Enterprise Forward1
(A screen scene of a meeting of the up-and-coming online firm of Cedric Ventures).2
THE INTERVIEWER: Well, we are beginning to make some significant forward progress. Cedric, has got his schemologies pretty dynamically under way. By the end of the year, we should have produced positive results.3
FINANCIAL ADVISOR: A certain financial coherence is starting to emerge from the various fluctuating transactions. With a more consistently proficient application, we may find further opportunities for a commendation of successfully employed potential resources.4
HEAD OF SECURITY: No apparent untoward infiltrations have been recently noted. But, of course, we should be assiduous, or similarly thorough, in maintaining a sensible diligence.5
SUPPLIES MANAGER: There may still be a need for additional equipment. To this purpose, we must not be negligent in adopting a contemporary, rather than extemporary, attention to the systematic necessities.6
GENERAL CO-ORDINATOR: It may take a not inconsiderable amount of effort, but, I'm sure that with this, we will achieve an improved degree of advancement; which might, quite possibly, culminate in an equally no less significant Cedric Ventures firm proficiency.7
THE INTERVIEWER: In order to facilitate the procedures, general and specific, it might be advisable to continue these commentaries, in a summary fashion, of subsequent screen scene postings.8
CEDRIC: Indeed, we will, I hope, endeavor to adequately supplement this narrative, with further reporting on relevant activities; in relation to, what in acceptable composite terms, can accurately be designated as progress.
Please tell me what you think
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Basically what Kill the Lights said... I'm an actress/model and it's fun to read screenplays and see what people think would be fun to see done on the big screen. You did well at writing this, although I'm not sure what it's suppose to be. It flows nicely from one line to the next.
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Glad you enjoyed reading it Chikarita2. What it's supposed to be is a kind of serialization of the various problems and obstacles confronting a small online company, of the sort that are frequently springing up these days. Okay so it may be a little more speculative than always realistic but whenever I have a problem that has to be tackled, it brings a kind of reassurance to make it the subject of the next installment.
All the Best - Cedric
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Very good and talented
This story is very amazing.
I think many people will like it due to it having good writing and good work. This is a cool story.beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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Sorry not answered sooner Vorelover. Not been looking at the comments on this particular piece recently. Glad you liked and all the best. Cedric
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When I first joined Storywrite, I was so excited to read screenplays. I'm an actress, so that was a field I was interested in reading. But when I began to read over some of the screenplays users had displayed, most of them were written incorrectly and rather awfully. But you did an extremely good job. Wonderful vocabulary, though half the words I didn't quite know. xD
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Hi there Lana. Do you know something, you've done me a great favor making your comment; I'd forgotten about this particular piece, it being so long ago that I posted it. Now, thanks to you, I've found it again, along with a few more comments that it's since gathered. Seeing I've been posting up Ced Ventures episodes for almost 4 years now, there must be quite a lot of others as well, knocking about somewhere in odd corners of this website. Glad you liked it a bit and best of luck with your acting career. All the best - Ced
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I'm glad I could help out. ^^ And thank you!
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Nice...............
Very well-written with great usage of vocabulary, but I'm not too sure the users on SW will want to read it because, lets face it, not a lot will comprehend what your story is about.Even I barely passed.=)
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Hi BlueWave. Think you might be right about not everyone being interested. But this Ced Ven series, as well as being for the readers, also fulfils a kind of psychological need of my own. Whenever I have a problem with my own home business, I just make it the subject of the next Ced Ventures episode. That way it seems to make the problem, whatever it is, seem much easier to solve. Best of luck. Regards Ced
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I've never really read a lot of screen plays because many people can't get them right, but you did a pretty good job if I can say so! Keep up the good work. I'll definately be reading more from you!
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Hello there WeAreOceans. Seems almost unforgivable of me not to have replied sooner. But been out of touch for a while and almost forgetten about this piece. Glad you enjoued it. Best of luck for future, All the Best. - Ced
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Hmmm
as a prologue into something i feel that it gives excellent perspective. It takes the reader out of the norm and offers us something new. I'm wondering what the topic was, though. I felt that the writing was a little jumpy and lacked good direction. But all in all your style is unique and intriguing. I hope to read more. Keep it up. Bravo/abeginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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Have to say sorry Foxy that I’ve not answered your comment before. Been away from this piece for a while. I know the writing may come over as a bit jumpy. Probably because it changes direction quite a lot. Thanks for comment, glad you enjoyed. Regards Cedric
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Thanks for comment xHeart. Actually it's only one installment (a fairly early one) in a series that's been going on in here for quite a while now. Dealing with the problems and tasks of a small online business. Okay, so maybe it's a bit more symbolic than realistic in some ways, but that's a kind of attempt to invoke the reader's interest.
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Hi, M.e.m.p.h.i.s. Only just rediscovered this piece, so sorry I've not replied sooner. Quite a long time ago now that I wrote that, but have been continuing the Ced Ventures series since then. Thanks for comment all the best.
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I have to say it's hard for me to understand (English isn't my native language) but I think I did get your point! Every one of them talks a lot but says practically nothing xD
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Agree Ary. Words alone (where they are meant to relate to action) aren't enough. Words, no matter how long, can't take its place when it's needed. Thanks for comment.
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Very similar to the real world: big words getting thrown everywhere without anything actually being said. I don't think the people themselves know what they are saying
It is very well written as well; you obviously have talent
If I get a chance I might have to check out your other stuff, because I enjoyed this, and it might help me understand it a little better as well.
Pa.Sh.
beginning: 4, ending: 4, characters: 3.
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Glad you enjoyed Paragonz. Hope you keep reading.
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Good start
I think you captured the meeting scene exactly how a meeting goes in the big corportate world. A lot of big meaninful words being thrown around without really saying anything and then having everyone agreeing with it. Keep writing. -
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Hi Rosemary. I probably seem to be coming like a spectre out of the mist, replying to your comment as late as this. But I've been out of touch with this area for a while and only just rediscovered this piece and the additional comment it's gathered. I know Ced Vens episodes can be a bit baffling sometimes but, hopefully, they eventually get through. Thanks for comment. All the best. - Ced
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wait.... I dont get it. Is this, like, a bio-y thingy of a bbunch of characters uin a story you're writing or something?
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Well, Tardis. It is a kind of bunch of characters. They’re trying to make out running a small business. With what success, I’ll leave you to judge. They may yet come through and be successful though, I hope. Thanks for comment. Regards Cedric
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Thanks for comment Lawliet. Well, Cedric Ventures, is a series of stories about an online firm. It reflects the activities of an actual internet company along with the various problems it encounters.
Been posting up in this forum for quite sometime now. Glad you enjoyed.
Regards Cedric
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this is a good meeting scene. nice writing also. you should make a whole screen play surrounding this meeting. I wrote a screen play, but I am not finish with it yet I have to add more. it's on this site Nine Elevators in Three Hours, check it out, and tell me what you think so far of it.
keep it up.I like it
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i don't know if this works cedric let me know ok.
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Glad you enjoyed reading this lottie. Have posted up quite a few C. Ventures escapades, in the past. In addtion to these rather fragmentary pieces, will endeavor to get round to rendering a complete, full-length, screenplay. Glad that you're writing one and look forward to reading it soon. Best of luck with that.
Regards Cedric
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This is amazing i love your writing i hope i can read more by you in the future its great
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Hope you're still around britt dear. Shame on me that I didn't come across your comment sooner. Pleased that you considered this piece not too bad and hope the best for you, now and in the future.
love Ced
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