She shut the door behind her with a sharp bang, and slide down the door, her hands spread across the wooden surface, trying to scar her skin.
Falling to the floor, her body gave into the pain and she cried, her body jerking with every sob and every breath she took.
Her memories flashed across her closed eyes, vision with her mind's eyes reminded her what he had done, but not how she had deserved it.
Her arms encircled her dirty body, that's how she saw herself, scum...dirty...she rubbed at her arms, trying to get the flith off her. Her nails dug into her skin, leaving marks.
Tears silently dripped down her cheeks, dissolving whatever make up was left from before. Her clothes were tattered and looked as if they'd been pulled on in a hurry...which they had. She'd wanted to get out of there.
A thought crept into her mind, how he'd force her open and ripped her inside out...she shivered at the thought. How had he done this to her? Didn't he love her?
She shook quickly, he knees shaking and slowly disappearing from underneath her. Her arms fell in front of her stopping her from hitting the floor.
In the corner of her eye she saw the marks she'd made..and the ones he'd left there from tonight.
'That corner' she thought to herself 'that damn corner.'
She sobbed loudly, raising her head to the ceiling as the moonlight soaked through the windows, catching her tears and making them dance.
Her lip shook as she remembered her screaming 'Stop' and he'd just ignored her, after all those promises...never again, how he'd never force her to the corner, to open herself to him, he'd lied.
She sat and leaned against the door, the pain still throbing in her vagina, she could feel a wet patch growing on her pants, and knew she was still bleeding, that it wasn't going to be ok again until another 2 days.
She burst into tears again as she remembered him entering her, as her hands were tied to the bedpost..the handcuffs were supposed to be for fun, not for that. Had he really been that horny that he'd rape her? From the feeling down below..obviously so was her answer.
She jumped as she felt her phone vibrate in her pocket, she lifted it out carefully, looked at the blue light flashing for a moment and flipped it up carefully.
'You have recieved one new message.'
Swallowing she opened it...it was from him.
'Angel, im sorry. I know i promised, but i got carried away, its the effect you have on me, please forgive me, i didnt mean to. Im sorry, I love you. xxx'
She stared blankly at her phone, her hand shaking so badly she thought she was going to drop it.
Opening a new message she typed.
'Its ok darling, i forgive you, and i love you to.'
She watch it send off, and then colassped, wandering why she forgave him...again....1
Author notes
erm...how do i explain this? i cant really, something that came to me for reasons i dont want to discuss, hope its what you're looking for.
A contest entry
- Unbareable Depression by tearsofsadness.
1350 points, ended June 21, 2006, 16 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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Oh wow...So sad but so good... I would have loved to read more (Not that the subject is so great, but that it's written so great.) Congrats on the silver trophy, you definitely deserved it.
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omg this makes me sick (in a sad way) i liked it though. I like how you showed her true feelings about it. You put it bluntly. Although I do think he needs to be delt with.
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Incredible, and the guy deserves to have his innards removed with a dull teaspoon, liquidised and fed back to him through a funnel.
If this is based in fact, he needs dumped!
beginning: 4, language: 4, plot: 4, ending: 4, dialog: 4, characters: 4.
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Omg..
this story was so sad, yet so good... I liked it a lot... I dont know what else to say other than this is really good...
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Omg really powerful but I hate that she is still going to love him after that......ugh I feel complete angst!!!! But really despite some grammar problems. Watch that not capping(I do it too)! But really is a good short story and it makes you wonder how she got in that situation in the first place.
Anyway thanks for the recent comments I'm working on story not that good but going so slow! But I'm going to finish it anyway. You are right I should get on SW much more....lol
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Touching...
After reading this Kaz, I can't say how bad I feel. Not the story, the story is brilliant. Truly emotional and gets right where it aims for, into your heart. Good descriptions which really pits into the horrific situation.
So I won't disclose, but that got me pretty hard.
Channy Babes xxx
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It cut through my heart, nice work a couple of typoes but did one question remains in my mind did she really forgive him and why? I hope there is more. Keep writing.
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I..like this. it has a very real life situational feeling. Knowing people who have gone through this..
wow.
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 4.
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Congratulations on Silver Trophy
The story was easy to understand and visually captivating. Indenting would help, though I understand how the tools here can be frustrating at first.
Keep writing, it is good for the soul.
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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No explanation is needed. It seems very self explanitory to me. That is my humble opinion. Oh and I absolutely loved it!
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it was a good story i liked it it was so emotionalthe boyfriend was a jerk and he should die(heeheehee)
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Great job!
Wow. Fabulously done. Excellent portrayal, and very poignant detailing. Love it, no complaints.beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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not sure what to say....this is pretty moving. to express how someone else is feeling and make the reader understand is difficult but youve pulled it off. i wasnt sure where it was going at first. its short but powerful. i wish i could write like this, its very good. its really sad at the same time. you clearly put a lot heart and soul into this.
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its so sad
wow, i read this and i felt so sad. Emotions burst out of this piece. It also shows the unwaitable lust for luv, that a man can't bear. Truely this was great in asspects of all types. The writing i mean.
beginning: 5.
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wow, i dunno wot 2 say. dat was well breathe taking..if u ever wana talk hun, u no im here
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very sad
wow this is great hun, ithink i know what this is about
R.D by any chance?, it has a lot of feeling in it, the feeling of being trapped in by love, well done keep on writting and peace out
-armoured heart-language: 5, plot: 3, ending: 3, dialog: 2, characters: 5.
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Heartbreaking
You did such a great job at getting the reader to feel the girls emotion. After reading it, you are left with heartache for this girl.It can be so easy to forgive someone that you know you shouldn't, and this is a great example of the power love can have over common sense. It's a horrible situation and you captured it so well. Very very touching...
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WOW
The emotions portrayed by your protagonist was just amazing. Her pain was nicely portrayed, as well as the setting. The introduction was explained nicely making the setting of the story realistic, the ending was also nice, how she forgave her boyfriend just made me think... it was like me and my boyfriend, how I always forgive him after he cheats on me numerous times, it's a real nice story..
..great job!
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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Wow....What can i say...I felt the girls pain....but why did she forgive him!? probably because she needs someone, even if there as bad as he is. Good luck! i hope you win!
~Aurora
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 4, ending: 5, characters: 5.
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