Date: 14 / September / 2006
Location: Bottom of the cookie jar1
I used to be a happy cookie...2
When i was a young cookie (before i've earned my chocolat sprites) i used to play in the cookie jar with all the other cookies on the top of the jar.3
What can i say? I was happy!
I though it would be like that forever.4
The only bad thing was that it was really dark where i lived. We had to feel our way trough things. And i have to admit... It was kinda crouded. But hey, i didnt said i had a fairy tale childhood, did i?5
But then one day... It happened!6
A bright light crossed the jar. I saw the older cookies screaming while desperatly they tried to run to the bottom of the jar.7
Then the jar started to move. It was panic all over the jar. Small cookies crying. Cookies running in random directions. I couldnt ignore the smell of fear that impested the jar.Me? I was... frozen... I didnt realised what was going on until it was to late... I saw a huge hand reaching down the jar.8
When i tried to react... there was to late. That huge hand already reached for me. I was helpless.9
As i saw the hand taking me out of the jar, i noticed the sad look of the other cookies... looking at me... some of them crying...10
I didnt knew what was going on...
Until i saw it...
It got to be that! "The Mouth"! It was... Even now i cant describe it. I felt all my sences abandoning me, as the hand taked me right to inside The Mouth.11
At that time... i hearded rumors about "The Mouth". To be honest, i never wanted to know much about it. What did i cared? I was a kid. All i wanted was to play with the other cookies.12
I closed my eyes. I didnt want to see what was about to happend. Whatever it was, i was sure it wasnt good.
Then, for some kind of miracle that im yet to understand, i senced the mouth changed the direction and i opened my eyes. It started to move to the jar again. At that point, i didnt knew if i should be happy or even more scared. I didnt had a clue of what was going on.13
But the hand continued to move thoward the jar, and dropped me inside it. The other cookies couldnt believe what happened. They where staring at me. "You cant imagine how luck you had!" - One of them said.14
I was still shaking. Words couldnt get out of my mouth. I was still petrified with what just happened.15
Since then, i stoped to be the happy cookie i used to be. I moved to the end of the jar where cookies are left to pass the validation time. I didnt want to know nothing that happened on the top of the jar. I heard rumors that the hand strikes the jar once in a while. And that they arent as lucky as i was. But i dont care. I want to live. And if, to live, i need to be here, so be it.16
Maybe someday some cookie will find this paper, and then, realise, the dangerous world we live in.17
Maybe...18
Someday...19
Author notes
Im sorry about the bad gramar... im not english... so i kinda have a excuse
Hope you enjoy it
Please tell me what you think
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OMG! i love this .. somehow it seems as if cookies troubles arent too far from human troubles, if we wanna look at things from different perspective ..
i guess this is more than just a cookie story ..
u just inspired me to write sumthin !!!
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Other than the grammar, which isn't even really too bad for a non-english person, i enjoyed this story. Similar to one I'd written, just with a different object. But you managed to pull it off.
And that explains when I try to reach for a cookie, i seem to lose it in the jar?!?
It answers soo much!!
But good work, keep it up!beginning: 4, language: 2, plot: 4, ending: 4, characters: 5.
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Asalam alekum.
Not bad, especially since english is not native to you.
Isn't it stange how we ignore our own fate?
Malika/ Angela
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For a non english person, your grammer is pretty good. It's acceptable. haha. This is really funny. I likes it. Yea it gave me the munchies, but it was funny. Keep up the GREAT work! This is really good.
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This is just so cute! I love the whole story of this poor little cookie.
All the loneliness, the happy times and now, the fear of The Hand!
Great story!
beginning: 3, language: 3, plot: 4, ending: 4, characters: 4.
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hilarity
Aw...poor cookie! I saw this on your AP page and just had to check it out...great writing! It was cute and sad at the same time
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This has got to be one of the most hilarious things I've read today, there is a spell checker on here to help with that. you can just click on edit at the right and click on spell check. otherwise it's well detailed and enticing . Well done!
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lmao your so crazy, you do love cookies , my love, aww this is so well done. For a first story imust say I loved it. I mean now I want to go eat cookies. sprite was so cute. you shook a cookie too omg! poor cookie:% it needs new sugar coated sprinkles now. I absolutely loved this. Im going to copy this and svae it later tonight so I canfold it up and give it to my nieces when I give them a cookie its just really so cute. and when you moved to the other side of the cookie jar, did the others not TRY TO GET YOU omg!! steals all the cookies mwhaaaaaaaaaaaaaa love you!!! I love you
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ty and i love you 2
idk how this happened... it just poped out of my head while waiting for you ... weird really...
cant wait for another one to pop in my head.. lol
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