[ Lizzie, who is 14 years old, spent her whole life dealing with her parents fighting with eachother. Verbally of course. Her father has problems, depression, and mostly anger. But he always refuses to take the medication that doctors provide for him. He

Lizzie, who is 14 years old, spent her whole life dealing with her parents fighting with eachother. Verbally of course. Her father has problems, depression, and mostly anger. But he always refuses to take the medication that doctors provide for him. He yells at Lizzie, his wife, and Lizzie's little sister for about any little thing. And blames them all for his problems. Now Lizzies father loves his family, and especailly Lizzie very much, but he can never show it.1

Lizzie was walking home from school, like everyday she does. Even before she opened her door she heard her parents yelling. She dropped her back back on the ground soflty and walked to wear all the commotion was. Her dad saw her and said " You fucking missed a assiment in math yesterday. Remember our aggrement. I won't yell unless you miss a assiment."2

" Dad, I asked Mr. Jones if i could make up the assiment and turn it in for half credit." Lizzie said nervously.3

" Still your supposed to be doing all your work! You got to use your fucking brain! Homework leads to good grades! Why arn't you doing your homework?"4

" I just forgot to last night. And i promiss i won't forget again."5

Her dad grabbed her wrist and dragged her to her back back and he pulled out her planner. He through it against the wall and yelled " Your supposed to use it! That's why they give it to you!" 6

Tears welled up in her eyes and her mom yelled " John, let go of her! She get's it now!"7

" No she fucking doesn't! What do you have in math right now?" Her father asked the last part to her.8

Lizzie just stood their sobbing.9

" That's what I thought!" He turned and kicked the wall leaving a huge hole in it. " You have to work, work, and work! Your never going to get into collage if you keep doing this! God, are you stupid or something!"10

" Yes, dad! I am stupid!" Lizzie yelled. 11

" Stop that shit! Lizzie, your not stupid! Your just fucking lazy!"12

Lizzie sobbed and picked up a glass cup and throw it against the closest wall near him and she screamed " I fucking hate you!"13

Lizzie ran in fury out her house and onto the dark streets. She kept running and running till she collapsed on a feild of grass. She curled up and cried while watching the stars. ' Why does he make my life so horrible.' She kept thinking to her self over and over again.14

So got up and walked slowly back homw practically dragging her feet. She was a house away when she saw a cab in her drive way. She saw her fathers figure hop in while the cabby placed suite cases in the back. It took Lizzie a moment to register what was happing. She ran as fast as she could but the cab took off before she could reach it. She ran after it till she could no longer. She cried. She always crys but tonight was the most she ever cried in her life. " I love you Dad!" She screamed out into the night awakining nabors. But that was the last night she ever saw her dad again.15

Please tell me what you think

    : , Your review:

    Comment Suggestion: What is your your first impression?
    : Cost: 0 free left 0 points, You have 0. (?) (Line numbers)
    Ratings:

Comments

  • Justin Spaulding
    May 3, 2006
    Edit | Reply

    Good story but...

    The story was good for what it was. If you keep writing, then you will develop more of a style. It just kind of falls into the same area as a lot of other stories on here. Nothing really sticks out. I'm not a great writer or anything. I'm just trying to be honest in my comment. I did like it, though. Justin. Check out something of mine sometime.

    beginning: 4, language: 2, plot: 3, overall: 6, ending: 3, dialog: 2, characters: 2.