Always with you…1
A small body lay in the corner of the room, feet tucked under her. She slowly opened her eyes as the bright lights made their presence clear. Barely able to focus she rose from the chair making her way over to the bed where she heard the frustrated breathing of the one she loved most in her life. She had watched him for so long now it seemed like a lifetime. Once a vibrant soul, that shone, that sparkled brighter than anyone she knew, or any star she had ever seen, so why had it all come to this? She always knew that it was too good to be true, that their happiness wouldn’t last forever, but she refused to adhere to it. She reached over the bed and took hold of his hand. She stared at the body lying there, the pale drawn in face that she once loved so much and still did.2
“Its okay honey, I’m here.” Heart monitors beeping around them, drips attached to him, doctors and nurses taking blood samples had been apart of their life for over a year now, but it never got any easier. Katie had received the call 2 weeks ago, Nurse Jenkins had told her that Danny had taken a turn for the worst and to get down there as soon as she could. It was 2 weeks since and he still hung on, he still fought for his life with all that he had. Some days Katie wished he’d just let go and be out of his pain, out of the body that refused to let him live his life the way it should be lived. Then other days she wished she could exchange places with him and take away all the pain inside of him. She willed so much for him to wake up, for him to just look up and smile and tell her that everything was going to be okay, but she knew nothing would ever be the same again. It was never going to be okay again, she was losing him she knew that. She also knew she was losing herself along the way to.3
A sharp tapping at the door brought Katie out of her thoughts. “Come in.” She wiped the tears from her eyes, seemed all she ever did lately was cry, show her weaknesses, which she hated, she hated herself for letting the tears fall, she didn’t want to show herself vulnerable, she had tried for so long to make herself strong, and when she finally succeeded she fell apart within moments.4
Katie had been alone most of her life, parents that were too busy with their own lives to even take note that they had a daughter. She learned from such an early age to fend for herself, no matter what. The only person she had been close with other than Danny was her grandmother Rebecca. She spent many nights over at her house while her parents were away on business or attending a fancy party where children were forbidden to go. They sit for hour’s playing cards or board games, chatting about school and the old days. 5
“Mrs Roberts.” A voice came from nowhere.6
“Are you okay?”7
“Yes, I’m fine.” She said in a dull tone.8
“We have brought the documentation for you to sign when you’re ready.” The doctor said, Katie didn’t take much notice of the doctor she was watching the nurse check Danny’s observations.9
“Okay.” She said, eyes still on the nurse.10
Author notes
Okay this is just a start, to be honest just got the idea, where from? Couldn't tell you.
Think I should go on??
Anyways can't write anymore at the moment got to go to work.
buh bye
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I see you have written other chapters, I had you bookmarked , have just been going through them and found your story you have since re written, so I came to check your others out, I'm glad I did, for I find this very intriguing, I'm off to read the next chapter and see how the story developes, I am hooked already
jennifer
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awwwwww chicken!!!!awww
tears of joy
i love ya sunny gal awww bless ya i love that sayin:aww bless ya its mine!awww chicken bless ya cotton socks
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omgs, i am glad i didn't read this when you posted it, else i would hvae been waiting for more LOL this is great hun, I'm gonna read all the rest of it and then comment hehehe
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very great start!! keep going!
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Great start! Keep going with it, you're off to an excellent start! Seriously. When I find more time I will come back and read more of the saga, promise! Besides, I have to know what happens to Kate!
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ok you've got me!!....raptured (i said raptured dear not ruptured)...can't wait for the next bit so i'm off see you soon..hugs...leanne xx
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Long but worth it and YES, you'd better go on. Great write! Sincerely, S.J.
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this was great! i dont normally read story stuff or even long poems for that matter (you know i'm a fan of the short stuff) but as it was you i had to make an exception. I was not dissapointed! this was very gripping and you made the scene unfold really well, drawing the reader in as the scope expanded, excellent language and it read well too.
the challenge with these is to keep it going so i think you should go on! cant you hear the baying croud?
"more more more!"
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This felt like I picked up a booked and opened it up to the last chapter. I know you're still working on it, but you have a good foundation for a nice short story here. Keep on adding to it, surprise us with something unexpected.
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Bravo Nat.. for writing about such a delicate subject matter as this.. would love to see this developing.. you should do some research into doners and stuff.. well done again
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{{{{{{{ Nat }}}}} Of course you should go on , now that you have me hooked . This story could be so full of twists and turns . Tap into that great mind of yours and hit us with a whammy . Might not be able to get to it for the next couple of weeks . My sis is flying in today at 1pm , but then again...I am usually an early riser and try to have my coffee in peace while I read on here , so who knows........but you better write ,
waiting with baited breath ,
much love and
Reenie
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FINISH IT! lol... jk... I wont be obnoxious just now. Very well written and so sad... Its kind of suspenseful to leave the world hanging like that... my curiousity is killing me... oh well I never finish stories so I'm one to be talking... lol. ~KELS~
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Yes...you should go on girl...I enjoyed what I read and it left me wanting more...so get your ass in gear asap ok ??
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This is very good. You should write more on it....cause now it has caught my atention. Very good write!!
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You had me crying. And YES, you should go on!
puh-ease?
That was awesome...and sad..But I like.
Keep up the good work!
luv lotz
.:~Furious~:.
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