It would of been about a moment. A high fever clash the bounty of all that was well. I can't go there! He won't let me. Our love, the only thing that was keeping us together was tearing us apart. How can they decide?
Which are the things that they are denieing? us! Two birds who can fly away and never let them stomp on us again. It was taken the mere brass conception of it. If he only knew how I felt? I would kill myself, I would die, to have the chance We let pass us by. The Deep inner feeling of alone. For as with us, How could it be?
"Never asking, never telling, a quiet sultry."
He was my love! But we could never reach the higher segments of what this love could of' and had to offer.
We were silent, never speaking. The communacation was weak for the fear in us would never lessen. For he was heart broken, another love? But one he always had. "How can I reach him? I wonder?" as I lay with him in bed watching him, a beautiful angel sent down before me as all of heaven could not subside the feelings for him I had.. I know he's hurt, but it's useless the tears. I wanted to hold him, as the world cuts knives down deep in to my heart. It rips out my soul into play.
I want to craddle him, and delute of all things mentioned that would not ever favor.
Drown my sorrows spent, simply calloused and dried. We should have taken it to higher levels, deeper waters. But instead we drowned it into those waters except swam. You can only hold your breath before to long your out of air. Red, purple, blue, pale, black...
My dreams went up in smoke!
I was trying to make a good decision. But all bad things happen when you think you are given an inch! Happily you think finally, yes! I have the time to decide and make up my mind! But then it only fools you to believe that before another innocident appears and swips it from you. Take in mind that all good things come in good timing. Yet all bad things come in good timing as well.
Author notes
this story is about the first love and how we ended up being seperated by death..
let me know how you feel on my progress?
Comments
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This is a good story. There's the occasional errors but not too many. How's come you didn't capitalize the title? I just found it curious. Good job with this
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the title is not capitalized because it is a hurtful subject and I'm just emphazing.
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thanx you totem i remeber that i havent completed the story but still working on it..
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to let you know
i'm am now again working on my piece you can read the corrections i have made i am not quite finished yet with this story but i hope you enjoy readin it
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You have a lot of editing to do with this. Check it over for spelling and capitals at the beginning of your sentences to start. Some of your sentences are fragmented . If your characters are having a thought use ' ' marks or italics if possible, that sets the thought off from the rest of what's going on.
I'd be interested in seeing how you complete this piece
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