What is logical? 1
What is reasonable? 2
Do any of us truly know? 3
Questions of a life lived 4
A love held true in our hearts 5
Inexplicable yet explained 6
In a touch or a look 7
In a smile or a tear 8
In a rage or a tender moment 9
Do any of us reach peace within? 10
Do any of us know calm within? 11
Do any of us see our soul? 12
Is life an imagined state? 13
In essence, a struggle 14
Or is it only in part 15
A beautiful mind? 16
Author notes
Contemplationary piece
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this was very profound and so thought provoking. the only thing that stuck out was line 10 and 11. they have a very similar word structure and word choice. was this done to emphasise this particular point? i thought it broke the flow of the piece slightly.
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I like it
It certainly makes you think about things in new lights. But it certainly is a very good piece. I enjoyed it immensely. Congratulations on a great piece
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So good. But how dare you make me ponder such things at 3:48am? heh heh.
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Wow!
Wow, that was awsome. A great piece to keep us thinking. My English teacher would love it(were talking about questioning what we read). Great work. God Bless! -
nice.
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wow, this is really great, though its supposed to be a story lol. it is a beautiful piece, id like to read up on mor eof ur work.
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Beautiful
Your words seem so light and fragile, and yet they carry the weight of a thousand years. This was a very goo and talented write. You have not only and inquiring mind, but a creative one as well. Good job!
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Sweet poem with all those eternal questions we ask ourselves.
I'm going to be massively presumptuous and say there was one sticky point for me. Line 6 - "Inexplicable yet explained" - I just couldn't get past this line. My suggestion would be that you chanced "... yet explained" to "... but explicit". Just a humble suggestion but you may feel it hampered the rhythm.
That aside I really liked your poem
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Good
All these questions really hit home i loved it you have great talent never quit;P
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Stranger
Nice!!! These questions have made me think about life as a whole. This is what other people like me feel. It's a question about life. How it works and how it operates. Why we live through such hurtful insincere things instead of hopeful compromising experiences. I really like how you started the poem with Is it Logical? ANd you ended it with a BEautiful mind. They are two opposite characters of life yet in this poem they relate to one another. This poem has no dialogs yet speaks for itself. Not to mention that this wonderful poem is realistic and intack.
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love it
wow this is exactly how im feeling today.... wow!!
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Loved it
This was honestly great! It made me think a bit & that's a good thing. This piece is really inspiring. Keep it up!
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shows an intelagent and enquireing mind.
Is it to-day tomorrow or yesterday?
Ps, is it poetry or prose?
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Thanks for the kind words on my story.
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Made Me Think...
This poem really made me think, and that is a good think to get your readers to do. I sat and contemplated your questions and then realized that it is not just you and I who ask ourselves these questions. The whole world does. You did a marvalous job with this poem.beginning: 4, language: 4, plot: 5, ending: 4.
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Very thought-provoking.
I liked it.
Gave me the impression you were sat all day just wondering about life in general.
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