get going!"60

"Hey you can talk again."61

"Yeah, I feel ok but we really need to start looking for a rat."62

"Are you sure your better enough?"63

"Yeah, i'll be fine." We started crawling out from underneath the log. I looked around making sure nothing was there to hurt us. Nothing so we kept crawling out.64

Once we got back onto the trail, I was feeling better but hungry. I didn't say anything, but I felt looking for food. Rocklin looked at me and laughed.65

"Was that your stomach?" I smiled,66

"No." I said, laughing.67

"Oh really, um ok it wasn't then. I guess your not hungry."68

"Oh but I am!" He raised an eye brow and smiled.69

"Then lets eat." 70

We started walking talking and searching for food. But all we could find was weeds. We were about to start eating them when I looked up and saw an acorn tree. Rocklin was eating when I poked him, he turned around and looked at me and saw the acorns.71

"Last one there...last one...there." When he was thinking about what would happen to the last one there I started making a run for it. He didn't notice till I laughed at him. He started chasing after me. But I beat him there, but we didn't care we just ate the acorns that fell from the tree. Which was only one.72

"Uh, I'm still hungry though." I said, with a light smile,73

"Well, one of us will have to climb." We both looked at each other, I smiled and backed away. He glarred at me and started climbing up the tree. He got to the first branch. And sat there for a second.74

"So whatcha doing?"75

"Just sitting, it's very comtorable."76

"Get the acorns."77

"Come up here first." 78

"Fine." I said I began climming up the tree. I was almost to the branch when I lost my footing and went crashing down to the ground. I landed on soft grass. But still for my size, that was a bad fall. Rocklin started coming down, 79

"Stop just go get the acorns." 80

"No, your my girlfriend and I-" 81

"Wait what? Girlfriend?" 82

"I mean, friend."83

"No what did you mean by that?"84

"Your a girl who's..a friend."85

"Oh." I said nodding my head slowly and turning the other way. He smiled cheezy and contined climbing up. I tried to get up, but it hurt. So I waited for him to come down.86

Once he got to me he froze, and just starred at me.87

"What?" I said, looking at him. He just starred at me then he looked away. I didn't know what he was doing. But it was strange. "Rocklin are you ok? Do you see something."88

"Yeah, you look just like my X-girlfriend."89

"Excuse me?" 90

"Not in a bad way, it's just when you looked at me you looked like my X-girlfriend. It made me feel wierd inside."91

"Um, ok. Can you help me up." He held out a paw and pulled me too my feet. I was in a little pain. For this project i've been in a lot of pain. And still we haven't made it to the sewers yet. 92

We began walking again, we wanted to get to the sewers sometime this week. It was at least another two days before we got there. And three days back. And plus the project would take at least a week, to meet all the rats. I took a deep breath, and whispered to myself, "Just one more day." I repeated, "Just one more day." Rocklin wanted to stop, but I told him, if we wanted to get there, we can't stop. He sighed and then agreed. 93

It started to get dark, I could feel things watching me. Every little noice made me jump or scream. Rocklin tryed to comfort me, but it didn't work. All I did was say yeah yeah sure or ok whatever, I knew it hurt his feelings but I was to scared to talk. I didn't want any animals to hear us or even see us. 94

"Can I ask you something?" Rocklin said, 95

"Um, sure." I said with a whisper,96

"Well, it's not really a question, it's more of a um, you know, well I need some advice." I blinked looking over at him, I never gave anyone adive in my life, I smiled faintly and answered,97

"I'll try my best Rocklin."98

"Ok thanks Bailey, you know, your a good friend." He made me smile, "Well, anyways," He began, "along time ago, I met a mouse who was amazed me in every way. And, it felt like she didn't notice to much. And it's been bothering me for quite awhile. And well,"99

"What's her name." He face went blank100

"Huh?" 101

"WHat is her name?"102

"Uh, Bail..I dont remember." He said quickly,103

"Oh, ok." I said, "Well, um, I really dont know, did you try talking to her."104

"No, she is to into her project about rats." His eyes grew wide, "I mean project on cats or bats, I..I." I looked at him confussed, 105

"Me? You like me," I grinned, and then covered it up, I didn't want him to know I liked him that way. "Why!" I squeaked106

"I don't know, I just feel very comfartble around you. Your absoutly, perfect." I smiled at him.107

"Thank you." He took my paw, and we kept walking. I was liked by a very cute mouse, I felt very good about myself, I felt wanted. 108

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  • TheLittleOne-Paul
    November 23, 2006

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  • crazygurl501
    October 21, 2006
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    GOOD

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