I stopped in front of the tavern she had instructed me to meet her at. It stunk of humans and alcohol, rather disgusting if I might say. About the equivalent of a pig-sty filled with cow manuer to my delicate elven nose, but I stood and waited patiently. It seemed to take her a lot longer then I thought it would to get there from the castle.2
After what seemed like several hours, I saw her walking in, cloaked so as not to be recognized. She saw me and walked over quickly, smiling. 3
"We should go, love. They will notice my absence." she told me, her voice as sweet and thick as honey. Of course I agreed quickly and took her hand in my own as we began to walk through the village.4
"I've never been to a human village before." she said softly, "Do they always smell so horrid?"5
I nodded as I led her into the forest on the outskirts of town. The huge trees had large, full branches, which not only provided shade, but cover enough so that my beautiful Reidindra could uncloak herself. It seemed forever since I had seen her long, black hair cascade over her bare shoulders, and her grey eyes looking at me , piercing my heart as if it were only the first time. 6
"Where are we going, Zarcon?" she asked me softly.7
Her voice, paired with her eyes and the entirity of her beauty sent chills down my spine.8
"Anywhere but back there. Anywhere that we can be together." I told her, meeting her grey eyes with my own green eyes. I felt her soft hands on my arms, which made me shiver slightly, having not felt her touch for what seemed like an eternity. She turned me to face her, making me stop walking. 9
"Are you sure you want to do this,Zarcon?" she asked me, her eyes searching mine for some hint of discouragement.10
"Reidindra, I've never been so sure of anything in my life." I told her, with all the sincerity and emotion that could have possibly shown in my voice. I had never felt this way about anyone before and didn't intend to let her father, or my own, interfere with our already fragile relationship.11
"Where we will be wed, then?" she asked me. I had never thought she would want to marry me so quickly, so the words rang in my head for quite some time before I answered.12
"The first place we come to." I told her, turning to continue walking. She took my hand in her own, smiling softly at me as we continued walking in silence. I knew this was a whole new adventure unfolding before us. How it would effect us I had no idea.13
Author notes
This stories chapters are written in different perspectives. Primarliy that of Zarcon (the main male character) and Reidindra (the main female character).
Basically what happens after this, is that Reidindra finds out that Zarcon is a sorcerer. She gets kidnapped by Elves in Ilsankt, East of West Fremere (where the started off), and he saves her using magic. He hadn't told her he was a sorcerer so it brings a little conflict....the main conflict is that he is Prince of Numair, an ancient civilization lead by the worlds most powerful sorcerers, and there are several people hunting Reidindra to become queen of it.
Tell what you like/dislike about the idea and how this is written. Constructive Criticism is welcome.
Comments
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SIGH stupid comment.
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PWN-errific
Very nicely done. The descriptions and the dialogue are perfect. It is short, but you really have captured a lot with few words. Are you planning to expand on this story in the future? *hopes*
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Wow
This is a great start to this story. It begins in the middle of of the story. I hope that u can continue wrting.

beginning: 4, language: 3, plot: 4, ending: 5, dialog: 4, characters: 4.



