I was sitting in my room, it was about 10pm. It was dark and I was sitting on bed just thinking baout everything that has been going on. A tear went down my face followed by more. I had so much pain and anger in me i just didnt know what to do with it all. I didnt know how to make it go away. I looked over toward my dresser and went and stood in infront of it. On top was my box that I put jewlery in and someting else that I valude. I opened it and there was my best friend the one thing that helped take the pain away... my razor. I grabed it and went back over to my bed were I sat back down. I looked at my wrist then at the razor. So many qeustions started to form. I asked myself I could end all now and be dun. I made a cut above my wrist away from the vians cuz I chickened out. I put the razor on the skin right on the vien. I took a deep breath then all the sudden my world flashed before my eyes. My mom walked in and turned on the light. She looked at me confussed and then ran over to me and took the razor. She started screaming at me and asking me why. All I did was look at her. I was stund I didnt know what to do except sit there. She told me that she was getting me professional help that I was syco. My life just gets worse and worse ever day. And the htought of death is still in mind. What iis the point if know one out there cares. All I need is that one person to tell me they care and i'll put down the razer and stop the suicidle atempts. Just hope I find that one person before it's to late.....1
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please tell me this isnet you who is doing this!! This is so sad yet so well written.
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Step back and put that razor down
If life is a bowl of cherries then what am I doing in the pits? is that your stories attitude? Well join a very big club,I like your story, and it is just a story right? I hope so. I think you should take Rebel's advice a nice big bowl of sickly sweet something will take the edge off most problems... just make sure you don't over do it and go into a diabetic coma...lapoe...beginning: 4, language: 3, plot: 3, overall: 6, ending: 4, dialog: 3, characters: 3.
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Wow
The story is numb with very little emotion in it, which I like because with those types of thoughts going through your head that's what you feel. As the ending comes there is more and more hopelessness. There are a few spelling mistakes, but who cares.
The piece was very life like, just like reality. Except for the part about things always getting worse. I know from experience that things get better no matter what. Nothing is that bad, but I know a lot of people look to blades for comfort because I once did.
What most people don't know though is that slitting your wrist can't kill you because no one can cut deep enough. Even if you do you'll just pass out from the pain of it all. Knowing that I lost some of the story, but it was still very good.beginning: 4, language: 4, plot: 4, overall: 7, ending: 5, dialog: 4, characters: 5.
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oh my gosh, you really do need someone to help, because it is hard to quit something likke this .Great story.please read mine.May god bless you forever and always
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I run to the blender.
Murder by ice cream and milk. When my life gets bad I run to the blender and mix up ice cream and milk and sit down to a milkshake that colors my world, gurl! When that straw hits my lips and I begin to suck up the goodness of what's in my glass...the rest of the world can just go and take a hike.
I use my razor to keep my sexy legs shaved so I can eventually find me a man. Life is good and life will get better for you. I gotta go now...the blender is calling me.beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 4, overall: 6, ending: 5, characters: 5.
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Sad........I hope everything turns out okay
Short and too the point, this piece of writing just reveals alot of pain and unhappiness. I really hope everything works out for you and we all sometimes feels like it won't get better.....I hope that it does for you.
As for rest of my comments on this, make you sure you look this over. Alot of grammar mistakes and misspelling but it didn't take away from the message of this story at all tho
Good Luck to you!beginning: 5, language: 3, plot: 5, overall: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 4, characters: 5.
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