A man by the name of Darin got up early for work, got dressed in a timely manner, and was eating his breakfast. He felt good about the day to come, he felt as if he had a good outlook on the day. He had it sure in his mind that today was going to be one of the best days in his life, whether he be at work or not. He was going to make the best of this Thursday. I mean it was only one day until Friday! Now, even that deserves a celebration! 1
He walked into work, with a happy face, a mood to get work done, and to impress his boss. He walked over to his cubicle, and began to work. He had five pages on the Wilson analysis, when- “Excuse me, but why are you in my office?” the stranger said.2
“Oh you must be the new guy, huh? Well, I will have to tell you something then. Today is Thursday, tomorrow is Friday, and I do not feel like being interrupted, ok? Oh yea, and the boss, he is picky, but fair. Just keep that in mind ok?” Darin said politely3
“Sorry but no I am not new, I will interrupt you as many times as I have to, to get you out of my office, and thirdly I know tomorrow is Friday, that’s why I want to get most of my work done today. But, I can’t, because you are in my office!!!” The stranger said, but was trying to remain calm.4
“Umm, I think you are mistaken-”5
“No I think you are, I am the boss of this company, and by the way you were describing your boss, you belong to Mr. Nelson! Now, get out of my office!”6
So Darin went across the street to his work, and was late about 2 hours. So he walks in and finds out, the company he went into was their rivals battling for the Wilson’s analysis and now Darin has given the rival company all of their information! 7
So he got fired for being late, giving up valuable information, and fraternizing with the enemy.8
Author notes
this is just something i made, this did not really happen!
short, but hoping for more than short comments!
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Hay Thank you for the comment on my poem called life if you ever get a chance check of my poem called "Fight" and tell me what you think please.Wow intrsting story you got there you never realy new what was going to happend thats kinda kool i like it. But thats something i would do and it would be realy funny i think. Well keep up the good work i like it talk to you soon.
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Lol. Sounds like something I'd do. But then you'd have to describe the sickening feeling in his gut as he realized what he'd done, how he dreaded the moment when people figured it out it was him and whatnot...
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The title suggests a pretty wacky day for Darin, which is what you had intended. Pretty Good Beginning. I could identify with the feeling that Darin had. And the story does grab attention up till the middle. I was wondering what the hell was happening, who is the stranger - Some plot, some twist. But the ending was not that awesome. It leaves the reader unsatisfied.
You could maybe have added some more thrills. Some more description of the characters.beginning: 2, language: 2, plot: 2, ending: 1, dialog: 2, characters: 1.
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