Untitled For Now Chapter 2

Lila kissed Lucas and started unbuttoning his shirt. She slid his shirt off and then he helped her out of her blouse. He lowered her to the bed and started to kiss on her neck. Lila let her hands explore his powerful back. She started undoing his jeans and sliding his boxers off as he removed her skirt and thong. 1

He kissed her as he fingered her, making her squirm and moan. "Let me be as generous as you are," Lila said in between kisses. Lucas got on his back and she went down on him. Lucas gasped as she nibbled the tip of his head and then went back to sucking. "Baby, I can't take much more," Lucas groaned. Lila got up, grinned and said, "Gotta catch me first." "Oh, you tease," Lucas said.2

They ran around the room for a couple minutes then Lucas caught her and laid her down on the bed. "Take me, Lucas," Lila moaned. Lucas smiled and entered in her slowly. Lila's gasp was lost inside Lucas' mouth. His thrusts were soft at first but became harder as they began to reach their climax. They released inside each other and then just laid in each others arms. 3

Lucas got a glimspe of the clock and saw that it was 6 o'clock. "I better shower and get going," Lucas said. "You're still going to go on the date with her," Lila asked in shock. Lucas looked at Lila and said, "It hurts doesn't it?" Lila watched as Lucas dressed and asked, "What about your shower?" "I'm skipping it. Later," Lucas said as he walked out of the door. 4

Meanwhile Ken and Julia showed up to Bruno's party!5

Ken and Julia were greeted by Bruno at the door. "Welcome, enjoy the party," Bruno said with a smile. "Ken, I see that Chad is here, why don't you catch up with him while I chat with Bruno," Julia said. "Alright sweetie," Ken said gving her a kiss.6

Bruno lead Julia out to the back patio where it was nice and quiet. Julia shifted nervously in her chair. "You look so beautiful," Bruno said lovingly. "Oh, Bruno, I do not," Julia protested. 7

Bruno gave her an angry look and said, "Would I lie to you about your beauty? Do you think I say this to every girl that walks by in a dress?" Julia grabbed Bruno's hand and said, "I know you don't." "Then why can't I be with you," Bruno asked. "I can give you everything that you want and be everything you need.8

The tears formed in Julia's eyes as her heart felt like it weighed a ton. How could she choose between two great guys?9

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  • Upoiuoisjcokmi
    December 25, 2008

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    I agree on the first comment as well....You really cannot link an emotion to the characters very well...I liked chapter one better.
    -Raf-


  • LadyScorpio
    July 19, 2007

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    Good

    This was good. However, I do agree with the comment below me. Not everything she said, but certain things she commented on. Like the conversations. First things first, girl, between the conversations you have to skip a line for a characters speech. Like, example...

    "Hey,"
    "Whassup?"

    Like so. This is not to say your writing isn't good, but it's too short. I think you should EXTEND your work more. Bring a little bit more "Drama," into the story. More suspense. I am learning this as well, because I am still a work-in-progress. However, you learn more when your practice. You grow.

    Nevertheless, I still love your work. ;D


  • bethany may
    May 27, 2006
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    hhhmmm

    I didn't like this much...because I can't link any emotion with the characters...they're conversations and lives seem very petty....and I can't feel for them...especially Lucas....keep writing it though....I may keep reading to see how it goes...Luv Caz

    overall: 4.