The sun was just about to peek over the mountains surrouning Newport Beach, but no one who didn't live there would notice because of the mists that rolled in at night and blanketed the bay. But, being a lifetime resident and having spent most of his time down at the docks, he knew that the predawn stillness that preluded the peaceful sunrise was coming to an end. 1
Digging about in his pocket he found the spare key. Unlocking the gate and slipping through, he closed it quietly behind him. He quietly padded down onto the docks,and hopped onto the bow of the Quicksilver. Skillfully ascending the mast to the rigging post, he put his hands behind his head, leaned back, and waited for the sun to begin its daily crusade against the mist shroud, signaling the beginning of yet another bright, sunny, California day.2
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Good detail. Just needs more added. Thanks!
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fantastic
it doesn't need any help... you just need to get writing more chapters. i see this on the best-seller list.overall: 8.
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