soulkeeper

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my best friend and i came upon this castle as we were walking by the street. she was really curious about it, so we decided2

to go in. the door creeked opened and i got a little scared. 3

"i don't feel right about this" i said unsure. i felt a chill throughout my body that i never felt before. 4

"don't worry, i'll protect you." she said sarcasticly. she went in and i followed behind. the castle didn't look as big as it did on the outside. there were no rooms but there were stairs going up into a spiral. i thought that was kinda strange.5

"hey let's check out what these stairs lead up to" she said. 6

"hey let's not and say we did." i told her. she looked at me and ran quickly up the stairs.7

"c'mon." she said.8

i went up to follow, but stopped when i saw a girl. this girl was pale, almost white you could say. she just stood there 9

staring back at me. her eyes looked like eyes of a dragon...and they were bloody red. i looked away quickly and ran back 10

up stairs. those eyes were what scared me the most. 11

"hurry up!" my friend yelled down the stairs. "you got to check this out!" 12

i ran up and up until i got to the top, the view was magnificent. wow...it felt like you could the see the whole world. 13

my friend smiled at me with her big grin. i smiled back. at that moment she started fading....disappearing.....into nothing. 14

i paniced. i looked all around the roof and knowing she wasn't there i started down the stairs. i yelled at her name but no 15

voice was heard anywhere. the stairs seem endless and longer than before. i felt something behind me as i ran but when i 16

looked back i tripped. i fell down the stairs, even then it still went on. i heard a ghostly laugh. thinking it was her i 17

yelled in pain 18

"this isn't funny! games over! you win!lets go!!!!!"19

it laughed again. this time i got really scared, especially knowing it wasn't her. 20

my heart pounded faster and faster as i heard a familiar melody that grew louder and louder. i looked behind me and there was the red, dragoned eyed girl holding a music box. she slowly reached out her hand to me. i wanted to scream but nothing came out of my mouth. i couldn't move either....all i could do was stare at those red eyes. those dragon eyes. she came breathed through my ears and i felt a calmness through me.........21

I don’t know what exactly happened. Was it just a dream? If it was a dream, it be a nightmare. I found myself in an empty, dark room. The only light was a light out in the distance. It got closer and closer to me. Blinding me as it got closer. I covered my eyes.......... 22

[to be continued?] 23

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this is only my first part. i wanna know if you think it's good enough to continue it

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  • thealexrose
    August 22, 2006
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    THIS IS TOTALLY AWESOME, BELIEVE IT!

    I'm a total sucker for mysteries so I charge you to complete this story! Please.

    beginning: 4, language: 4, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 4, characters: 4.