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Very good, details not as strong as before but not as nesscary.
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bogus!!!
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*SMiles*
This was a VERY hot read and with a good read through, would go from hot to sizzling!!
You good!
The Gentleman

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Oh My Gosh!!!!
The threesome was surprising and a huge turn on. Your story continues to draw me in leaving me wanting more.... I'm curious if Millie and Amy were ummm satisfied with their ending as well?
beginning: 4, language: 4, plot: 4, ending: 4, dialog: 4, characters: 4.
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Separate the paragraphs out so that the dialogue has it's own paragraph.
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Great!!!!!
I look forward to your next chapter!!!!
A great turn on
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wow. this is....great.
i enjoyed it.
its very.... erotica-esque. there is not other element in there, unless you were to add more, except the one you claim to have. which is good. some add romance or mystery and dont advertise that. people get angry when you do that. thankfully you dont. this was great. i read it twice. thanks for the entertainment
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pretty horny, but i wanted to hear more!!!
J xx
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I was really getting into it but then it just ended. It was a little dissapointing but it was still good.
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it starts to get interesting and stops
i believe you have great potential but i dont believe there is enough detail or something is missing
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Kinky!
OK. Now I am stunned. Ha ha ha, but I'll get over it. I still want to meet her sister. This is beyond my understanding, but is extremely interesting. I don't do casual sex, and my promises are binding, so I am wierded out by the idea of multiple partners. Seems like it would dilute the intimacy, but you tell me?
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Sounds like a good thing to wake up to.
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Ok
Ok i was right thid is a good group of stories. Nice way of finishing it off but I think you could of writen another one after this bout if Amy and Millie got along or if you all moved in together. You know 3sum lolbeginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 4, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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damn
how can u finish it...i mean dis is a awesome story...i want more...i havent read anyfing lik tat in ages...it fuckin makes a good read n fuck can it turn u on..lol.. -
oh plz finish it....i cant wait to read the rest...its capturing
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finish, finish please. this is so good. please!


beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 4, ending: 2, dialog: 5, characters: 4.










