"We're screwed" said the commander of the MT.Dew army. "They outnumber us 40 to 1.
"I've never seen such a big army of coffee beans before!" said the second in command.
"Well we'll just have to try to take them head on then" said the commander.
"Screw you" said the second in commmand "I'm Gonna join the coffee beans."
"You do that and see if i care!" said the commander
2 DAYS LATER:
"So hows our former second in command doin with the Coffee bean army?" asked the Commander
"He's dead sir" said the third in command
"Dead!!" said the commander "Why!Why! He was so young!"
"But i thought you didn't care?"said the third in command
"Of course i care!!" said the commander "I wanted him to join their army so i could kill him myself!"
"Sorry sir." said the 3rd in command
"Well, how did he die?" asked the commander
"Weeellll sir you know how the coffee beans outlawed cloneing in their province?"
"Yes everyone knows that." said the commander
"Well one of the coffee bean's commanders caught the 2nd in command of the MT.Dew army pooping, and as soon as he saw the brown shape he thought he was a cloneing machine since he was made of aluminum and stuf and so he shot him." said the 3rd in command
"Ohh...shoot that's ironic."said the commander
"Why is that sir" asked the 3rd in command
"Because" said the commamder "We made ourselves out of aluminum so their bullets wouldnt hurt us, looks like we're gonna have to make the next troops out of steel then." said the commander
"I agree" said the 3rd in command
"Well looks like your promoted to second in command" said the commander
Author notes
i got really bored
Please tell me what you think
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0_o
Dude...that was...off. I LOVED IT! *Rolls around on the floor, basking in the weirdness* So, yeah, that got weird. How bout those coffee beans?
Cute write.
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lol
You have a funny sense of humour. I like it.
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wow...
lmao lol. What is that? i cant stop laughing...beginning: 1, language: 1, plot: 1, overall: 10, ending: 1, dialog: 1, characters: 1.
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Interesting
Very very interesting nothing like I have ever written.beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, overall: 10, ending: 5, dialog: 4, characters: 5.
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OKay
Your author note explains it all. I got bored when i worte 'The Dog' you should have a read. You said 40 to 1 when there was three of them. Anywayz -
erm... the plot was really cute... the characters and the dialog was funny and at the same time....disturbing (in a good way) great job!
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funny!
this thing is so stupid. i love it! keep it up.beginning: 4, language: 3, plot: 4, overall: 7, ending: 5, dialog: 3, characters: 4.
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