She lives in a cave. In the valley of stories.
Her youth faded yet her wonder still alive.
She is the story teller of the village.
Passes down the stories to each new birth.
Even the adults come to hear her stories.
She goes out to her herb garden to pick her tea.
Then she hands a big cup of brew.
The smell takes the stress of the day away.
She listens to there troubles.
Send them away with tales of hope.
Deep down we know she is art.
In the form of a human.
As the children run to her arms open with love to share.
Love embraces all she touches. Good she brings to all who live in the village.
Some do not understand. They cast stones.
What I could not understand she helps those who made her cry.
When they were ill she would take her healing tea to them. She would say "an enemy a freind waitng to be born."
What a women who teaches, heales and has the time to love.1
Author notes
This has been on the back burner. first draft.
Please tell me what you think
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caught in two minds
enjoyed the theme, has the making of a very good short story, am somewhat mistified by the fullstop comma after each line,its as if you are making notes before writing the story.
Ps, in the second line, perhaps you would consider...yet her wonder still lives
instead of her wonder still alive.
beginning: 3, language: 4, plot: 4, ending: 3, dialog: 3, characters: 4.
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some spelling errors, and this is how it should be set up.
She lives in a cave. In the valley of stories. Her youth faded yet her wonder still alive. She is the story teller of the village. Passes down the stories to each new birth. Even the adults come to hear her stories.
She goes out to her herb garden to pick her tea. Then she hands a big cup of brew. The smell takes the stress of the day away. She listens to there troubles. Send them away with tales of hope. Deep down we know she is art. In the form of a human.
As the children run to her arms open with love to share. Love embraces all she touches. Good she brings to all who live in the village.
Some do not understand. They cast stones.
What I could not understand she helps those who made her cry. When they were ill she would take her healing tea to them. She would say "an enemy a freind (s/b friend) waitng to be born."
What a women who teaches, heales (heals) and has the time to love.beginning: 4, language: 3, plot: 5, overall: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 4, characters: 3.
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