The Wizard Part One

One day in Eyrst
An stranger approached
He had a wooden staff
A long black hood hid his face
"Come forth Elden"Said The stranger.
A young boy started forward
"Whaaat sir do you want sir with me"Asked the boy
Apparently Elden
"So your Elden of witch the prophecy told of"Muttered the Stranger
"Come with me"Said the stranger
"Have you ever did something you could never explain"Asked the Stranger
"How did you know"Asked Elden
"I know more than you could ever guess about you past,present,and future,
Said the Stranger
"You are a wizard"Said the stranger
"WHAT"Said Elden
"You heard me"Said the stranger
"And to begin you shall call me Ged"said Ged
"Yes Ged"Said Elden awkwardly1

Author notes

This came to me after writing a poem

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  • Sunless Spirit
    July 14, 2007
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    18 times and counting...


  • Sunless Spirit
    July 14, 2007
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    ok 10 times....lol I read it 2 much times

  • Sunless Spirit
    July 14, 2007

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    i READ IT 5 TIMES THAT OK? lol Its very interesting I like reading it cause I want to see it. Maybe It can be as good as harry potter!


  • Sunless Spirit
    July 13, 2007
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    k cool story and very interesting


  • Stacey V
    March 18, 2007
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    Ohhh and um, spelling mistakes.


  • NooNiThEWitcH
    October 8, 2006

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    Interesting

    The story is very interesting. A bit like the beginning of Harry Potter. I can not wait to read the rest. Please post it.
    There are only two characters in thsi chapter so you needn't say, who said what everytime one of them speaks.

    Please post the rest of the story and IM me when you do.
    Good luck and if you need any help feel free to ask.

    Nooni

    beginning: 4, language: 2, plot: 5, dialog: 3.

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