The Justice Killings (Prologue)

    “Good morning Alexander.”
    Alex jerked up in his bed. Or he would have, if it hadn’t been for the nylon straps that held his body in place

    “I’m glad to see you’re finally awake. I’ve been waiting for so long to be able to play our game. Patience is a virtue you know.”    Alex’s mind wasn’t working.

    “I’m sure you’re wondering what is happening Alexander. But don’t worry, everything is well planned, and if you co-operate, our game will be over in no time at all. I do so hope you will play by the rules, it makes things so much less messy.”   

    If his mouth hadn’t been taped closed, he might have yelled for help.

    Minutes passed. Alex could do nothing but lie in the bed and attempt to keep his sanity as his thoughts crashed from one side of his skull to the other.

    Something changed in the room. It seemed colder, more ominous. The voice that broke the lengthening silence was different this time; a combination of what a hungry wolf would sound like if it could talk, and that of a condemning judge.

    “Change in plans Alexander. They have told me that there’s no point in playing any games with you. You have proved far too stubborn in the past. So we end this immediately.”

    If his eyes hadn’t been covered, Alex might have been able to see who the voice belonged to.

    “I’m sure that you are wondering what this is about. Almost everyone does. But it is simply, really.  You all are so ignorant of who you really are in the depths of your soul. But I will fix such ignorance. And after all, in the end, my game is really nothing more than justice.”

    With that, Alex felt razor sharp steel cut through the bare skin on his chest.

    If he hadn’t slept in so late, he might have not been here.

    Something wet slid along the cut, soaking up the blood that oozed across Alex’s torso.

    “Ahh, justice tastes sweet, does it not my, young Alexander?”

     If his bed hadn't been so solid, he might have been able to break free.

    Cold steel pressed against either side of his chest, and an immense pressure began to crush his ribs.

    Game over. Justice served.

    If Alex hadn’t died, he might have finished college, married, become a world renowned scientist, and eventually died after a long and happy life.

    If life wasn't so unfair, then He wouldn't have had any reason to take justice in His own hands.

    If…so many ifs. The only sure assurance is that Justice will come one way or another.

The Justice Killings     27 dead     As of today, unsolved

 

 

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Something I wrote quick this morning...took about 20 minutes.(An Idea that I've had for awhile) It turned out far better than I thought it would, though I'm not quite satisfied with the last few lines...it needs a better closing for the prolouge.

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  • ritebymidnite
    August 19, 2006
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    Loved It!

    I want to read more! I can't wait until the next one comes out!

  • heartnsoul
    June 16, 2006
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    A great write for off the cuff! The only thing you left out was the pain. Skin cut and ribs spread opened without benefit of anesthesia causes one to black out. Given the fact that he is already in the dark this would add to the intensity of the death itself. This is an area that could be expanded on as the killer is still enjoying the act. Just my POV. I think the ending is really good the way it is. Showing the cruelty and mind of a serial killer. But you know when something is finished or not. Follow your gut.

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.


    • Everlasting-Fallout
      June 17, 2006
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      thanks for the tips, I'll be certain to use them in the future. However, in this case, the physical pain would not necessarily be enough to cause the victim to pass out, as I am only attempting to show the victim's skin being cut through. No ribs spread open or broken until the last few paragaphs, where the victim does pass out.


  • sheissounsure
    June 5, 2006
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    Um.....wow

    This was pretty good and I want more!.....lol I liked the last line of the prolouge it's very thought provoking. I mean What are the justice killings? What kind of justice is in when this guy would have become something? Maybe I should be the prolouge again but I'm really curious?! How did he get there in the first and who is behind it all? Okay *sits back* sorry for all the questions but it just really makes me curious! lol Oh yeah back to your story, very well written and the descriptions of what he was feeling were pretty good too.......

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.