The God.....

In no chains I'm bound
In no realm I'm trapped1

I go to and forth as I please
Who I am its yours to choose2

I love young blood so soft and sweet
Who I am its yours to choose3

Whose sent I catch its their mistake
Let me be known4

I am the angel of the night
The angel of darkness5

Let me now pass from fiction into legend...6

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like i said this is a work in progress...

This is a work in progess tell me what you think

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  • Drac
    February 18, 2007
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    Great work!

    Very well written, with good and mysterious content... I like it, alot!

    beginning: 4, language: 3, plot: 4, ending: 5, dialog: 2, characters: 2.


  • Montgomery
    September 2, 2006
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    Wow

    That was really really good. I would love to be able to write with such eloquence and passion. Can't wait to read the rest. Great job!

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.


  • Godsaved
    July 17, 2006

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    Good

    this is good but keep workinill see you in a week


  • fangheart
    July 3, 2006
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    wow, its great, but you need to work onit. But keep trying.


  • imaginethis
    May 11, 2006
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    I like this poem I can imagine the whole poem or see it in my minds eye....it is really good.

    beginning: 2, language: 5, overall: 8, ending: 3, characters: 5.

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