Cold Nights

It was a cold night on the Carribean. The Black Pearl rocked back and forth on the lazy waves of the sea. The silver moon sparkled above gently as stars twinkled all around it. The newest member of the Pearl, Terra Brickham, was going around on deck. Her meduim length black hair was loose. Her violet eyes sparkled poetricly. She wore loose, pirate clothing and a pair of black boots. Her skin was the same color of the moon, white and soft. She looked over the rail of the boat and at the black ocean below. She let out a deep breath. "Long way down...." she said sfotly as she continued on her way. She had been given orders to go see the Captain immediately. She hadn't met him. It was only her first night. The man, Gibbs has hired her. She was to help them sail around to Port Royal. It was quiet as she approached the large wooden doors that lead to the Captain's room. She knocked once and heard a slurred "enter!" She opened the door carefully and drifted into the room. Terra had been expecting an aging ugly pirate man but instead she found a man, not old at all, and handsom to boot. He clutched a jug of ruim in his hands as he looekd at her. "You must be Terra then?" he askede. She nodded then looked away. He was increadibly atrractive and she was pretty shy when it came to guys. He stood. "Now let's take a look at ya." he circled her with a suggestive grin. "Gibbs did a good job." He laughed as he leaned on the table. "Well I jus' wanted to make sure ya were sutible for me crew." he laughed then met her eyes. "You're very pretty." He approached her. "Arent' you?" She shrugged shyly but didn't move. He reached out and touched her face. "I like pretty girls." he traced her lips with his fingers then pulled her close to him. Then he kissed her warmly.It was quiet as she shivered. He placed his hands firmly on the back of her back with his palms. He kissed her neck. Terra gasped at how fast it was all going. Jack laughed. "I'm cap'in love. I like fast boats and fast woman." He tossed her onto the cushy sleeping quarters. He climbed atop her as he whispered in her ear. "Tell me love....are ye a virgin?" She nodded as he laughed then touched her breast. Terra jumped as he cuffed them through the baggy shirt. He ripped it off, sending buttons every where. Her large breasts popped up in there bra as he placed his head down in there as he licked them with his tongue. He bit hard and caused her to jump and moan. She ripped off his shirt in a suden burst of passion and touched his chest. He kissed her. "Now we're getting the hang of it, eh love?" He slowly unsnapped her bra. Terra suddenly felt exposed to the word. Her large, plae breats hanging out there like a pair of massive mountains. Jack jiggled them around softly as his other hand went into her pants. Terra felt his finger enter her woman hood and she moaned. He laughed as he took her hands and put them on her belt. "There." he said. "Open it." Terra uncliked the belt buckle and watched his pants fall down. All that was left was his underwear. Terra looked at him, her heart pounding, her pulse racing. She imagined the feeling she would have. Looking at Jack's eagur eyes......Terra moaned in the pure pleasure of the idea. Jack took ooff her pants and left her in her underwear. He reached and placed her hand on his manhood. Terra had never felt anything like that before. He goraned as she touched it. He bent and kissd her hrasly. Terra went to take off his underwear but Jack got to her first. He tore off her underwear, reaveling her woman hood. He touched it with his hand and stroked it gently. She squirmed and moaned loudly. "Ya ready?" he asked. Terra nodded. He pulled it down and stared. It wwas that. She suddnely pulled herself and kissed it and sucked on it. There was a moan from Jack as he pulled her face up and layed her. He stroked her face and waited for a moment then he pushed it. He kissed her just as this happened. Terra gasped as she sucked on his tongue. She felt a triclle of blood escape her woman hood as he went again. This time she let out a moan. It felt so good. She laughed. Jack kissed her face. They went again and agian, it getting better nad better everytime it went. Fianlly, they stopped. He lied atop her and stokred her chest. "Ya like tha' love?" he asked sweetly. She nodded. He leaned over and whispered to her. " Then I think I'll like havin' ya on me crew....ya saavy?"1

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  • Sam writer
    July 13, 2006

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    this is a good fan/erotica but it was hard to enjoy with all the typos I think you should look at it and fix them. secondly it was hard to read with out paragraphs in it. this site doesn't let you tab but if you'd but a blank line between each paragraph I'm sure you'd get a better response from people if you did that. also the dialouge was decent for jack sparrow of pirates of the carrabian but I think you could work on that. also I think you should put some more foreplay before the sex, and when they are having sex make it clearer because I really got confused. and I'd use a different word then "woman hood" I'd use a bunch of the other names for it pussy, slit, box ect. anyway but overall if you fix those things it would be an awesome fan/erotica

  • ammccree
    July 13, 2006
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    I like the idea but you should consider developing it more.

  • Erotic Dreams
    July 12, 2006

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    This was good, it was too short for my liking, actually, a fair bit to short, if it wasn't for the typos i would consider it seen as you have been so fluent with the continuation of th POTC plot line. you really need to edit this, i noticed a lot of mistakes, a good idea, but it needs a little work