Never Neverland (A different Peter and Wendy)

The sun blazed through the windows of The Darling Academy for Young Ladies. Wendy Deerlin anxiously adjusted her plaid skirt awaiting the final bell.
     "Miss Deerlin, have you finished your assignment?" a stiff man with uncharacteristic crocodile shoes asked her. 
      Outside a dark shadow loomed in the parking lot. He leaned against a car and lit up a cigarette. "Damn sunlight," he growled as he adjusted his sunglasses. He started to tap his black fingernails against the car's hood. He jumped up as the school bells rang. 
      Wendy stood quickly from her desk and grabbed her black bag, adorned with various pins, and her books. She rushed to her locker and fumbled with her combination. Once she opened her locker she dropped her books and looked in a small mirror she had hung. She untucked her shirt and unbuttoned the top three buttons, slightly revealing a black lace bra. She slammed her locker, hiked up her skirt and glossed her lips. Once satisfied with her appearance she bolted down the hallway. Sliding out the front door she paused to look across the parking lot. A large smile crossed her face and she sprinted into it.
  "Peter!" she shouted as she wrapped her arms around a tall attractive guy with emo blond hair, tan skin, and green eyes hidden behind dark sunglasses. He hugged her back his hand resting on the small of her back revealing black fingernails. 
   "I was afraid you weren't gonna make it" she sighed as she stood back to admire his new car.
   "You guys got out early today?" she asked as she bent down and ran her hands over a wheel. Peter stepped back to admire her. His eyes found their way to her breasts, her white blouse was taut over them. He watched her as she ran her hands through her brown choppy hair and she walked around the car.
   "So when are you going to get a car?" he asked as he slid into the driver's seat.
"My parents want me to get honor roll first" she sighed. "So I'll be bumming a ride from you till I get my report card," she told him.
He smiled,"So where am I taking you?" he asked as he shifted gears.
She pulled a necklace from under her shirt.
"Well, I picked up some Tinkerbell for you." she whispered coyly.
His eyes fell on a small tube with a powder in it that was tucked in her blouse.
"My place then" he laughed.
A dark figure watched them speed down the street. His crocodile shoe stomped on Peter's cigarette butt.
 
2nd Installment
"I'm just worried about him. He's our only son," a man said as he pulled his long black hair into a pony tail.
"Yes dear, but he's not failing any of his classes and he passed the last drug test we gave him," a man with greying hair responded.
"Smee," the man with black hair sighed, "he may have passed it but I still think he is doing drugs. I read an article that some homemade drugs can hide from a routine drug test." Both men walked out of the house said goodbye, and got into their cars "Starting that boating school was the best thing i ever did." the man with black hair said as he adjusted his name tag which read "Hook."
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"What are we waiting for?" Wendy asked Peter. She gestured to the alley they were sitting in. Peter strained over his steering wheel to see the main road better.
"In exactly two minutes my Dad should drive by and two minutes after that my other Dad should be leaving for work. Trust me it's like clock work. They are anal about almost everything if they weren't I wouldn't get away with half the stuff I get away with." He told her, his eyes straining to pick out Smee's black Lexus.
"Alrighty," she said with an unconvinced look on her face.
Exactly two minutes later a black Lexus drove by and Peter gave her an I told you so look.
Another two minutes and they pulled out of the alley and pulled into his garage.
"Now it is time to party," he said with a smile as he led her through his house to the back yard.
"God, your house is beautiful," she exclaimed as he held the door to the pool house open for her.
"I certainly hope you brought your swimsuit," he grinned.
She turned on the stereo and sat next to him. She fished her necklace out and laid it on the table.
""Okay, so we'll have the first half now and you can have the rest for later," she suggested to him after giving him a long kiss.
"Sounds good. So how about after our trip to neverland we take a dip in the pool?" he asked her as he pulled aside her hair to kiss her neck.
"You forget I don't have a swimsuit," she said as she playfully pushed him away.
"A swimsuit, you don't need a swim suit," he said as he pulled her back to him for a quick kiss.
"Now let's have us some fairy dust." 1

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Author notes

A twist on the Peter Pan classic, characters are obviously not fully my own.

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  • JustAnotherGirl
    January 6, 2007
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    <3 yea yea yea! haha, i love this. =)


  • Rebel Rebel silver member
    January 1, 2007

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    It was hot.

    I always knew Peter must have had gay fathers. It was totally awesome to the point of being coolio. I liked the ending. Nothing like a good nose powdering. This is definitely Puppy Fiction. Meow!

  • Ahava
    January 1, 2007
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    hey! this is a really good story. i liked how u made the characters still recognizable but you twisted them so they aren't the traditional characters. good job on this and good luck in the contest!


  • Mai4ever
    January 1, 2007
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    This is really good! I really liked how you familiarized the characters yet added such a twist to them that there's something different you can't really recognize; a whole new side. I can't wait to read more! Good luck in the contest.


  • Weatherwax
    June 24, 2006

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    I liked the feeling of out-of-whack familiarity you've created here. It's a bit like watching your parents get drunk at a wedding... the same characters but... not. And it all fits together with a sort of surreal neatness. Can't wait to see where you take this... could go anywhere. Cheers for a great read.

    beginning: 4, language: 4, plot: 5, characters: 4.


  • SageSyren Greeters member
    June 19, 2006

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    I liked this. Twisted really. Can't wait to see where you go with this. Good descriptions but I think you might have switched your he and she's in the sixth and seventh paragraphs but I'm not sure. Just wanted you to be aware of it.
    Great job

    beginning: 4, language: 4, dialog: 3, characters: 4.

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