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"But it wasn't me!"2
"She has seen you!"3
"It wasn't me!"4
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"Where's Rose?" Mrs. Hudson asked.6
"In her room, I guess," Lily answered, fearfully observing her mother's not-so-good looking fried eggs.7
Mr. Hudson was rarely home. Being an archiologist, he travelled all across the wrold and searched for some old remains of dead species. Mrs. Hudson was a short, fat and extremly sweet person. Her passion was staying at home and being a good housewife. Lily and Rose were fifteen-year-old twins... Not just sisters but also best friends.8
Lily has noticed that her sister's behaviour has changed a lot since the summer vacation started. She was always quiet and stayed in her room for hours. There were two possible reasons: either she was in love or something really bad happened.9
One night, Lily woke up from a strange feeling. She could feel that there was something wrong... Quitely, she went out of her room and walked through the hall towards her sister's room. From behing the door, she could hear low whining... as if someone was suffering from terrible pain. Slowly, she opened the door and looked inside. Her twin was sitting in the corner and crying into her knees.10
"Oh my god! Rozy!" Lily whispered and rushed into the room. "what happened?"11
Rose looked up at her with eyes full of despair and pain. Lily put her arms around her and they sat like that for an hour until Rose's shivering voice broke the silence, "Everybody hates me."12
"Nobody hates you" Lily said, trying to calm her down.13
"You don't know that, Lil," Rose replied sharply. "You haven't been there... The last day of school... We played this stupid game where we shouldn't lie no matter what the question was... We were asked who we like the most... and nobody said my name... My friends... Even my best friend didn't say that I the closest to her..."14
"It's okay Rose," Lily tried calming her down, not understanding what is the thing to be upset of.15
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On the next night, Rose sneaked into Lily's room after midnight and whispered,"Come with me."17
"What?" mumbled Lily, hardly opening her eyes. "What time is it?"18
"Let's go."19
For Lily's astonishment, they went to Elizabeth's house - Rose's best friend. Rose ignored all Lily's questions and kept reminding her to stay quiet. When Lily refused to enter the house from the back-door, Rose said, "You owe me one... You've got my kidney, forgot?"20
They opened Elizabeth's door and quietly went in. Elizabeth was lying on her bed and loudly snoring. "What are we doin' here?" Lily whispered.21
"Erasin' betrail from this world..." 22
She took out a knife out of her pajamas and raised it over Elizabeth's chest. In a matter of second, blood started rushing out of the opened flesh. All Elizabeth could do was release a dying howl...23
Rose grabbed Lily's hand and ran out of the room. When they were far enough Lily got her senses back and stopped. "What have you done!" she yelled, just realising what happened. "You've killed her!"24
Rose put the knife to Lily's neck and whispered, "Yes... and it was a pleasure. You'll keep your mouth shut, you got it?! Or I swear, I'll get to you!"25
The news spread immideately. The police's theory was that a burgler broke into the house and stabbed her in the stomach... Nobody even suspected anything like what happened. The good news, to Lily at least, was that Elizabeth was alive yet in a coma...26
Days passed and Rose had mentioned in many ocations that her so called 'mission' must be fullfilled till the end. Lily couldn't sleep at night as the image of her sister with a knife in her hand appeared to her everytime she closed her eyes. She couldn't tell her mother about what happened as she didn't want to make it worse... Elizabeth didn't die and nobody suspects Rose... She was simply too afraid to tell anyone.27
When Lily heard that Elizabeth has awaken from the coma, she went to the hospital to visit her. She went into the room and sat besides Elizabeth...28
"How do you feel?" she asked.29
"You... you..." Elizabeth whispered. "I know..."30
"What are you trying to say, Beth?"31
"I know..." Elizabeth continued whispering - every word was as a knife going through her chest. "You... I know... It's you..."32
Lily slowly walked backwards to the door. She could only shake her head and speechlessly move her lips. It all got too complicated for her... Apparently, Elizabeth was susspecting her in what happened.33
"Mom! Mom!" Lily called as soon as she got home. "Mom! Where are you?!" 34
"Why are you looking for her?" Rose asked with a smirk. "Troubles?"35
"W-Wher's mom?"36
"She went to the hospital... Apparently she heard that Elizabeth got better..."37
"No..." Lily whispered thinking of what might happen... She was always considered as the bad-twin... Nobody would ever believe her... Rozy is mommy's girl... She would never do such a thing... "No-no-no-no-NO!"38
She grabbed Rose from the neck and they both fell down. Lily, with tears on her eyes, was desperately trying to get the smirk off Rose's face. 39
"Why?!!"40
"That game? I asked Elizabeth who she liked more... me or you..." Rose whispered. "She made the wrong choice..."41
Lily felt massive hands pulling her away from Rose's body... 42
"But it wasn't me!" Lily yelled when she saw her mother's tearful face.43
"She has seen you!" Mrs. Hudson sobbed.44
"It wasn't me!" Lily shouted out desperately, already knowing her fate.45
Author notes
I chose the photo where your sister stands in front of the mirror. That was quite my inspiration.
I didn't want to make it toooo long... although it would've been much more interesting that way... It's quite brief... Enjoy.
A contest entry
- Picture Inspiration by Mel-the-Believer.
130 points, ended October 29, 2006, 7 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
So... What do you think?
Comments
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the beginning doesn't let anyone know who's talking, I'm sure that's the intent but a simple he said she said would make it more understandable.
If the twins are best friends then she would know where her sister is wouldn't she?
check over the spelling
forgot?"20 should be "remember?"
Elizabeth would know there are twin sisters, she would know who did it. She would accuse Rose but most likely everyone would believe the other twin did it because Elizabeth and Rose were supposed to be best friends and the other sister would be the outsider. Even if they were close.
I like the detailing although I think you could take it farther. A few parts feel a little rushed but otherwise it's an interesting story and making one from a picture is rather difficult. Great entry, good luck in the contest.

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That was very well written. I liked it a lot. Kind of creepy, but that was alright. It was written well. I couldn't steal away from it at all. Nicely done. Thanks for entering. Good luck. God Bless!
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Thanks
Wow... Thanks. I love writing... and creepy stuff with odd endings aren't really my type... But I wanted to try something new. I'm glad you liked it.
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I hope you enjoyed it... It's quite weird and not my type of write actually... But I enjoyed writing that



