My life is a crossword, 1
Contained in a box 2
Words and emotions, 3
Some fit the spaces 4
Some never go. 5
Spaces unused, 6
Clues tossed aside, 7
Like my opinions, 8
Cryptic meanings 9
Versus clear thought 10
Paramount to my survival 11
To finish triumphantly 12
I strive for that completion 13
To dare, 14
And search 15
For life outside the square16
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Metaphorical use of a crossword as my life!
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I like it, it's interesting how you compared a crossword puzzle to your life, and you did a good job at it too. I think it's well writen and really clever but perhaps could be more developed, something longer. It would be really fun to read. Either way, it's really good. The ending particularly left a good impact too.
beginning: 4, plot: 5, ending: 5.
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Just another masterpiece
Once again, you have proved your talent! I love the way you used the words, and the idea behindd them. That is something I can always look forward to in your poetry, and I hope you will keep writing. -
Well, I usually give long and detailed reviews, but this isn't really a story...
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Good concept and certain lines/imagery very apt. However, others are not so successful (i.e. 'Cryptic meanings' and 'I strive for that completion' sound a little trite).
beginning: 4, language: 3, ending: 3.
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I never really read poetry (no idea why) but it was the title that aroused my curiosity here. Someone once told me that anything you can think of can be used as an analogy as long as you can find the connection somewhere. In this case, I've rarely seen an analogy fit so neatly. Very imaginative and crystal clear... I particularly love the last line... life outside the square - it can be interpreted in so many ways and that, I guess, it what brings it down to a personal level that any reader can relate to. Including myself. Cheers!
beginning: 3, language: 4, ending: 5.
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Cool
This is a neat little poem. It is a nice little freshener but it starts to lose it's ryhming at the end.
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I thought this was really cool
very unique I have never thought of anything like this and this is really great
beginning: 4, language: 5, plot: 4, ending: 4, dialog: 5, characters: 2.
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Great wordplay
Very descriptive of life among the general population.
Reminds me of a once popular song called little Boxes,
remember it.beginning: 4, language: 4, plot: 5, ending: 4.
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Truthful and Real!
It's amazing what you are able to see in other things that seem to pertain to your life. So many people write about their lifes in a very basic way, but you see life in everything around you. I am very impressed with lines nine and ten. You did a wonderful job! Keep on writing!beginning: 3, language: 4, plot: 4, ending: 5.
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I would have found this alot better if your opening line was just:
'Crossword'
Your metaphor was clear, and i don't think you really needed to spell it out for us at the start.
Clever use of the crossword, though!
I liked it, just not that beginning.
beginning: 2, language: 4, plot: 5, ending: 4.
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